Your right, we will never see it coming.

plz update I'm so interested to see what happens next

Very good story here,and I'd like to read more of it. Please add more to this story.

Hey, guys. I just wanted to let y'all know that I wrote this as part of a Composition course assignment... I do have a second chapter written already that was not required to be posted on here if y'all really want me to post it. I personally think it's even better than this one ;). If you really want me to post it and keep this story going, I will. I wasn't expecting a response like this! If you really want an update, let me know and I'll post what I have :).

I see you haven't updated this in a year.

Please Update soon. IT'S SOOO FUCKING GOOD

more chapters plz! this is great, thx for this great writing! :)

Good job, you built up the suspense well, and even though I have never seen the movie I can still somewhat visualize whats going on. For instance when the guy hit her and hit her with his elbow. my only suggestion would be to possibly describe the characters more. For example what they are wearing etc. other than that great job.

Add to the ending since it is going to be a cliff hanger. Add suspense and descriptions. :) Other than that it is great. I love the dialogue and details with it.

Wow, you just jumped right into the darkest par to the movie. It is a powerful story you wrote. I think maybe you need little moments of joy to release some I the tension you build so well in your story. It is still quiet impressive that you give the audience such strong emotions for the characters though! Kudos on a well written story.