Disclaimer: Death Note and its characters do not belong to me. My poem does although, so please refrain from pasting it in your profile or showing it to someone and taking credit for it. (it would displease me greatly) I don't mind you using it for your personal use, so please do so if you wish. (by personal use, I meant saving it in your documents and reading it occasionally when you feel like it. I like to read poems before going to sleep, lol)
Did it hurt?
You fell from so high, you lost so much
I tried to give you comfort
Sweet words, kisses and such
Your eyes devoid of all emotions
You didn't acknowledge me
No humour, no sensations
Could bring you back to me
I didn't have the strength to care
You didn't seem to do much of it either
I couldn't stop thinking it was unfair
Did you think you were the only one to suffer?
Is it selfish to want you in my arms?
Is you loving me too hard of a wish?
I still hope you'll succumb to my charms
So my love wouldn't seem so foolish
A/N: Sorry people if you think that my poem is too short and/or it's not worth posting, but I really like it and I want to share it with you. (I'm a bit possessive. Humpff, who am I kidding? A bit possessive??) I entried the American league of poetry contest with this poem and it has been classified in the 300 bests. They didn't tell me what position, but I could of been high enough! Oh, and since I already mentionned the fact that you may not share my enthusiasm to post this poem, do not feel like you have to make me remember I wrote this in your reviews. However, if you have found another way to make me feel bad about my work that I had not mentionned before, then do please humor me and flame away! I do like mindful criticism.
When I wrote it, I hadn't even started to watch Death Note, but after I reread it the other day, I find it sort of fitting. It would have been an OOC Lawliet's POV, I imagine. OOC because I don't think that L is smug enough to talk about his charms like that. (that would have been Light's style)
Well, tell me what you think! (review)