Reviews for A Brave New World
james.hofstetter chapter 5 . 2/12
oh wow, what an amazing story, update soon
Dark Neko 4000 chapter 5 . 12/30/2013
What will happen next time
parthaker chapter 1 . 12/30/2013
The biggest problems that I can see are what stop me from reading further. You are going to have Dumbledore bashing for one. Bashing is NEVER a good idea in fanfiction. Put some effort into developing your characters, and you'll find that your writing will improve exponentially. On top of that, you are making Harry the Heir to the Founders. Another big cliche. This was tolerable a few years ago, since the concept was fairly new, but now it's just overdone and makes for a bad story.
Linda chapter 4 . 12/29/2013
Really love your story and hope to read more soon.
Cherrie-san chapter 1 . 12/29/2013
Ach. The cat is going to be out of the bag now isn't it?
Moi chapter 4 . 12/29/2013
Intriguing.
Have you by chance mixed up a bit the use of the names Helga and Helena?
Jharry1960 chapter 4 . 12/29/2013
Love it!
Jharry1960 chapter 3 . 12/29/2013
Quite a twist! Glad it finally came up! Thanks!
god of all chapter 2 . 12/28/2013
Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.
PurpleBullet chapter 2 . 12/28/2013
I can't wait until you post the next chapter.
Evesgreenleaf chapter 2 . 12/28/2013
I'm looking forward to reading more
LM Ryder the Batty Bat chapter 1 . 12/27/2013
this is really good but it could do with a once over from a beta.
Jharry1960 chapter 1 . 12/27/2013
I like it so far. Thanks!
SenkoHasegawa chapter 1 . 12/27/2013
Ok, I liked this chapter, I'll look forward to the rest of the chapters
I hope you update soon!
Have a nice day!
Merry xmas!
Arabella Lee Smith chapter 1 . 12/27/2013
YOUR English is great!

Let me give you a couple of pointers.

In America we call it a "first aid kit."

Quicken up the process, not fasten up. in this case "fast" is used in its meaning of "hold tight." You fasten up a button, a boot, a coat, you can fasten something up by tying it, buckling it, even taping it closed. English is a tricky language, You are doing so well!

I believe the plural of animagus is animagi.

Sandwiches stored IN a bag, not at. Those pesky prepositions! Even native speakers have difficulties with them.

Mrs Figg in English. (no R) I know they changed some names in the translations.
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