lol should make it magical ninja timeskip no jutsu: 4 years

lol

It's good

isn't danzo on the run?

my only thing is that Itachi kinda just goes fuck Sasuke Naruto is better. even though Sasuke has lived with them sense birth

One of if not the best Naruto fic on here

Shit grammar

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

What the fuck is this lore (looovee the fanfic)

Enjoyable read honestly.

Plot: 6/10 (It delivered on the emotional sense... but I feel like if this had a new more chapters instead of the rush that was Itachi being in Akatsuki, Obito's treatment (that cost you an entire point to be honest, all writers must HATE Obito's guts, they never give him any respect in these fanfics), Naruto being with Sakumo at the fire INSTEAD of a scene where he is with his parents, and I feel like the best part of the story was the Kurenai plot twist.

Character Development/Story: 7/10 (In Naruto's case, it's a solid 10/10 but this is overall. Kyuubi/Hikari/Kurama needed more work, I was happy with Kurenai's character, Itachi was going pretty good until the Akatsuki thing that got downplayed into oblivion, once again lost two points for insufficient building on the villain side (except Madara, he doesn't even need to be built as a character, he's Madara fucking Uchiha.)

Continuity/Logic: 6/10 (Lost a point for the Mangekyo unlock method. Then there's the sterile Itachi crap that got straight reversed, there is the small matter of the Bingo Book title for Naruto being different)

Pacing/Creativity: 5/10 (Genuinely, the pacing was alright at first... but you made the mistake that so many over Naruto fanfic authors do and skipped over the training arc with little to no information of what went on! Personally, I think this deserved maybe 5 more chapters: 3 for a look back on life that covers some childhood memories and the training arc.. just stuff we never saw that could be important to Naruto as a character, and 2 for Akatsuki buildup and some afterlife stuff with the family. Creativity wise, I liked that you featured Naruto having a genin team... I think this is an underrated concept in Naruto fanfics! I love seeing it. Though, maybe add a 6th chapter or a subtle mention that Naruto had to go through leadership tests before he got the genin team because uh.. worrisome. Then again, with the state of the Academy in canon, I suppose it never mattered.)

The story was pretty good, the writing could have been better. Still, I had fun reading, so thanks for posting.

it was good and i liked it

he's 15 and he's got a 2 year old child? the fuck? nah I'm out.