|Reviews for Eternity in an Hour|
| JanieNine chapter 1 . 3/13
I really liked this story, mostly the historical connections present. I know that I'll never be a history major, simply because I'm not interested enough in what happened in the past (I'm more of a current events and in the last century type of a gal), but this was really good! Kept my interest, certainly. I'll probably continue reading onward, which is not usual for me with a Dramonie story.
Also, I love the disease bit! I'm a huge fan of studying epidemics, pandemics, and the like. I love looking for origins, causes of disease spread, etc. So this story was super interesting to me.
The last thing I really liked was that you didn't have Draco get rid of that cynicism. I like that he changed partway but not all the way. It gets really annoying for me to read a converted Draco who is simply too converted to be believable.
| autumn midnights chapter 4 . 3/10
I love the snark between Hermione and Draco. I'm a sucker for banter and sarcasm, and you wrote it so well here. I can definitely imagine them snarking at one another as adults working together - because even if Draco has reformed a bit, he'll never be 100% nice and sweet - and I think you did a wonderful job of keeping them both in-character. I love Draco's comment about Percy, especially, and how even Hermione can't stop herself from being amused by that one.
I really like how things came full circle here - how Hermione and Draco are going to have the chance to start over again. I usually hate DracoHermione, to be honest, but I enjoyed the story so much, and I really love your writing style, and I was able to overlook my usual opinion of the pairing. As in other chapters, your writing style is very good - it's very eloquent, and it flows well.
The only thing I have to criticize about this chapter is that it was short - I really wish you had included more detail about Hermione jumping back in time, about her stopping the project that let the curse loose, etc.
This was truly an amazing story, though. I really enjoyed reading this!
| autumn midnights chapter 3 . 3/9
Hermione's plan is incredibly intriguing. I'm not really surprised that she was able to come up with something like this, and I really like that Hermione used her intelligence instead of just waiting around Malfoy Manor for the inevitable to happen. I really like the line about how in the face of a true crisis like this, Hermione was calm, even though she had panicked during exam time at Hogwarts.
I like the inclusion of the possibility of paradoxes and universe-altering events and all the other issues that arise with time travel - you presented it in a very well-written way, without going overboard on the technical details or waving it away entirely. I like Hermione's decision to go through with this plan despite all that, also - it does make sense, considering what a dire situation they're in.
A couple small SPaG things - you put we'll instead of well, in the phrase 'may well exist', and 'not just out there' should be 'not just us out there'.
The proposal scene was sweet. I don't ship these two at all, but I love the way you write here - the romance is very beautifully done, and it doesn't overpower the creativity and intrigue of the plot. I also like that you included the whole situation about Hermione being a Muggle-born and how that interfered in their relationship a little, because that would definitely be a big issue.
Looking forward to the last chapter!
| Shivering.Shadow chapter 4 . 3/9
I have to say, this wasn't what I expected at all for the final chapter! I did make a little squeal of happiness when I realized that Hermione and Draco would once more have to opportunity to fall in love, but it was tempered by the thought that maybe they were existing in a never ending loop of events, with Hermione always inevitably going back in time. I would have liked to see how the time-jumps occurred - if they even worked when she approached her past self. The final chapter made me ask more questions than it answered, but in a way that was almost more satisfying. Thank you for writing this, it really was wonderful.
| Bad Mum chapter 1 . 3/9
A nice mixture of fiction and history here: I like the thorough set-up to the plague. Hermione being in the thick of trying to find a cure makes perfect sense, and I can see Draco being in on it too, having seen the error of his ways in the war. A good start to a story.
| autumn midnights chapter 2 . 3/8
I really like the inclusion of Ron and Harry in this chapter, and how each of them are dealing with this so differently. The separation between the trio, and how each one is doing something entirely different, was a lovely way to emphasize characterization, and I really think you did a good job guessing what these characters would do in a circumstance like this.
The fact that Hermione and Ron were still on very friendly terms was absolutely wonderful. Character bashing annoys me, and it's something so commonly seen in DracoHermione fics; having Ron as a perfectly decent character here really emphasized the quality of the story, and gave it a very mature feel.
The inclusion of Morag MacDougal was wonderful - I love when authors include minor characters, even if it's not the focus of the story. I like that you developed the DracoHermione relationship a bit more in this chapter and actually explained some of how it started.
As in the last chapter, I really like the way you ended this - it really leaves me wondering what's going to happen next.
| autumn midnights chapter 1 . 3/7
The plot of this is really intriguing. I really like how you set it up in the first chapter, explaining the origin of the pandemic and how it was created, as well as why it didn't pose a problem until this point in time. I really also like the explanation for why wizardkind wasn't affected at first, also - it makes sense, since they are far more isolated, that it would take a little longer before it started to affect that community.
The inclusion of Carthage's backstory - actually telling it from the point of view from someone who was there, instead of just having Hermione think about it - was well-written. I really like your glimpse at magic in such a historical time; it was extremely interesting to read about.
SPaG was very good, and I didn't notice any mistakes in that regard. I'm a little shaky on the idea of the Ministry using email; even though I'm sure some of the Muggle-borns would try to introduce the idea, electronics don't work well in areas where there's a large amount of magic use, like Hogwarts or the Ministry.
The DracoHermione relationship seems a little bit sudden, like there's not enough development behind it, although maybe it'll be developed in future chapters more.
I really like the way you ended this chapter, also - it's a very powerful ending sentence that leaves me as the reader wanting to know more about what happens next.
| Shivering.Shadow chapter 3 . 3/5
Of course she's building a time turner - her brilliance is astounding, and I admit that I'm glad you actually had Hermione do something with it. Draco's reaction to that revelation was perfect, as was the way you described that moment. That there would never be anything like it again, because they would never be the exact same people again. You managed to convey the seriousness and desperation of what they were doing so well, especially considering everything will be done in five-hour jumps, if that even works. I teared up at Draco's telling Hermione about proposing, and then again at their quiet and terribly sad goodbye. Very well done, and I noticed no SPaG errors.
| Lillielle chapter 4 . 2/26
Oh, this was brilliant. I intended to only read the first chapter, but I had to read all of it. My only quibbles story-wise is that a) the history lesson, so to speak, in the first chapter is a bit drawn-out...I honestly found myself skipping bits if I'm honest and that b) the last chapter is rushed a bit, and it would have been nice to see a *little* more of what exactly Hermione did, and how that actually worked. I love the fact that Hermione and Draco's potential relationship is open-ended at the end, with the possibility of it happening again, even if it would work out who knows in what ways. The whole idea of this is glorious, and I love it. At first when Hermione was coming up with the Time Turner, I was afraid she was somehow going to try go to all the way back in the past, to stop the curse in the first place. XD I am very glad she didn't attempt that! I can't see it working out well at all. Although I do wonder what safeguards she's come up with to prevent anything from *ever* cracking open that particular little death bottle. Very, very gorgeous story, and I love it.
| Shivering.Shadow chapter 2 . 2/25
This was just as excellent as the first chapter. The idea of magical microbiology was fascinating, and it was a great link to make - seeing Hermione's parents falter at the the idea of a disease that magic nor science could cure. (Having them stay at Malfoy Manor was a shock, and a good one. Seeing people unite in the face of certain death.) I really loved your character development! Harry's was predicable, even if it was tragic - and Ron's was absolutely fantastic. I teared up a bit at his conviction and at his and Hermione's last goodbye.
Learning about Draco and Hermione getting to know one another in Edinburgh was wonderful. Hermione's reminiscing was very well-placed in the chapter - a little spur of of happy memories before moving on to Lucius' death. The realization that it wasn't just humans dying was striking, and I'm really interested to see where you're going with this, even if it is only tragic last moments.
| MaxRide05 chapter 1 . 2/20
Oh, wow - I quite liked this. It's an interesting concept and you wrote it really well, especially with the extract from Aulus' time. I am curious about one thing though: did the Roman wizard-soldiers have physical shields as well? It seems like they might have, after all, they'd need their wand for other spells.
I would never have thought of Caesar as a wizard... But the meld between the Muggle word and the Wizard one is intriguing, and seamlessly written. I'm really curious about this disease now.
The Draco/Hermione relationship seems quite rushed, even though you did actually show it. I find it strange that when Hermione first thought of Draco it was as 'Draco,' and not, 'Draco Malfoy,' but then I suppose they had had the course of a whole year to progress from fellow Hogwarts students to unlikely friends and then to lovers. So a little familiarity isn't that strange.
There weren't any SPaG mistakes either, so all in all this was a really good start to an interesting premise.
| Shivering.Shadow chapter 1 . 2/19
This was a complete treat to read. At first, I was afraid you were going somewhere with zombies, and had more than a sigh of relief that that wasn't the case. I was impressed while reading your 'historical' account of what had happened to incite the pandemic. The mention of Scipio needing to learn that mercy had no place in battle was fantastic, and that was one of the best uses of a historical flashback I have ever encountered in a fic. You did a great job incorporating real events and people in a believable manner, while giving the reader a really intriguing look at magic users and their interactions with muggles in centuries passed.
The evolution of Draco and Hermione's relationship, as well as the strides Draco had made in not being a jerk were great to see. I look forward to reading the rest of the story!
| Ralinde chapter 4 . 1/30
Hmm not the last chapter I was expecting to be honest. I would have liked to see a more detailed report of how Hermione managed to fix things in Tunis. Since the previous three chapters are full of detail and inklings of bigger things, I'm actually a bit disappointed that what promised to be such a big part of the story is almost completely skipped and told in only a few sentences.
I do like the way both she and Draco 'start over' as there is a premise of something more for them in the future (the fact that I'm kinda hoping they'll get back together is saying something about your writing skills, since I'm normally not a fan of Dramione...).
On the whole, I think you have a very original creative story and I like your weiting style. It has a certain 'calmth' over it that fits the story perfectly (sorry, can't explain it any better).
I absolute love the fact that you gave magic a solid rooting in ancient history and that you've interwoven it with Muggle history.
| Ralinde chapter 3 . 1/30
Trust Hermione to come up with a plan like that.
I think it's good that you also show the limitations of her plan and her abilities, and the fact that she has no idea whether she'll come out alive, but she's going to do it anyway.
It can go wrong on so many levels, especially beacuse she can only go back 5 hours and will have to repeat this proces over and over again in the hope that none of her former selfs will be scared the hell out and refuse to cooperate.
The scene between her and Draco was bittersweet, they both know it might very well be the last time they see each other.
| Ralinde chapter 2 . 1/30
What I like in this chapter is that even though Hermione is with Draco now, you're not bashing Harry or, as most often seems to happen, Ron. I also like the background history you gave them, how they didn't fall head over heels in love, but discovered their common grounds because they were collegues who turned into friends and only then into lovers.
I find it interesting to see how Harry, Ron and Hermione respond differently to the imposing treat, because all paths make sense in a way and everyone deals with such things differently, there's never any telling how you would react until the moment is there.
The Malfoys taking in the Grangers to help protect shows just how much they have changed, like Draco himself has.
Lucius' departure places a certain sense of enevitable fatality on the story, which is only augmented by the dyimg bees. It gives me as reader a feeling that now literally all is lost (it probably isn't, since you have two more chapters left, but we'll see. ;-))