Reviews for Inseparable |
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![]() ![]() ![]() cute story |
![]() ![]() ![]() awesome story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story from beginning to end can't wait to see what you do next! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like Selene as a name for Luna's mom, and so many people use it in their stories that I think it's actually considered fanon. But, just in case you want to know for the future: though I am not sure if it was ever mentioned in the books, both Wikipedia AND the HP Lexicon say that Luna's mom's name was Pandora. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Uh give the stone back to the Flamels |
![]() ![]() ![]() What of Nagini, riddles snake familiar that was also a horcrux? I am thinking that the explanation is that Nagini was created after Voldemort returned to some semblance of consciousness in Albania. Sine that did not happen, no Nagini and one less horcrux. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hate that Bill and Chaelie were included even though they never were implicated! Great story, well done! I thoroughly enjoy your writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lodge logic at it's finest! Hopefully you all know that brand! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice plot! |
![]() ![]() There was absolutely no need for the amount of text dedicated to children's bodies having sex or having sexual thoughts. I understand that their souls may have been 30 but their bodies were 11. Which means, in your story, 30 year old Harry was attracted to an 11 year old body and vice-versa. And it added absolutely nothing to the story beyond you getting to write about children performing sexual activities. |
![]() ![]() I don't know if Harry Potter wiki existed before you wrote the story, but Luna's Mum is called Pandora. It's also Luna's middle name and still fits to Greek mythology. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Frying Pan to the rescue! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Don't care, I love this. |
![]() ![]() The problem with these do-over stories is that the protagonists simply know too much from the outset, and therefore it is too easy for them to deal with their adversaries. Kind of kills the suspense, in particular if other important characters act (supposedly) the same way as in the previous time line. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it! |