Rain. Cold. Abandonment.
"Bella!" I remained in my position on the ground as someone called my name. I vainly hoped it would be my love's voice – the person that meant the world to me and then some.
"Bella!" My name rang out again. The voice was too deep to be his. It did sound familiar, though.
"Bella." Their voice held relief. My eyes flickered up to a figure standing over me. I couldn't make out their features through the diming light and rain, but I could see that they were far too tall to be who I was wishing for.
"Come on, Bella. We need to get you home, Charlie is worried sick." They gently picked me up from the ground and walked me bridal style through the thicket. "It's Sam, Bella. Jacob's out here too, along with almost the whole police force. What happened?" I remained silent. He did too, not pressing the matter.
I closed my eyes and lost consciousness. I awoke on the couch in our living room screaming. Charlie ran to my side and the others in the house looked to me. "Bella, what's wrong?" My father asked me that question repeatedly, but I didn't answer. I couldn't answer.
My throat was dry. My voice wouldn't come. "Charlie, let me examine her." He backed away and a doctor took his place. He took my hand, but I pulled it back.
"No!" I shrieked. "Get away from me!" Tears started to flow. Carlisle was my doctor. Only Carlisle. Then it hit me, really hit me. "He's gone," I whispered. "He's gone, he's gone, he's gone…"
I couldn't stand it. I jumped up and ran to my room, locking the door behind me.
Wind whipped my face as I ran. The memory that was summoned fueled my want to kill. I couldn't kill my prey – it was far too early for that – so a human would have to do.
This is a preview of the rewrite (aka, what I have so far of chapter one). I want feedback to see if you guys like it, if not I will continue TWYG the way it is. My current title (although it is most likely on the working title of it) is Bloodthirsty Vengeance.
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