Very interesting story, I enjoyed all of it. It's very good I wasn't sure how it was going to end but it was a very beautiful story with a beautiful ending. Good job!

it's good but you seemed to forget that even tho ferio is seriously sarcastic and sweet he is also truly awkward. He dosent know how to show his affections twords fuu, other than the occasional tentive gesture.

Wonderful.

You made it! You finished it!

Congratulations. You must know by now that many fics in the 'net end up unjustly orphaned. Thank you for finishing your story.

I love it when MKR fics focus on Fuu, she has just the right amount going for her. She doesn't have Hikaru's earnestness or Umi's nerve but that means good authors can explore her other traits and tell interesting stories. You decided to give her the "Nova" treatment (which, in years of reading MKR fics both in English and Spanish, I have never seen) and it kind of works. It would've helped to set that up earlier in the story and have that character interact more with the others, I can only imagine what great situations you would've conjured out of that. For how it develops here, you have the right idea. I just wanted more.

Forrest feels a little too Gary Stu - he sure looks a *lot* like Ferio-, although that didn't stop me from seeing how he and his worldview would clash with Ferio's. More interactions with Fuu would've gone a long way to establish that she would take him seriously over Ferio as a suitor. Also, Gia just up and kidnapping Fuu and not being called out on it felt slightly wrong. My biggest peeve, though, concerns Ferio's test where he sees Forrest going all Chris Brown on Fuu and figures "nah, that's not my boy Forrest" and passes. His seemingly not thinking about her feelings first - true, she was in on it the whole time, but he's vying for her heart! - struck a wrong cord there. It didn't ruin the fic, or the character as that answer still displays a level of empathy for his peers, but the scene could've used a re-write. It could've used a different framework, even expanding upon it would've improved it.

I didn't read all nine chapters just to complain. You had the absolutely right idea to make the story as short as it is, and you have to take credit for how the title at first seems to apply to Fuu but then switches to her suitors' story. The tests also reveal how we expect our significant others to behave against how they actually behave, and you didn't use too much exposition to show the readers this, instead letting Ferio and Forrest figure it out on their own. A lot of authors - including published, famous ones - have serious problems with exposition but you reached a good balance there. The parts with Gia explaining what's up don't show that same level of care, but the readers needed it anyway, so kudos on handling that too.

Again, congratulations on finishing your fic. It wasn't perfect, but it has a part of you in it. And no one has any right to dispute that. Keep writing.

Still a cool story. I am glad I read it again.

Isn't this chapter 2 instead of 4?

Cool two chapters

Oh so very good a chapter. Yay!

Cool chapter.

Cool chapter

Maybe the three chapters are good but all four should be spaced out better. As I do think big paragraph blobs are hard to read.

Maybe awesome

interesante tu historia pero actualiza pronto