Chapter 5- How to fix a Kitty-sue

So I had someone pm about how to fix a kitty-sue so here's how to fix one!

Part 1- My kitty-sue

For this I'll be using my Kitty-sue friend, Stargleam. Below is her basic information.

Name: Stargleam

Description: a beautiful purple she-cat with violet eyes and a star on forehead

Personality: Kind, the best fighter in her clan, toms pad after her.

Age: 10 moons

Rank: Deputy

History: Stargleam was born to two medicine cats and when she was born a prophecy is told by Bluestar that only a star may save the forest.

Family: Dustpool (medicine cat) and Darkleaf (Medicine cat)

Likes: Catching mice, making friends, running

Dislikes: Nothing!

Part in book: main character

Part 2- Let's fix- Description

First off let's start with her description shall we?

Description: a beautiful purple she-cat with violet eyes and a star on forehead

*First off, using 'beautiful' or 'handsome' hints at a kitty-sue, because you are saying "Hey, look over here my cats beautiful/handsome!" Let's try to stay away from that, however it still can be used, if you're careful.

*Cats cannot be purple, it is impossible. Let's instead change "purple she-cat" to "blue-gray she-cat with a white paw" (No you don't need to use the same color as I did, but for Stargleam I'm using blue.)

*Cats cannot have violet eyes. Let's change "with violet eyes" to "and blue eyes" (Again, you don't have to use the same colors I use.)

*Cats cannot have full out stars on their foreheads, it cannot happen, let's change "and a star on forehead" to "and a white mark on her forehead" So now instead of having a star on her forehead she has a blaze!

Fixed Description: a blue-gray she-cat with a white paw and blue eyes, and a white mark/blaze on her forehead.

Part 3- Let's fix- Age and Rank

Age: 10 moons

Rank: Deputy

I don't honestly think a 10 moon old cat would be a deputy… (Unless your fanfic is going off a different warrior code similar to Brokenstar's) I'm going to fix this two ways, one to make her good enough to be deputy, and the other to what I would change her to.

First Way:

*Let's change "10 moons" to about maybe 25 moons give or take 1 or 2 moons.

*The rank is fine with this way.

Second Way:

*Let's change "10 moons" to about 13-14 moons, about the age of a newly made warrior.

*Let's change "Deputy" to "Warrior" for her age.

Fixed Age: 13 moons

Fixed Rank: Warrior

Part 4- Let's fix- History

Most kitty-sues have some very important history, or a bunch of mates, or maybe even a bunch of cats who liked/wanted to be friends with them. Let's face it that never really happens, I mean just look at kids at school now days, many get bullied.

History: Stargleam was born to two medicine cats and when she was born a prophecy is told by Bluestar that only a star may save the forest.

*We will fix Stargleam's name, just not yet!

*"was born to two medicine cats"? That is against the medicine cat code, medicine cats cannot have kits, I mean it's happened before, many times, (Yellowfang, Leafpool, and I know there are more) so if it was 'was born to a medicine cat and warrior' that could work, however normally the medicine cat has to give up their duties then. However, two medicine cats? That wouldn't happen, so you can either change it to "was born to a medicine cat and a warrior" or "was born to two warriors", I'll use a medicine cat and a warrior, not to change her that much.

*" and when she was born a prophecy is told by Bluestar that only a star may save the forest." That would be soo easy to figure out, the point about prophecies is to kinda be like a riddle, or an omen that doesn't quite make sense at first. For Stargleam I'll simply change this to "when she was born a shooting star (or falling star) was seen."

Fixed History: (new name here) was born to a medicine cat and a warrior and when she was born a shooting star was seen by her Clan's medicine cat.

Part 5- Let's fix- Family

Most kitty-sues have outrageous names or their family does, so this is where this comes into play.

Family: Dustpool (medicine cat) and Darkleaf (Medicine cat)

Both names are completely fine, however as I said in part 4 I changed one of her medicine cat parents into a warrior so I will make Darkleaf a warrior.

Fixed Family: Dustpool (medicine cat) and Darkleaf (warrior)

Part 6- Let's fix- Likes and Dislikes

Likes: Catching mice, making friends, running

Dislikes: Nothing!

Likes

*Seems normal however I'd change it to "Catching/Stalking mice, hanging out with her friends, and running" so it seems less 'making friends' because that sounds suey.

Dislikes

*Nothing? Really? I doubt that. I'd change it to "Rain, loud noises, and stinky ShadowClan cats" to make her seem normal. (Please note as an example she is from ThunderClan)

Fixed Likes: Catching mice, hanging out with her friends and running

Fixed Dislikes: Rain, loud noises, and stinky ShadowClan cats

Part 7- Let's fix- Personality

Personality: Kind, the best fighter in her clan, toms pad after her.

*"kind" is perfectly fine.

*"the best fighter in her Clan" doesn't work, this is very kitty-suesh and needs to be avoided. Instead put "a good/great fighter" as it is normal.

*"toms pad after her" is unacceptable. No way is a cat going to have a bunch of toms loving her (unless your Starkit) so just delete this.

Personality: Kind, and a great fighter.

Part 8- let's Fix- Part in book

Really you can't fix this, there isn't anything to fix! If Stargleam was my main character I wouldn't all of a sudden change it.

Part 9 – Let's fix- Name (finally!)

Now it's time to rename Stargleam based off what I know about her.

Possible Prefixes: Silver, Mist, Misty, Stream, Willow, Rain, Storm, Splash, Ivy, Sky, Brook, Cinder, Ash, Fern, Dew, Creek, Moss, Mossy, Dove, Jay all work. (Goes off pelt color)

Possible Suffixes: Good Fighter- fang, claw, tooth, strike, blaze. Fast- flash, wing, breeze, flight.

Favorite: For Stargleam her new name shall be… -drumroll- Willowfang!

Part 10- The fixed cat

Name: Willowfang

Description: a blue-gray she-cat with a white paw and blue eyes, and a white mark/blaze on her forehead.

Personality: Kind, and a great fighter.

Age: 13 moons

Rank: Warrior

History: Willowfang was born to a medicine cat and a warrior and when she was born a shooting star was seen by her Clan's medicine cat.

Family: Dustpool (medicine cat) and Darkleaf (Warrior)

Likes: Catching mice, hanging out with her friends and running

Dislikes: Rain, loud noises, and stinky ShadowClan cats

Part in book: main character

Does everyone see the huge difference? Anyway that's all for this chapter!

Part 11- Reviews & Answers/Trivia Answers

ScipioPB- Thanks for the review! I felt that fanfiction needed one of these!

Wishheart01- I understand where you're coming from, and I also respect you views, however this is my guide, thanks for the review!

Tie-Dye Prince- Glad you think so, and that's why I made it! Thanks for the review!

Blazingnyancat- True, Sunstar (and Sunfish) have been used, the point is that the sun is sacred to the cats, so you should try not to use it, (see Warriors Wiki Erin Hunter chats) thanks for the review!

Fullforce(guest)- Honestly I'm not sure if cats can vomit to get rid of a hairball, I know my cat has vomited so I won't add that until I've done my research, thanks though!

All Correct Trivia Guessers: Waffle the Badger, Blaingnyancat, Mooshroom(guest), Anon(guest), and IcyStorms(guest)

First Correct Guesser: Waffle the Badger! They have won their favorite warriors plushie!

Part 12- New Trivia

*Tigerclaw was going to be named what? (Hint: The Erins' changed their minds because cats did not know what his prefix was)

*What where three of Ferncloud's kits who died before/during the great journey? (Hint: two she-cats and a tom, the tom was an apprentice.)

*What was Tallstar's, Onestar's, Bluestar's, Leopardstar's, Blackstar's and Raggedstar's warrior names?