Reviews for Changes
kkpWn chapter 1 . 9/3
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Edhla chapter 2 . 3/4/2014
This chapter is as strong as the first, showing the minutiae and cares of Laura's day-to-day life (a seeming parade of chores. Joy! But realistic.)

I was a little disappointed that you dropped the notion of Laura's head "swimming with thought" for a few paragraphs, and lines like "Laura felt angered" tell of her anger rather than show it.

A few missing commas, like:

["... There are more beans ripened than I planned on," Laura stated.] (Incidentally, "stated" is a bit of a said-bookism; "said" is fine there.)

A bit more head-hopping between Laura and Rose :) But I really like the details you use here to illustrate Rose's discontent, and that's a great hook to the next chapter... which I hope you will write x
Edhla chapter 1 . 3/4/2014
I liked this slice of life for the family, and the characterisation of Rose in particular. There was a tendency to tell details rather than show them (Laura's age, Rose's age, her children, her siblings, etc - I think you could thread that info into the story at different times rather than outright state it at the beginning.) I liked details such as the coming storm making the air feel thick. You did change perspectives from Laura to Rose mid-chapter, which also seemed a little haphazard, but nothing outrageous. Enjoyed this chapter x