|Reviews for The Lion and The Serpent|
| blackcurrent chapter 26 . 12h ago
Very different plot. I hate Dumbledore here. I hope he'll die in the next story. There are some spelling mistakes. I like the story though.
| Gleas chapter 26 . 3/13
Unsatisfying ending... what's the title of the next one?
| Gleas chapter 25 . 3/13
Good heavens! Dumbledore is dumb... I mean Harry could have died in there... blasted twinkling old manipulative coot! If I was Harry and Sev, I would start ignoring him... politely.
| Gleas chapter 23 . 3/13
GAHHHH! Dumbledore and his blasted secrets...
| Gleas chapter 20 . 3/13
I hope Harry comes around :/
| Gleas chapter 15 . 3/13
| Henry Uchiha chapter 26 . 3/11
Can't believe this story is finished. Thank you so much for a great story to read! Can't wait to read your next one.
| Guest chapter 26 . 3/10
Not a bad story and it's a bit sweet too !
The Crimson Mage.
P.S: I hope that I see more of your work one day in the future !
| maria chapter 6 . 3/10
Here is a very critical and long review…
So far I’m finding your work a little ... crude. You write like a 12 year old (sorry but its true). Its toooo straight forward. "And then this happened and then this and then that...” its not capturing, its too simplistic and obvious and without plot or character development , there is no explanation for the characters feeling. Why does Draco like Harry, Why didn’t Harry push him away, Dracos suicide attempt was too sudden and without justification. Harmonies sympathetic behavior was too forced, why was Harry calling Malfoy Draco at the start? Oppressed undiscovered feelings? Where did they come from? Where was Snape for the first three Mondays of the term? Why did Narcissa not keep in touch with her son? Plus, seriously?! If you dont pass your OWLs you get expelled? Wow!
Also why is Draco being such a girl? Mood swings? Crying? Needing acceptance? Really? If he was trained as the pureblood Malfoy heir, then he should be able to wear the Malfoy mask. If he was doing so well in all his classes, why doesn’t he defend himself? Isn’t he a Slytherin? Isnt the story called the Lion and the serpent? He should be sly and sneaky and deceiving and get back at anyone who dares miss treat him. Yes he is without the support from his family but he needs to grow a back bone not just start going out with Potter and let him fight his battles for him (unless hes pulling all the strings) ;)
If you wanted the characters to have new/original none cannon personalities then ok… keep going… but if not, you need to go back to square one and start with the language the boys are using. They sound dumb. They act dumb and you rated this fic as Mature yet the characters speak like first-years!
| Gea Mari chapter 26 . 3/9
Oh come on! You can't stop here! There better be a sequel that gives Draco and Harry a happy ending!
| SlytherinBabe77 chapter 25 . 3/9
This is such an amazing story, I read all of this in 3-5 hours. How you portray Dumbledore in this confuses me but meh it's still amazin
| Henry Uchiha chapter 25 . 3/9
first of all, thank god you updated, it put a big smile on my face. Two; I never thought I would ever say this but I'm beginning to like Snape more than Dumbledore! and three; as ever it's an amazing chapter, though I wouldn't expect any less. I hope you write more stuff like this.
| Rebecca chapter 24 . 3/6
Please update this story. I read it not knowing it was incomplete and now I am disappointed. You have done a good job so far. I would like to see how it ends :)
| anonymous chapter 24 . 2/14
I just love this story, hope more will come soon :)
| Henry Uchiha chapter 24 . 2/12
Must read more! Please update soon. You're writing is amazing