So this is the trailer for my new fic Long Time Dead.
Sarah in this story isn't Saint Sarag from the show. Imagine Hayden Panettiere.
Bold is narration/captions
Normal is speech.
Italics are action (what is seen (?))
They were happy. They thought they would be like this forever.
Shows Miley and Lilly holding each other, their foreheads touching, looking lovingly into each others eyes.
They thought they would last forever. They thought it would make them stronger.
Shows Miley pinning Lilly to a wall, kissing her passionately.
Shows naked Lilly on top of naked Miley in bed. However nothing is seen (it's not that kind of 'movie') both are hidden under a blanket basically
But something always happens to fuck things up.
A shot of Lilly's face is shown
The shot zooms into a close up of Lilly's left eye as you can see the colour seemingly dim in the eye and it glaze over.
Shows long shot of Miley shaking Lilly and then sobbing into her shoulder.
Shows shot of Lilly turning her head to Miley, still with those empty eyes.
What happens when someone isn't dead but they're not exactly living either?
Shows Miley wandering around, zombie- like.
What happens when someone else succeeds were the person who mattered failed?
Shows Miley walking into a room in which Lilly is sitting up in bed, looking perfectly fine and the picture of health.
Shows Sarah sitting next to Lilly's bed, a sly smile on her face.
What happens when someone gets in the way?
Shows Sarah leaning in to kiss Lilly.
Quick montage with a screen of black separating the shots on which captions quickly appear.
A story of heartbreak
Lilly and Miley shouting at each other
A story of sorrow
Lilly kneeling in the rain sobbing the name Blaire
A story of passion
Lilly and Sarah making out. Sarah has her hands on Lilly's hips and Lilly has her arms draped over Sarah's shoulders
Jake and Miley also making out. Jake is holding Miley's face and Miley is holding Jake to her by his sides.
A story of love
Miley pushed up against a wall by Lilly, kissing her passionately. Like the shot before of Miley and Lilly only their positions reversed
Miley holding a gun.
Miley looking lovingly into Lilly's eyes.
I will always love you Lilly Truscott.
Lilly reaching out a hand to caress Miley's cheek.
And I will always love you Miley Stewart.
Cut to a shot of Miley holding the gun but pointing it at her head.
Sound of shot being fired)
Close up of a blue eye. The eye widens in shock and the pupil dilates before the eye glazes over. The eye closes and the screen cuts to black.
Long time dead appears in white, contrasting with the black background
Quick shot of Sarah walking around, using a large pen knife to pick at the dirt under her nails. She is muttering something that only becomes distinct when the shot zooms up to her.
"Oh don't deceive me, Oh never leave me,
How could you use, a poor maiden so?"
As she finishes she raises her head so her face fills the shot. She is grinning like the Cheshire Cat. Only with an evil glint in her eye.
So what do people think? Should I give up now or should I write the story? Would anyone actually read it? Leave me a review or PM me and tell me what you think. Constructive criticism welcome as long as it's constructive and not just criticism.