Reviews for To Ride Upon Svadilfari |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I just want to let you know that over the years, I’ve come back to your work time and time again! This story has accompanied through highs and lows, from high school thru Med school, and has remained wonderful throughout. Thank you! I hope someday the muse may strike you again and this will continue! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I will be honest this made me cry a little. you know the part the memories. trying to keep this spoiler free. but this is captivating. I'm looking forward to the next update. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Epic is right! I hope you find the time and strength to continue. And a big fic without an over arcing romantic plot is just fine with me. But Hermione definitely needs a counter-balance (Gah! Not Loki! Not these versions of the characters anyways. Maybe they'll become actually friends eventually. Maybe). Especially with Harry's influence null-and-void now. The girl has some serious hold-ups. With Harry surgically removed from her personality i hope the relationships with her new boys - Bleiki, Jorry, and Dark Elf princeling specifically - grow into what she needs so that stick can finally be removed from her arse. |
![]() ![]() ![]() caladbolg powered by a dragon's magic should be able to cleave pretty easily through that ship |
![]() ![]() ![]() Harry's got the friggin rainbow sword!? how about some shock and awe from our godlings? |
![]() ![]() ![]() let's just ignore that Odin totally saw Hermione naked |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, now I would say Harry's acting a bit more like a partner. Scenes like that are what were missing from the earlier chapters for their partnership to be anything but in name. He just brought something to the table that wasn't secondary like his magical power or dragon form. Maybe you shouldn't have been so quick to ignore what people were saying. The difference is night and day to me now. |
![]() ![]() ![]() My ten cents from previous has nothing to do with Harry not being the mc, nor from me thinking Harry was particularly impressive in the series. This isn't Harry from the books, it's a radically different person with another decade under his belt. I think their "partnership" is full of holes because he isn't being allowed to act like that different person, or you've kept him as the dumb book version in every way except for his extra powers. Meanwhile, it doesn't need to be said how much more important Hermione seems. The scales aren't being balanced right. You've in no way written something I can define with having a cool partnership between characters. This story just doesn't do that well. I think I described it pretty well when I called them a powerful idiot and his master. They have pretty much the same relationship those brothers in One Punch Man had. The brute and the brains. Bodybuilder and the scientist. To maybe help you see where I'm coming from, you've basically done what the Harry Potter series did except you replaced Harry with Hermione. The other two characters are friends, and they did some useful stuff sometimes, but it's pretty obvious which one matters more. You can't call that a story about a partnership. You aren't portraying what it means. Instead it's a character who if you don't feel like being charitable has hanger-on's. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Kind of feel like only Hermione got any of that Hit Wizard training. I get this is mostly her show, but don't ignore back story to make it so. If he had the same training he should be able to notice Loki's weirdness as well. After all, that very same training is what's allowing her to pick up on the inconsistencies. Was he just not a very competent hit wizard? All muscle, no brains? A surface level feeling of something being off is exactly what he needed to express. You just made him out to be easily distracted and incapable of reading into evidence, like any other powerful simpleton with a smarter master. Good thing Hermione was there or he would've been absolutely clueless. I don't think you're doing a very good job writing them like partners. |
![]() ![]() ![]() All the power in the world is useless if u allow yourself to be knocked out like a common thug. You might as well not have it. I do no care whether it was for the plot or just some idea of tension but "heroes" that make such deadly mistake suck despite the fact they keep surviving. Btw. She is supposed to be more powerful than normal wizards who are already more durable than humans. Getting knocked out that easily makes no sense. |
![]() ![]() Harry and Hermione are such Mary Sue's I want to fucking gag. Disgusting writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the amount of world building you have done |
![]() ![]() ![]() So glad to be rereading this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awe it ended...no more? Haha I wonder where you plan to this...I started reading last night and ended today haha hoping more would appear |
![]() ![]() ![]() Amazing story! Thank you! |