Reviews for Fireborn
Serendipithy chapter 4 . 11/5
... I really hope Yuuko wasn't recruited the same way Kiruma is being recruited. This does not bode well for the family. :( I'm more surprised that no one has realized that something is amiss with her mother though. Wouldn't the neighbors have something to say if they never see her mother leaving the house?
Serendipithy chapter 3 . 11/5
I honestly for a second thought Kendo-sensei was Jiraiya, but then I know better than that... LOL. At the beginning, before the timeline was completely figured out, I thought he was Sakumo at first. Who else knows kenjutsu? This is making me curious...
SassySnowflake16 chapter 20 . 10/4
kunerai is super annoying. does she not know what no means
Leftwich08 chapter 34 . 10/3
Uh does kakashi have two arms or not...
Leftwich08 chapter 29 . 10/2
Your authors note just made it less real for me i dont pay attention to the little things so i wouldnt have noticed the age changes
Leftwich08 chapter 24 . 10/2
The only hard time im having with characters is what they look like... Hair and eye color and expression is not a complete picture and with "the redhead" doing experiments its so vague i can only picture nagato for his corpse path thingy
Leftwich08 chapter 17 . 10/1
Congrats... I hate you...
Leftwich08 chapter 4 . 10/1
*currently picturing several people in this story being ~censor~ and after having a burning hot then freezing cold metal jagged spike ~censor~* ok so i couldnt resist continuing the story but i took an extra dose of my as needed psyche meds and am thinking happy thoughts and taking breaks to do calming activities every few chapters *burns a picture of danzo* i have also decided you as well as a certain other author are too good at bringing emotions out of me genuinely and that is a true testament of skill... Themes of abuse are typically overdone and over dramatic but you had one intense scene at the start and ended it in a way that led to a comparatively worse situation... Now that youve managed to make me want to go on a killing spree through konoha will you be able to give me a good reason not to (yes i know its not really possible) and can you make me connect with the character and empathize with her and not just the situation...You have almost succeeded when you pointed out she refuses to be separated from her mom but in the end that and the refusal of charity and not drawing attention is all for that... How is she feeling though... Im gathering how by context of her thoughts but i am not feeling it with her... If i do i will be angrier still most likely but it will be a compliment to your writing not an insult... Granted some people dont like that level of intensity that being the case have you considered writing a novel?
Leftwich08 chapter 1 . 10/1
Reviewing halfway through the chapter... Kill that man brutally and violently... my sister saw my face and warned me not to give suggestions cause it apparently is not socially acceptable to have murder methods in mind so i hope you did something extreme... If not i will not hold a grudge it is your story and im biased... But i hope at the least he is flayed and then his wounds are scrubbed using an sos Pad with salt instead of soap then cauterized with hot irons... Ya know what I will finish the chapter tomorrow... good detail and such btw very well written or i wouldnt care... Though some character description would be nice so i can picture his face screaming in agony... Music time now bye...
Tick Tock Follow the Clock chapter 54 . 9/21
I just read this in a span of 2 days. I have no life.
Crowley chapter 54 . 9/20
This was very good. Every payoff for earlier foreshadowing felt satisfying. I'm not sure if it was suppose to be obvious or not but I never realized Sparrow was suppose to be Shisui. I love the ending with Kiruma visiting Gaara and how set up it was.
TheBeauty chapter 54 . 9/13
Somehow I was hoping for a family reunion. In a sense I got just that :P
HPikachu chapter 19 . 9/7
Can you explain where Apollo went? I'm not sure if I'm missing something, but to me he completely disappeared.
TheBeauty chapter 36 . 9/6
I don't understand... Minato died of a wound made by a sword even thoug he could easily transport himself to a hospital or call for a medic. Kiruma lived through a hand going through her stomach and being transported for a longer period of time till she finally get someone to look at it. Does it mean that she has some one hell of a lifeforce? It seems to me like Minato died too easily without much struggle...
ANasher chapter 4 . 8/19
I read this story on wattpad for the first time and now i say it here and i was like :O
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