Reviews for Reflection in Steel
Symbolik chapter 3 . 3/5/2014
Nice story. I like the fact that the two sides didn't just immediately meet up and become friendly because they are both human.
Hellraptor chapter 3 . 3/3/2014
So much BS here, 25 km long battleship that fires only with kinetic weapons and whose void shields are destroyed by a couple of plasma shots (btw, what kind of a moron would make a PLASMA weapon function on the same principle as a kinetic one? There is absolutely no point in making it go faster - it has little to no mass and the speed will barely increase its dmg potential). Just go away from warhammer crossover and keep writing for halo, fanboi.
Zeph3r chapter 2 . 2/28/2014
Hey um . . .

Marines (and by extension Spartans), say Oorah.
Army grunts say Hooah.
Marines don't like being compared to army grunts.
So don't confuse the two, ever ;)

Also, why would an Army commander be aboard the Wotan? The army is like the PDF, they stay on planets and fight there, not go gallivanting about the universe in fancy spaceships.

Other than that, this is a really fun story! Keep up the good work ;)
logan greenberg chapter 3 . 2/25/2014
thank you for updating.
like the story. :)
Imperial Priest chapter 3 . 2/25/2014
Mmm, UNSC killin' their own fellow man..HERESY, they don't take the effort in fully understanding the Imperium :P Instead, they rant and be critical every little thing ignorant much? cx
HEXER chapter 3 . 2/25/2014
You seem to be very heavily biased towards the UNSC and the Spartans, Have you even consulted the
Warhammer wiki before you started to write this story? I recommend the article about the Space marines as a starting point they are far more capable than how you have written them.
Hyastud chapter 3 . 2/25/2014
Great chapter and love were this is going by the way however i dont like how the unsc scrutinizes the imperium ad weak. Its not even a shadow of the pre heresy human federation but already very powerful. There is a great quote about the Mechanicus (the Imperium's "tech-priests")"'The Mechanicus does NOT have the technology. They haven't been living on some fancy paradise planet since pre-Fall. Mars is an anarchic nightmare shithole the moment you leave the safe zones into the kilometres of labyrinthine corridors beneath it full of rogue machinery, self-aware and malevolent AI from before the Fall, and the daemon programs of the Heresy. EVERYTHING in the databases is fucked. The databases are fragmented over the entire surface to the extent that it would be impossible to see one tenth of the total files in the ludicrously extended life of a Magos even assuming that they are completely safe to visit. And they are files have been corrupted into madness by the Fall, and the unleashing of the most potent informational warfare systems ever to exist to defeat the Iron Men. Nearly all of Mars was rendered uninhabitable, what they live in now is built on the top of the ruins. They send archeotech expeditions in to find shit, nearly all of them never come back. The sheer number of rogue war machine running around in there is sufficient to rape the mind. Then came the Heresy, which was not earth-exclusive. Mars as the second most critical planet in the Imperium was the site of fighting nearly as ferocious as on Terra, with Mechanicus loyalists and Hereteks fighting tooth, nail, and mechadendrite everywhere. Ancient machines were unleashed, viruses both normal and daemonic unleashed into all the computer systems. Nearly every single stored record on Mars was rendered unusable, and those that survived are half the time self-aware and don't like you, or daemonic and actively try to kill you come back with a schematic, it is almost certainly gibberish, and if it isn't, it's probably corrupted into uselessness. If it does come back whole it was probably malevolently fucked with so that instead of a Lasgun power cell it's a fucking grenade set to detonate the second you finish building it. Why do you think they want off-world STCs so damned much if they had them all here? The fucking Heresy is why. Off-world they only have to contend with the Fall's war and its effects on the machinery plus twenty thousand years of degradation with no maintenance. But at least off-world it'll probably just not work instead of actively seek to kill do you think they seek to placate the Machine Spirit? It's because it exists. The fragments of trillions of self-aware programs, flourishing during the Dark Age of Technology and shattered by Man in his war with the Iron men, imprisoning the few who had not set themselves irrevocably into the machinery, a prison smashed wide open by the Heresy. Everything that can hold programming in the Imperium has a shard of a program in it. EVERYTHING. And you'd better fucking please it or it will do everything in its power to make your day shit. Sure, if it's a Lasgun it'll just not work or start shooting off rounds by itself, but if you piss off a Land Raider you can say bye-bye to half a continent. They apply these principles to things without spirits by habit, since they're so used to dealing with tanks that if not talked to just right might go rogue and annihilate the Manufactorum before they can be is why they do not like ANYONE fucking with technology, because it is so rare to find anything that just works it is critical it not be compromised. That, and they do not have the actual knowledge to fuck with it intelligently, just through experimentation, which inevitably leads to slaughter. Pressing buttons to see what works is fine in a 21st century computer, but it is a very stupid thing to do at the helm of a 410th century starship with the destructive power to end solar systems. The entire knowledge base of humanity was lost. Not forgotten, but outright lost. Everything at all, poof. Nobody knows anything because the Fall fucked everything up and the Heresy double-fucked it. To rebuild the theoretical framework needed to design new technologies that don't kill everyone near them would require starting from the ground up. They don't have the time, and they never gets on to the point of war and what it does to technology. Someone will parrot that it makes it go much faster. Yes, it makes practical applications of technology go much faster. It also utterly stops all research on the scientific theories behind those technologies. This means that when war chugs along for a decade or two things get done. It means when it goes on too long you run out of theories to turn into technologies, and then you run out of technologies to apply. You stagnate. When you have been fighting in a war for survival in a drastically overextended empire, this is what happens. You are desperate for any extra materiel that can possibly be produced. Half your entire fucking military might went rogue, smashed the half that stayed, leaving you with the tattered shreds of a war machine to keep hold of an empire that was reaching straining point with an army far larger. There is no time for the sort of applied research programs that took Man twenty five thousand years to develop, in a time of unprecedented growth and is also why the Adeptus Mechanicus insists on cargo cultism. It's because when you are dealing with things you barely understand because everything you knew about them was destroyed it is the safest and most reliable option. The rituals do not exists for mysticism, they exist because they are the most practical means of building, repairing and maintaining the equipment they have with the knowledge surviving. You don't understand why pressing that button makes it go, because the manual tried to take over your brain and the copies are all unreadable and the research base that would let you reverse-engineer it does not exist and cannot be are the Tau doing so well with their technology? Because they had peace. Eight thousand years unmolested by any enemy and they were helped the entire time by the most advanced biological race in the galaxy. Give the Imperium eight thousand years of peace and I can guarantee you it will be harder than it was during the Great some still don't get the idea, try this:Build a library, fill it with all human knowledge. You take it elsewhere when you need a book from it, but the book is only a simplified copy. You don't understand the real book, and you don't need to. Nobody takes the real books anywhere because why would you, when there's a whole library there?Now that library goes rogue and the maintenance machinery starts killing everyone any-fucking-where near it. Where the fuck did they all come from, you swear to god there weren't this many, and there weren't because they're using the library's information to fight their war. The government fights a battle that destroys the planet against these robots and tears apart the library to stop them using it, only to be destroyed in the process. The library is leveled, cast into flames, every book burned and every computer comes a man who worked there. He talks to the few surviving library workers, assembles their information, and starts rebuilding a city around the library and expanding it as the librarians find little scraps of paper and fragmented bits of files that stuck together just right read something. They rebuild a library from scrap on the ashes of the old. It isn't a shadow on the glory of the old, but it is all they the city turns on itself, kills its master, and the librarians turn to rage. Half of them kill the other half and destroy the remnants of the library because where they're going they won't need science. Everything burns, and the city is left to a scattered few survivors, walls open to the world, with the hungry predators Adeptus Mechanicus is the sole surviving librarian, desperately scrabbling through the ashes of paper and splinters of hard drives for anything to help him and the city he needs to survive just a second Imperium isn't grim because things suck by choice and could be fine if a sensible person came along. That sensible person wouldn't survive fifty seconds of the reality. The Imperium is grim because every single shit decision, every single sacrifice, every single death, every single man woman and child suffering a shit life in the worst conditions imaginable, is the absolute best that can be done. It is a study of the worst happening to everyone and what part of your humanity must be sacrificed today just to stand a chance of survival, and all it asks is whether or not it would have perhaps been better to die.' - Baron von Evilsatan"Just that alone really tells you a lot about the Imperium's situation.
Guest chapter 3 . 2/25/2014
This seems interesting. Please, do continue. This has been the Anonymous Guest, and I'll see you next time.
guest chapter 3 . 2/25/2014
No need for the chapter to be this long. Stop with the paper thin scrolling bars
SpartanCommander chapter 3 . 2/26/2014
I don't think they can accurately track something in slipspace.

Warp and Slipspace are two different forms of FTL so it's unlikely they can use methods to track things moving through warp the same way as slipspace.

Since it's a different form or reality than warp effectively the Wotan's likely invisible.
Imperial warlord chapter 3 . 2/26/2014
Awesome chapters.
Gespenster Jager chapter 3 . 2/25/2014
Glad to see you back. I've been looking forward to more from the Story.

I've always liked the methodological approach you take to the sudden crossing of a Halo crew into the 40k 'verse. Like anyone with our sense of morals and reasons many things would look wrong, it's easy to generalize. You've managed to incorporate this as well as an active attempt by members of the Wotan to start studying the fundamental pillars of the 40k 'verse.

As you've laid out, they are aware now of the mix-match add-hoc tech available. And their encounter with Space Marines brought a good theoretical question of why they would need it.

I am wondering how you will cover Chaos with them as it's something that should alarm them. They've taken everything they've learned with a pinch of salt but I'm pretty sure some people might decide to set up a just-in-case scenario...that's one of the interesting things I'm looking forward to seeing you tackle.

The Inquisitor is interesting as well. He wants the ship, but I am wondering if he'd be willing to set up an even trade. If he's a radical I could see him realizing they are fellow human beings stuck in their own galactic turmoil. With someone as powerful as him on their side (or perhaps another Inquisitor who steps in, supporting the Wotan) we could see some interesting developments.

Anyhows glad to see you back, I'll be looking forward to the next Chapters.
Puppet-Master2013 chapter 3 . 2/25/2014
Three Issues.

1) Though the Imperium is a cruel, fascist, ignorant and oppressive empire all that it is and has done have been necessary just as how the UNSC itself forced the colonies together and siezed control of the UEG in order to keep humanity united against the Covenant. Just as the Imps have skeletons in the closets, the 'Yoonies' have their own.

2) The kit they carry may seem obselete however it is very powerful. And I really doubt a SMART class AI can hack against a simple Imperium Vox channel seeing as they annihilated the 'Iron Men' against all odds.

3) As much as I love this story I have a mind to stomp on your nuts. Your story is starting to become s/3238754/1/Two-Galaxy-s-Saga by Darth Malleus.

3/5 stars so far.
Massgamer45 chapter 3 . 2/25/2014
Love the story so far and hope for more really soon.

It seems that the only way for the Wotan to get supplies for a extended period of time would be to open trade with the Tau. They are the closest technological to the Wotan and can most likely provide equipment and maybe even a small alliance. I personally love the Tau because they are the least dark race in the galaxy and while the Tau themselves lord over the other races in their empire they are still open to negotiation with other races.

They only way I see the Wotan getting home would be with the help of the Eldar since their web-way gates are the closest things to traveling to other dimensions if worked on.

I want to see a Spartan vs a Ork WAAAAAAGH!
Imperial warlord chapter 1 . 2/25/2014
Interesting story.
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