|Reviews for Reports That Never Were|
| StellarMage99 chapter 3 . 11/29/2015
Poor Xion XD
| khdayskh1314 chapter 4 . 3/3/2014
I swear. This is the first good rough fan fiction that I've read in a really long while.
Coming from a fairly decent roughing writer myself (although I'm going through although really long hiatus right now), your writing is nearly perfect. I see the effort you're putting into the piece and the flow of the overall story is so enriching! And what I love the most is how you write out the iinteraction among the characters. You make demyx and xigbar seem so real. It's a fictional side of them that I've never seen before. But it perfectly fits Into their current set personalities. Of course I've seen the whole xigbar matchmaker thing. It's pretty cliche actually. But the way you put it to paper is different. I think the reason for it is the very unique interaction between xigbar and Roxas especially. In your most recent chapter it was nearly seemed like competition between the two when Roxas was so confused and Xigbar knows exactly what's going on. You display the dialogue in a nice way that makes the reader feel that xigbar is playing Roxas into a trap. But in the end he isnt. He is en lightening the boy, and in the last chunk of dialogue it almost seemed as iif Roxas was in denial. But he wasnt. He just had a sort of...epiphany you could say.
You're turning a cliche story idea into something unique and special. And there is so much more I could compliment you upon. But I'm lazy. Lol. Please continue! I'll be sure to give more reviews! And who knows? You could motivate me into writing again.
| Anime Warrior chapter 4 . 1/26/2014
This isnt really a review, more of a request. Please, please, please continue writing! I my self prefere RoxasxXion over NaminexRoxas and RikuxXion, which of course leads to RikuxNamine. There have been a few other fanfics that do this love story but this is the best one out of all of them no competition! So please keep writing and thank you for reading this review.
| awesomefanficlova chapter 3 . 1/19/2014
I really like this story with Xion wanting to find so much about what love is and how it works. I found it HILARIOUS when Xigbar was teaching Xion Sex Ed. And when Demyx walked in on Xion and Roxas kissing. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Awesomefanficlova aka Skyy
(You can call me Skyy if you want to)
| Candasaurus chapter 3 . 1/13/2014
I am absolutely loving this. I love the particular characterization you used for Xiggy! It's my favorite for him (I like the father figure persona for him too, but this one is just too good).
Can't wait to read more!
| Pale18 chapter 3 . 1/5/2014
To begin, one of the highlights of this chapter is how used "doki" to describe a heartbeat to appeal to sensory imagery. Just think of how weird it be if you put "Heartbeat. Heartbeat. Heartbeat." or generic if you put "Beat. Beat. Beat."
I really like the parts of this chapter, but my complete favorite is Roxas trying to be inconspicuous in that formal tone and being so goofy-like confident that it's subtle. It lets a side of Roxas that most people forget about, despite him being Sora's nobody, shine through.
The Xion being educated seen I felt need to happen and was bad. It's noted she had a lot of questions still and this is a great way to fill in the gaps. It would have been worse if you had simply did a time skip and say she just read on it or if you had just ignored that premise.
And is this really posted raw? I would never had guessed because I never came across any glaring mistakes. Usually I spot those easily and it often destroys flow, but if there was any mistake here, I feel you held it together well.
Finally, I firmly believe that better quality story is worth it in the situations of a short scenes. Forcing extension too-often leads to drawn out situation and bad dialogue that would annihilate pacing and tone, so I see no problem if you deliver a good scene under 650 words.
The short chapters only bother me because I want to read more! I'll be waiting for the update!
| Sentinel07 chapter 2 . 1/4/2014
This is very good. Everyone is perfectly in character. Getting advise in this group isn't easy.
I look forward to the next one.
| Pale18 chapter 2 . 1/2/2014
I like this so far. It's really, really funny! And it's cute. I hope you update soon, because I'd love to read more. What I like is how you get the characters to interact with each other in an engaging and lively manner, because it really gets the image across. I also like the pacing and your ability to be descriptive without your writing becoming stale. And lastly, I really love how this storyline sort of skews into an alternate storyline where all members are present and the pressure of the canon storyline doesn't put borders on this plot. (It really exerts the possibilities you could write about!) Overall, I see much potential in this and am excited to see where it could go. Keep up the good work! (And thanks for the good read!)
| Hog s Head chapter 2 . 12/30/2013
Your writing is neither cheesy nor forced. You do excellent work, please keep it up.
| Warlord13 chapter 2 . 12/29/2013
Interesting, you've kept everyone in character and I'm curious to see where this is going but it certainly looks like fun, also did Zexion give Xion a porn mag?
| RTNknight chapter 1 . 12/22/2013
It's good to see your story again.
To be honest, I did play KH but never invest into this fandom that much. So I absolutely have no idea who these characters are. (It's good franchise, don't get me wrong). Anyway I digress, the general prose here is kinda nice, better than...ah it's gone now. -*- Try to stick around with this project and your skill will surely improve. :-)
Looking forward to reading the next chapters.