|Reviews for The British Reformation|
| RAN chapter 3 . 8/10
she made an oath to not force him to return, but she is giving him an ultimatum to return in the guise of his welfare and using seduction to help things along. Harry should have exploded
| Lordlexx chapter 6 . 7/13
Disappointing..I had hoped for a Harry/Fleur story, not to get force-fed adding Ginny as well. Especially not with how much you forced her character to change and just shunted Hermione off to the side and let her go the JKR 6th year route when she turned off her brain.
It isn't Ginny hate. I don't actually hate Ginny but I also rather dislike the pairing, especially when it's based off canon and she just pops up out of nowhere and is suddenly just taking over the center stage of his friendships, totally ignoring the foundation and buildup of Harry's friendship with Hermione. I very much dislike stories that either downright ignores that or just warps it as bad as people do Ginny for the potions princess!Ginny. Both are terrible. I don't mind Ginny becoming a better friend, I like her as a character, but not at the expense of just pushing any other friends out just to do it.
You like the H/G pairing and that's fine. If the author gives her a good buildup and foundation for their friendship, and later relationship, then I don't really mind it either. But her just popping up and suddenly becoming the super friend out of nowhere is as a bad as JKR just suddenly making Harry have feelings for her out of nowhere and then not building their relationship at all and then end up married in the end. It's disappointing.
| Dreymord chapter 6 . 7/10
Why would there be any need for a potion to give Harry sons if he married both sisters? you said two daughters from different mothers would work.
| missgsmith51 chapter 5 . 6/20
Regarding your A/N at the top … I agree Fleur is trying to “eat her cake and still have it too.” Unfortunately, we all know that once you eat your cake, it’s gone! You can’t eat it and keep it, too.
Fleur wants to find out if there is a chance for her and Harry to make it as a couple before she lets go of any chance of keeping her job with Gringotts (in case they don’t work out). This is very understandable. The question is … how will Harry react if he finds out what she is trying to do BEFORE she tells him? I think he would see it as her trying to use him.
I believe Fleur would be on safer ground to just lay her cards on the table. Confess her growing feelings for Harry and ask Harry if he feels he could fall in love with her. She should also confess the time constraints and other demands the Goblins have placed upon her. Explain that she is not trying to use or trick him. It is just that if he decides he does not love her or is not interested, she at least has the “safety net” of a job when they go their separate ways. Harry is big on honesty, and her actions could look dishonest if he finds out on his own. I think, if she is honest with him, Harry will honestly open himself to the idea. Otherwise, he will try to guard his heart to avoid being rejected. JMHO, of course.
| kiwihipp chapter 12 . 6/15
I like that you offer two very different endings, but it also closes the story in a way that we all are hopefully happy. Hard on most of the witches and wizards who lost their magic, but better than all losing out.
| kiwihipp chapter 11 . 6/15
A different but very great story, with a topic not many of us feel comfortable with, but dealt with well here.
| Guest chapter 9 . 6/7
First thing, this is something that always bugged me when reading this. And yes, I do understand WHY you chose to play it this way; I guess it’s just my logical side looking for flaws? Anyway, I believe that inside the story, it would make more sense for Harry/ICW to just remove the magic from around Malfoy Manor and possibly the Ministry, instead of all of Britain. In this way they would spare the “innocent’s” Fleur was so concerned about without the need to concoct a story about muggleborns winning a contest of some sort in order to get them out of the country. And what about the other magical children who aren’t muggleborn? Surely they’re innocent as well? As I said, I understand about the horcruxes and the need for all of the country to be wiped of magic to destroy them all but why not simply eliminate the horcruxes all together? Didn’t you eliminate Harry as a horcrux? Another reason could have been thought up to explain Voldemorts survival that Halloween night. Or keep the diary and one other; say the locket since Harry has easy access to it being in Grimmauld Place. Kreature brings it up in someway and Harry retrieves it and leaves it inside the perimeter when he uses the magic he created on Malfoy home. Perhaps one square mile so the manor can be in a corner so Harry can activate the central rune marker without being inside Malfoy Manor.
Second, why didn’t Ginny use the secret passage under the Whomping Willow to get to Hogsmeade and then her brothers? Surely Harry could have explained how to levitate a branch to press the spot on the trunk to still its branches. In this way she wouldn’t have been spotted flying over the grounds. Just curious.
| Guest chapter 6 . 4/25
Your version of veela are pretty nasty, I wouldn't want to date one.
| Guest chapter 12 . 3/31
Not too sure I agree with the outcome of the Omake, but I enjoyed the story telling of it the best. I understand the need to carry on the two family lines, but did they/you consider the nonmagical way - artificial insemination or even a fetal implant? The first ending and all the extras seemed contrived, forced or downright artificial.
| Zile0 chapter 12 . 3/31
Very interesting. And while not caring for multiple relationships personally, I think both your endings are very possible and handled well. The entire story is really well written. It has made my favorites, and while there are lots of stories in that list, I often re-read, getting new insight. Great stories are like that. Thank you.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/17
I always felt Harry was entirely responsible for Sirius' death - if he had ever BOTHERED to unwrap and USE the damn mirror, he would have been used to it BEING USED, and could have verified Sirius' location, but noooo... Unbelievably stupid boy.
| Daggerxxx chapter 5 . 3/17
Ok, shit story, i'm done
| Gazuzin chapter 12 . 1/14
Great work on this fic, a Harry who's not a pushover and doenst forget, the stuff between Fleur and Ginny was , it would've been nice to explain what Hermione was thinking, anyways thanks for writing
| darthkratos24 chapter 4 . 1/11
I know this is an older story but...
"The day before I came here, Harry told me why he has that name. It's made up, and he calls himself a 'lord' to elevate himself in everyone's eyes. No wonder Harry doesn't think very highly of this group if half of you can't stand to hear a made up name, like some nursery monster under your bed."
This line! This rattles my bones it's wrong yes I believe the fear of the word is dumb but most people fear it because during the war Tommy boy put a taboo on the name all who spoke it were hunted down and killed, that's why they started using you know who or he who must not be names. Because all who spoke it were killed or worse. So they naturally stopped and if something like that happens in a war people get use to it and even after the war won't call him voldy because it's so ingrained into their survival instincts they physical can't say it because all the fear of the war slams into them. That's why people flinch when you say it and I'm pretty sure at this time he renewed the taboo so he could find order members so thank you Fleur you just got them all killed...
| guest chapter 4 . 12/8/2022
Don't know if you intended this, but your Fleur comes across as just another user, this one hoping to entrap the kid for life, with his money a prominent factor - in short, a calculating whore every bit as manipulative as Dumbles. Of course I know such females exist and always have, but I don't care to spend time with them.