Hi everyone. Even though this story is done, I reread it and found out that I've been doing little more than telling the events as they happen. There hasn't been much in the way of describing scenes, or even letting you all know what people are wearing, for pity's sake. I find myself completely annoyed at that lack of attention, so I redid the Epilogue to try to get more detailed in things.
So, the Epilogue has been added to and expanded quite a bit. I hope I did better this time around, and when I get to Martian Waters, I'm going to pay particular attention to that.
However, I am in the process of moving. It may be as late as the end of next week, as in Christmas Eve, before I get to post anything. While I've done some random chapters already, those are going to be gone over and redone... both with what I've already cottoned on as to descriptions, as well as the additions to the story that the muses did without my input. (They're sneaky like that.)
Hopefully, when everything is said and done, this will be a more enjoyable read to everyone.
Happy Christmas, Happy Hanukkah, Happy Kwanzaa...
- Jonn Wolfe -