Anyone else get phineas and ferb vibes at the end there?

There seriously needs to be a rated M version of this story.

LOL That DBZ reference in chapter 2.

When Shu says that metal is simply another form of earth, he's obviously talking about bending, but... Toph is supposed to be the founder of the Metalbending discipline, and that specific event (or its Avatar of the Gods-counterpart) has not happened yet. I didn't bring this up in the last chapter when Naruto used Metalbending during the invasion of the Northern Water Tribe in the preview because it's Naruto for heavens sake, so him being able to Metalbend before it was invented in canon doesn't really mean much. However, someone else using it before it was invented in canon does mean something, so...

Just last chapter, Naruto said "Only a few weeks together and she was already like a sister or sorts to him but more than that; she was family", and now, Naruto is already kissing her. I mean, for various reasons I knew that they would be together eventually, but I just figured that there would be more of a transition between their relationship being pseudo-familial and becoming romantic. Well, if their relationship ever really was pseudo-familial then the transition probably happened in the background, but I had expected at least a little coverage on it. And it's not really all that important either, it's just something that I was thinking about.

So... what does this harem include? No? Okay then, time for an "proper" review. It's coming out marvelously, but the first person narratives are rather irritating in my opinion. Using third person allows for the writer to improvise and change ideas midway if they want while also adding suspense to the story as anything can happen. Furthermore, spelling needs to be checked, perhaps beta-ed? There was only one mistake that I do recall but it is still there. Nevertheless, great story. Very different from others I've seen

Omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg plz update.. This is soooooo awesome I can't wait to read more. This was an AMAZING STORY

Or should I introduce myself not as Maxine, but as "Hyacinth"?

I love this story!

But can we also get some flashbacks next time?

I wanna see how THEY died, if you know what I mean...

Like, did Hinata and Naruto even had a chance to have kids?

Who did Sakura end up with?

You have to tell us somehow!

Ja ne!

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Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.

I love this!

Just saying, you really need to keep this going.

Great story so far. My only complaint is how you're taking way too many lines from the show and having them used word for word. The writing of the show was great, but it should never be quoted constantly in another work of fiction. It takes away rather than adding. I would just let things flow normally. Don't try to force the dialogue.

Perhaps it isn't abandoned how wonderful. I truly enjoy this story and hope you'll update soon despite it being months and months. Just as I love several of your other works.
I guess my only complaint is Naruto's seemingly lack of forethought for this whole story. I mean shadow clones would have done so much to defend and help. Of course it would rob the story of tension and therefore much in the way of interest, but I think recently of the June fiasco and how it seems wierd to me that Naruto wouldn't have her under clone surveillance. Again story plot intrigue good writing yadda yadda yadda. It's a damn good story.
Can't wait til the next chapter
Thx ;)
Thx ;)

Why'd you make Azula older? She's the younger sister by two years you know that right? Though these questions seem to be irrelevant as this story looks to be abandoned. Anyway imma finish what there is the writing is good there's no denying that