Reviews for Heart of a Dragon |
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![]() ![]() ![]() That was hilarious |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have been reading your stories for some time and I am very happy that you chose to take fanfiction writing as a hobby. Your quotation marks usage is fine and there is literally no written rule that says one has to be used for speaking and other for thinking. Usually Double quotes are ysed when you are reiterating someone's words directly as they said it and single marks aee used ti denote the Name, title etc. of some entity uf you wish to emphasize on them. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Why the fuck you changed way to tell which talk and thinking. Im fucking shocked how your book is popular, its fucking terrible because this is not even a book. Book rule is always very common “talking” and ‘thinking’. You fucking switched it. Fucking pathetic behavior |
![]() ![]() ![]() I read your story and really enjoyed it. I think it would be fantastic in comic format. If you are interested in adapting it into a comic, please let me know. We can discuss it further, and I can explain all the details about creating comics. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey dude just to let you know you mind renaming Issei's parents to Miki and Gorou? |
![]() ![]() ![]() He had 9 years. 9 years with a Ddraig and a mindset that wants to improve, yet this is what we get? Him during chapter 1 showed a mature playful personality and you expect us to believe that is his combat strength? He had problems with, because any problems at any scale is an issue here, a mere week intro fallen angel? And with how you protrayed Issei's maturity and again his relationship with Ddraig that he wouldnt be more suspicious about the church? When a damn fallen angel just tried to kill him? The amount of disbelief of how you are progressing things is just... bad. You progressed things poorly, portrayed him misleadingly and that "common sense" he is preach doesnt seem to apply to him. His mindset is all over the place im this chapter. Not my cup of tea. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is awful. Maybe read a real book to understand how they work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Now that was top class action. Great job. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good work. Loved how adorable Irina was here and just how she did so many 180’s! Lol. Even caught Raynare off guard a few times eh? Also loved Raynare using her Yuuma persona in our trio’s little acts of love. I can definitely see her take up acting like Issei mentioned! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was an excellent chapter and I quite enjoyed the fun time Issei had with Raynare and Irina. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wowo finally after all this time an Update nice smut chapter please update more and sooner! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Devil can't even touch a holy sword so why would that even be a factor here |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am happy to admit that i absolutely despise this chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() chapter 3 infuriates me. Issei had essentially had plenty of time after learning of Asia and what the fallen wantes with her but he waits until minutes before her death to actually ask Raynare questions? that just screams FORCED. i can understand needed Asia as a devil for the story and even needing Issei to feel like he owes Rias but this just felt dumb. it only got worse towards the end of the chapter. forced. everything felt forced. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hate is a very strong word here... the best you can use is dislike and/or distrust, but not hate. Hate takes time to form and serious wrongs against you, it doesnt just comes and then goes away from one day to the next. |