Reviews for Afternoon
Imperator Justinian chapter 3 . 1/14/2014
Sorry it's taken me so long to review this, but I would certainly say many of the post-beta changes you made were quite good and reflect very well with this chapter. Anyways, I hope to see how this story ends.
4fireking chapter 1 . 12/28/2013
Awesome! Now I feel like going to bed, but when I awake up, can you listen to a request of mine, please.
Imperator Justinian chapter 2 . 12/28/2013
I wouldn't say the ending was abrupt, but I hope we get to see a battle soon. I would like to say, I recall that either in the beginning of either Hanbei or Kanbei's story he (Kanbei) mentioned that he was "born with this face", to which Hanbei replied "and your kids will probably have it too." Anyways, a good chapter, it's getting easier to read.
Imperator Justinian chapter 1 . 12/28/2013
This isn't all too bad, certainly one of the better Conquest stories I have read. While I will say that your writing style isn't the easiest to follow since it seems to shift between a 1st and 3rd person perspective, I am interested none the less.