So, after finishing Rough Seas, and before I started my next project, I knew I had to revisit The Greatest Generation. Originally, it was finished in a hurry, and going back, I was amazed at my writing quality - terrible. It was good to see how far my writing had come since then...and still how far it needs to go.
One of the things I love about fanfiction is the many different writing levels and skills. There are authors that make me think, "Why do I even bother writing?" and styles of prose that I aspire to. Still, writing is a craft, and one I have to constantly work at.
I would consider this story in it's first draft form. I made a number of big changes, cutting probably close to 10,000 words and introducing some different story lines, but I think this still needs massive work in the way of character development, detail, and style. Who knows? Maybe I will revisit it in another two years and see how far I've come since then.
I hope you enjoyed the new version - I did spend quite a bit of time trying to make it better.
Some things that are still bothering me (please let me know if you can make suggestions):
1. No development of Wiseman (where did that plot line even come from!!) and Nephrenia, they just kind of appear...and I should do something about that.
2. Not enough tension throughout story.
3. Need more descriptions / adjectives in general.
4. More songs and lyrics.
No matter when you finish this story, you can always answer...
What was your favorite moment or scene?
For me, it's difficult. This story goes all over and everywhere, but I do like the confrontation between the senshi and Wisemen / Nephrenia - it's epic and I can totally picture it.
What would you most like to see illustrated?
Obviously, if any scene strikes you, you are more than willing to draw, sketch or color any moment from this story. I'm toying with the idea of commissioning the picture, but with the lads in vintage military dress... Thoughts?
I would love, love, love an editor to kick my ass on this story. If that might be something you're interested in, please let me know.
Who would've thought, well over a year later that I would actually finish this monstrous tale? What was mostly a writing exercise for me, is actually something I am really proud of and more than ready to get started on a major rewrite. Like another story that I finished, I realize how far my writing has come and how much potential this story has. With a little bit of elbow grease, I think it's going to be something amazing. I will try and get hammering on the rewrite shortly…especially since I'm fairly certain this is my last Sailor Moon story. This story took a lot of creativity out of me and now that my beloved Senshi and Shitennou are together…well, I'm not sure what's left.
As I mentioned throughout the story, the biggest influences in this story for me was the amazing manga collection. I referenced them time and time again.
Thank you for all your fabulous reviews. For my core group…those who I could always count on, to you I am especially grateful.
Richforce – how fitting that you were my first reviewer. As I have mentioned before…the fact that you would take a few moments for almost each and every chapter to comment really meant a lot to me…especially when, many time, I wouldn't get a lot of reviews…I could always count on knowing that someone out there, you, were reading. Thank you! P.S. Feel free to spin off the Animates over there in Russia. I just couldn't include any more characters.
Elementalmoon – thanks for your review!
missgiggles12087 – thanks for the review.
Becx – you were one of the first to read Shitennou and the fact that you also read Shitennou means a lot to me. Thank you for your continued support.
firegoddess372 – I'll say it definitely picked up. What do you think?
Gin – thanks for your review
Dezzi – I think I ended up taking your advice and making the girls pretty strong. They were definitely kicking some ass by the end of the story.
Mad-4-Manga – you already got a shout out over on Keeping In Line, so I'll say it again thank you so much for all your support on all my stories. I'd like to think I'm a fluff Queen on some days. You always gotta remember the fluff. I love that I could always hear your voice in your reviews.
Lija – whether signed in or not, I always appreciated your insightful reviews. It's so interesting that in Chapter 9 you would tell me to keep on, no matter how long it took. Well, I kept at this thing and I think with some revisions, it will be an even better story. Above all, I appreciate your honesty and the obvious time you took with your reviews.
Asga – like richforce, you were there for me with a review, no matter what and that really meant a lot to me.
Ariana – thank you and thanks for props on Shitennou as well.
Lovegoddess567 – thanks for the review
Sailor Dream – I will try and check out the Anime forum!
Pearl-Cape – I couldn't let them die this time. It was too sad to write it the first time. They all deserved happy endings! It took them long enough to get there.
Yellow – you got your happy ending, right? It took awhile to get there, but it all worked out ok.
Crystal Rhapsody – looking back maybe I should've just reunited everyone in Chapter 14 and stopped there! I like your handle name.
Raya Light – it's ok you came to the story late – thanks for leaving a review and your continued reading.
Isis Aurora Tomoe – thank you always for your encouraging reviews and support. Chapter after chapter, it was still so great to hear from you and hear your enthusiam. I always wondered too, where did you get your handle name? It's very poetic.
EmMaStArZ- AmAnDa-AnGeL-PiN... – I wonder where your handle name came from too. Thanks for the review!
Miracle Illusions – two words: thank you.
Serene Amethyst – another beautiful handle. Thank you for review. I wish I had been more creative in coming up with mine!
Amnicity – I love reading SenxGen fiction and thank you for including mine in the good ones!
DreamHeart – thank you for logging in and reviewing. It means a lot to me!
mystical bekk – I had to see this story through! I've put way too much into it not to finish the story.
Nicole – thanks for your review.
Mystriahe – I'm totally sorry I did not follow through with the whole beta thing. I (obviously) could've used it. I just get so excited and want to post chapters and feel like I've waited too long to post. Anyway, thank you for your offer and reviews!
Sally... – I didn't forget the story and I did finish! I always promise to finish stories…even if it does take over a year.
Angry Girl – thank you for your multiple reviews. And yes, it was SUPER difficult to keep up with all characters…I didn't do myself any favors.
Nics – I probably should've checked in with you more often re: German stuff! Please forgive this ignorant American. I do appreciate your review – dankeshoen!
Elena Chamberlain – thank you for your reviews and (blushes) I love writing intriguing stories.
bebe1984 – thanks for your review.
DAngel – thanks for being reviewer #100. Appreciate the support!
wildchild1334 – thanks for the review!
Pip-2250 – I know what you mean about bad grammar! There are so many stories out there I can't even get into because of bad grammar, spelling, etc. Every now and then I catch something in mind and I'm like D'oh! Thanks for your reviews.
Princess Holly – thanks for the review!
Oztan – thanks for you review…
Gatorgonewild – are you a UF fan? I went to UGA…but we can still be friends. Thanks for the review!
Mustang Driver – it's so fun to get a new reviewer 33 chapters in! BTW, my Dad has a Cobra and is a Mustang freak! Glad you love the story.
Traser SyberJedi – thanks for reviewing. It doesn't matter when you review, just that you did – it always means something to me.
Hidden Firecracker – thanks for reviewing and thank you for some very insightful comments. I agree, with this story I'm either really on or just a little off…Chappies 30-34 weren't my best work.
Prometheus FireBringer – great handle and thank you for the interesting facts. I'm not familiar with Unit 731, who were/are they?