Re-write of first chapter of 'Of Sand and White Eyes'
The air was tense as the two members of the Hyugga clan stood in the middle of the arena. All eyes focused on them. Neji had been beating Hinata down verbally, and Hinata was close to tears…but a certain Fox Container spoke up.
"Hinata-chan! Don't let him talk to you like this!" Naruto yelled immediately Hinata grew more attentive and was able to attack her cousin. Even though Hinata had a crush on Naruto she knew he would never relize that she loved him-
She was thrown out of her thoughts as Neji slammed into her chest, Hinata's eyes widen and she coughs up blood, she could taste the horrible liquid in her mouth. Though she felt a strange felling in the pit of her stomach, as she turns around her eyes meet…Gaara's. the supposed demon of the sand.
But truth be told Hinata never though of Gaara as heartless…no just…misunder stood...
Again she hit the ground, and could hear the blonde cheering her on, but she didn't really hear it…she was just hoping that she wouldn't die!
As Neji came at her the Jounin moved to slow, and for Hinata it seemed that time was moving slow…then right as Neji's hand came inches from her chest she closed her eyes but no pain came…it was strange. Hinata opened her eyes and found sand wrapped around her, suddenly fear started to erupt. Was she going to die? Was Gaara going to kill her? But the questions soon flew out of her mind as the wall of sand fell down, and Gaara was standing to the side of the sand wall his arm outstretched and sand wrapped around Neji's arm.
Then all time froze all the people on the balconies where in awe, as was Hinata. Then time soon unfroze and Hinata found herself on the ground her heart in extream pain, she cast once last glance at her rescuer and mouthed 'Thank-you' before she passed out.
OK there it is I hope it is better.