Reviews for Inseparable |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Great story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome Short ff 10/10 was More Romance and Drama than Family i think. and would cry again |
![]() ![]() ![]() 100,000 /10 I would have added a little Ginny bashing tho |
![]() ![]() You skipped over them using the diary and a few other things, making all that planning and work (both for you writing the story and the characters within) completely pointless. I think you must have realized that you couldn't pull off how to get those things into place in the story to use them properly, so you scrapped it and gave Dumbles a Deux Ex Machina to end the story prematurely. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Enjoyed it. Thanks. |
![]() ![]() Okay, the Gringotts bit was completely unbelievable. Simple glamour charms and disillusionment charms to get past the goblins' security measures? And a stunner to take out a dragon. Really? Dragons are magic-resistant. And then how would they have gotten into Bella's vault once they got to it? It's not like they had her key. The whole thing just doesn't make sense. |
![]() ![]() This was really good to read, well done! |
![]() ![]() What a wonderful story, thank you for sharing it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() A relatively short story, but well told with a consistent theme throughout Well done! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beautiful story, thank you for sharing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A great story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story. I have not read a time travel like this one. Loved how you dealt with Dumbledore. Thanks for writing and sharing |
![]() ![]() ![]() Such a sweet ending. Loved seeing Albus and Ron lose their heads like that. A brilliant finish. |
![]() ![]() ![]() She Rapunzel'd the old prick. What a classic. Just brilliant. These transitional chapters are so tricky to get right, having to pop left and right showing all the stuff going down at once. Nice work keeping it cohesive so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sweet opening chapter. If you're going to fuck with time, you go big. Curious what is to come given Voldemort has been squashed entirely in the very beginning of the story. |