Hello! Darkness' Raven here! This is my first story sooooo, review, review, and review! Pleeaase?
EDIT: I edited some stuff. I personally like this much better than the original!
The setting sun spread its hues of red, orange and yellow across the land. The faint outline of the buildings of the city could be seen against the dimly lit sun. Soon, night would fall, leaving only the stars and moon to give away light. Soon, Raven would feel at home.
To her, light brought too many emotions. Unwanted emotions. She headed to her bookshelf, carefully scanned the shelves and grabbed The Masque of the Red Death by Edgar Allan Poe. She settled down with it, and flipped the first page.
THE "Red Death" had long devastated the country. No pestilence had ever been so fatal, or so hideous. Blood was its Avatar and its seal the redness and the horror of blood. There were sharp pains, and sudden dizziness, and then profuse bleeding at the pores, with dissolution. The scarlet stains upon the body and especially upon the face of the victim, were the pest ban which shut him out from the aid and from the sympathy of his fellow-men.
Knock-knock. A soft knock pulled Raven out of her story. With a sigh, she laid her book down next to her bed, and opened the door. Starfire was there, holding a small package in her hands.
"Friend Raven, someone has brought you a gift."
She handed her the package. Raven took one look at it, and levitated it away. Starfire cocked her head to the side.
"What is wrong?"
Raven sighed. The truth was, she didn't accept gifts; they were dangerous to her.
"It's a little hard to explain..."
"Perhaps this gift could help you remember?"
Raven rolled her eyes. Typical Star.
"No, really Star, I'd rather not..."
"Please?"Starfire opened her eyes wide and stared at Raven with a pleading, puppy-like stare.Raven groaned, and reached for the small package. It was wrapped in dark paper, with little white ravens decorating it. She grabbed the card and reluctantly opened it.
Wow. I can't believe you actually received my gift. I must be one of your greatest fans... I practically begged my Mom to cut my hair short. Anyway, I really admire you. In my opinion, you are the greatest. I found this at an antique shop. It is truly beautiful.
I hope you like it!
Rose... That name ran a bell. Where had Raven heard it before?
Starfire's voice pulled her out of her slumber.
"Will you not open the box?"
She handed her the little black box. It was tied in a purple ribbon, matching the color of her hair. She carefully undid the ribbon, and opened the box.
Inside, there was a beautiful black necklace in the shape of a raven. Its eyes glittered red, and, where the heart would usually be, there was a small red gem which shone with the setting sun. The gem almost apeared to change colors. Raven ran her hands over the cool metal, it almost seemed no hand could sculpt something so beautiful. As she touched the gem, it shone brightly for a few seconds, then died back to it's original state. All the while, a cold shiver ran through Raven's spine.
"It's beautiful..." she murmured.
Yeah, that's my first chapter.
Ooooo, Rose. Yep, comic reference! Rose was Slade's only daughter, and she... pretty much... well... stabbed her eye. She will take a big role in this story, I can assure you that!
EDIT: Used the word beautiful to much... somebody got better adjectives?