I mean, really - three of these things. But it had to be done, I suppose.
The rewrite I posted over the first chapter will be going into a new story, along with all the other rewrite work I do. There are more reasons behind this than I care to name, and pretty much every review mentioned it to some extent, so it's happening. The rewrite will be under the name "Grace and Elegance"-I'm too attached to the original name for my own good-and can be found under my profile. The original chapter will be put back up shortly afterwards so that there isn't any confusion between the two pieces.
Thanks for bearing with me and my general technical ineptitude.
Ten Tonne Skeleton.