|Reviews for a cullen, the queen and a whitlock?|
| Jessica Love1 chapter 6 . 9/22
I really like it.
I want to read more!
| Primes sparkling chapter 2 . 9/22/2016
Good plot line, but can I offer some advice? If you want to put in speech, use these "".
For example If you take the last line of this chapter:
"Daddy!" Izzy screamed running into his arms...
It just makes it easier to read and will make your story sound a lot more like sense. Also remember each new sentence deserves a capital letter. That goes for names as well.
I don't mean to sound like the grammer police, just figured it would help, But it's a good story over all. :)
| bellaandmates chapter 1 . 9/8/2016
Please post the next chapter. i love this story. I've re-read it like 5 times.
| Guest chapter 4 . 1/1/2016
PLZ UPDATE IT IS SO GOOD I CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE I LOVE IT SO MUCH CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE CONTINUE
| Guest chapter 6 . 12/12/2015
PLZZZZZZZ CAN'T YOU DO THE CHAPTER WITHOUT YOUR BETA I CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE I LOVE IT SO MUCH
| kraqui83 chapter 5 . 12/14/2015
un souci dans ton histoire...
Dans le premier chapitre ils ont tué Maria.
| Guest chapter 6 . 11/2/2015
Update Plz need moooooorreeee
| kspauldinghyatt chapter 6 . 9/23/2015
Update soon please
| shawol4infinite chapter 6 . 9/6/2015
I like the story so far can't wait to read more
| 1WhoLoves2ReadAlot chapter 6 . 8/2/2015
It's very good, so far! Love it! Hope you get a chance to write more soon. How old is Bella? Is she six?
| Carlisles Girl Izabella chapter 6 . 8/2/2015
Neeeeed more please
| SheikahLover chapter 6 . 8/1/2015
Hello. I found your story today and have been reading it. I must admit I am enjoying it immensely, but I notice several mistakes. Your story could improve immensely with some extra description and proper use of quotations. I notice in your AN you said that you beta is "dragging his feet." If you need help editing other chapters, I wouldn't mind helping. I help many authors - specifically in the Twilight community - edit their stories to make them shine even more. If you're interested, I would love to help. This story is quite interesting, and judging by the story line I've read thus far, I can see that you're a pretty talented and creative writer.
If you're interested, reply and we can work something out. I love editing stories to make them shine even better.
All the best,
| Fruits.Baskets1 chapter 5 . 7/16/2015
Add more Chapters Please
| I heart vamps chapter 5 . 4/14/2015
Please update soon
| pandagirl078 chapter 5 . 1/1/2015