In that warm night the lights of Konoha flickered in the distance. It was a beautiful sight: the village nested between it's walls, in front of the Hokage Monument. You could see distinct lights in the various guard towers placed along the wall, and some slowly moving along it. The lights were still on in the Hokage Tower.
Maybe Grandma Tsunade is working late today.
One of the guards patrolling the Konoha wall stared into the night, looking for any signs of suspicious behavior, when his eyes locked on a redish-orange glow, on a hill overlooking Konoha, maybe 6 miles away. A ghost? I should really cut back on the sake before guard duty, thought the guard to himself, before resuming his patrol.
On that same hill, stood Naruto. Those who knew him before his three-year long training mission would have trouble recognizing him now, if not for his blond hair, blue eyes and whisker marks.
He was covered in the Fox's mantle, one lone spectral tail waving lazily behind him. Since before his training trip he had grown a lot, he was now, by all standards a tall man, with the well toned, yet agile physique of a tiger.. or a fox. His spiky blond hair was so long now it hung several inches below his shoulder line, somewhat held in place by the Konoha headband he was sporting.
His taste in clothes had also changed, he now wore standard issue black sandals and jumpsuit under a standard issue green vest, on top of which he used a black robe, with the kanji for strength printed in red on the back. Over the robe he had two katanas strapped to his back and a small bag hanging over his right shoulder.
His eyes were red and slitted, and his whisker marks were dark and pronounced, his claws and canines were extended, yet his face was calm, as he quietly admired the village where he had gown up.
It's nice to be back, I've missed this place.
"They really did a good job rebuilding it, I clearly remember slamming my paw down in that section over there."
"Shut up you stupid fox! Go back to sleep!" - as those words sounded in his mind, his serious face suddenly turned into a trademark grin, slightly amused by the fox's sense of humor.
"It's not my fault I'm bored, Human."
"Don't you human me! Damn I must have been a horrible person in an earlier life to have a sadistic annoying demon fox stuck in my head!"
"And it's not my fault that monk released the seal, believe me I was happy.. Scratch that, happiER without human feelings pouring into me."
"You're right.. But I'm happy he did. I know I'm always calling you stupid but I find you funny and it's nice to have someone to talk to."
"Awww.. if I had tear ducts I would be crying right now.", the fox joked as he faked sobbing noises.
"Joke all you want but you still mean a lot to me.. Even tough you're a fur-ball demon.. Should we get going?"
"Yes, we should. Jiraya must be busy with his 'research' and you still have to unpack."
"I hope he gets busted.."
As Naruto's words still ringed in his mind, he darted on his four limbs at break neck speed towards Konoha, closing the distance between him and the village in just a couple of seconds.
Now the guard was standing vigilant in one of the towers, casually chatting with his fellow shinobi.
"So, she made you sleep on the couch?"
"Yeah, women are crazy, but pregnant women are a whole different kind of crazy!"
The guard could have sworn he saw a red haze flying over the wall into Konoha.
"Did you see that?"
The guard looked around for something, anything that could have caught his attention.. But, whatever it was, it was long gone, if it was there to begin with.
"I should REALLY cut back on the sake."
"You've been drinking on duty?"
"I said that out loud?"
I am aware that this prologue is doubled. I've reached the conclusion people sometimes loose interest by finding only an AN on the first page.
Author's Note and Disclaimer
This is the first fanfic I have ever written, so I really appreciate honest reviews, but please bear with my noobishness.
I do not own the Naruto series. I just like the whole idea of the Naruto Universe and the characters themselves, because they have a huge amount of potential, yet I believe that the guy that does own Naruto is doing a horrible job developing them, by hiding or attenuating certain elements that any Human being has or should have to be considered an individual, as such, in this fic I will do my own character development: characters won't stay the same forever, and the emotional and physical changes seen in the time-skip will be greatly accentuated, mainly in Naruto, you will soon see why.
Now that we've cleared that up, this fic is rated M for content, which means that either you approach it with a grown up mentality or you're better off not reading it. I must say that I'm rather open-minded about sex, and not so big on religion, so expect lemons and maybe pre-marital sex. I don't know what is FF's current position on lemons and couldn't care less. If I want to include them, I will, it s my choice and I will do so at my own discretion as an author.
This is NaruHina, and any Hinata bashers: don't bother sending me messages or reviewing my fic with anything resembling this: "OMG HINATA SUX SO MUCH SKURra IS WAAAAAY BETTER OMGLOL!1!1! 1337". I'm not in any way a Sakura hater(okay, maybe just a little bit), but I do hate it when I see reviews like these. Instead of writing this shit, grow up.
This fic starts right after Naruto's return from his training mission with Jiraya. Hope ya'll enjoy it.
I've been taking a little time away from fanfiction, not because I chose so, but because I must. I started classes this school-year for a master's degree in electric, electronic and computer engineering, and it's really hard work. I've been spending most of my free time at the University rather than at home, and I rarely have time to write. I really do try, but the only times that I have free to write are weekends, and even then I sometimes just can't (for example, this weekend is a no go, big programming test on Monday). Even then, shit's hard because I can't be creative under pressure, and when I'm in a position where I have a limited timeslot when I must get a lot of writing done to have things out on time, ideas just don't flow, and I'd rather not do any job at all than do a crappy job.
For example, I only had time to write this cause I blew off some of my classmates tomorrow morning, we were supposed to study some algebra. It's 2am over here by the way.
My beta also hasn't been answering me, and she still hasn't sent me back a chapter I sent her more than a month ago. I bet she's busy with RL stuff too, and I can't (or rather won't) pressure her into betaing for me when she doesn't have the free time. Unfortunately that makes my job twice as hard and the final product half as good.
These are dark times for fanfiction, and I ask for your comprehension. Take solace in the fact that I won't let this fic die.
Bai guise, fistbumps for the dudes and kisses for the dudettes.
So here guys, see that place right up there where I say that you have to be open minded about my fic, or not read it? And now that little spot where I say that I don't want to see any Hinata bashers reviewing my fic with illiterate crap? Now I'm gonna add another clause: don't flame me. Kay? Cause you see, I got this review a few days ago, and I thought I should expose it here for everyone to see:
For someone who flames as hard as you do, this story is hardly anything worth reading. Aren't there enough uber kyuubi completely ooc naru/hina stories around here? It's like a five year old tried to make himself naruto then proceed to change him in a way that he can jerk it to later on. If this is your style then I apologize, I just expected that someone who talked so much shit over other people's stories might be capable of writing something a little better.
Dude, yes there are enough stories around there, but I'm gonna use this one to put my own twist on it. Only two chapters have been released, don't you think you're being a bit hasty by saying that without even reading more? This is gonna be a big fic, the first 12 or so chapters will be an introduction arc. So.. you haven't even read any plot development.
And as for flaming.. I don't flame. Flaming is telling someone their story sucks, without adding anything else, or pointing out what's wrong with it.. much like you're doing right now, yes my friend, you are trying to flame me (and failing miserably might I add).
When I add long reviews I don't flame, I add constructive critiques, I point out what I think is wrong, and add suggestions how to fix it. The responses I get from the authors actually THANKING me for my reviews are a testament to that.
So, if you want to add a constructive review, and point out what exactly is wrong with my fic, well then, thank you very much, if you'll just be a baby about it and insult other people's work without even saying why (and no, "It's like a five year old tried to make himself naruto then proceed to change him in a way that he can jerk it to later on.", ISN'T a valid argument) I'll leave you with these few words:
Well, a quick trip to his profile shows that he is a 20 year-old American college student, who, based on his nick is a wow freak. Okay, everything checks out up to here but.. I kept on reading. And.. wanna guess? Yes my friends, he's a NaruHina hater.
Now, I don't care if he's a NaruHina hater, it's a free country (well, free internet), the problem is that he, as a 20 year old college student, is damn old enough to know he shouldn't judge other's people work based on his own preconceptions, that's, literally for 5 year old children to do.
Now, I know that America's school system sucks, like, epically sucks. Don't get me wrong, I love America, but you've gotta admit it, education over there is.. problematic at best. I just wanted to say that I actually had a phylosophy class in high school that teached people to think without prejudice, and that over here people like our friend are sweeping the streets instead of being at college living off the taxpayer's/parents.
Now that I've got this out of the way, even though American education sucks, there are lots of outstanding people coming from it, one example is my beta, and many others feature amongst my American readers.
tl;dr: Please review my story, but don't fucking flame me. You are free to insult me, or my work (seriously, go ahead), I won't mind, as long as you give proper and valid reasons and arguments.
For point two:
I just wanted to tell you all that I actually send responses to my reviewers. I can't send one to everyone. So if you write something like "Awesome." You probably won't get a response. On the other hand I insist on personally thanking everyone who critiques my work, so, if you write something like:
"The plot is (...), the grammar is (...),
I will send a response, even if it's just a simple "thank you".
So.. that's it for today people. Holla at ya l8tr. Go read the new chapter. ^_^