First of all, I'd like to say that this story is going to stop soon. Not because it'll end, no, but because I'm planning on a rewrite. Yeah, I know, how annoying. I go offline for over three months just to return with news that this story is going down. However, before you get mad, I'd like to point out a few things that have led to the rewrite:
1. Hiroto, as one of you reviewers pointed out, lacks character flaws and is way too godly at certain moments. I plan to change that in the rewrite.
2. Alexandria's name could coincide with Alex Dowski's name, as they both have the same nickname, mainly 'Alex'. This could be difficult for some people to understand (not to that many, but still...) so I'm changing Alexandria's name in the rewrite.
3. The day in which Hiroto meets Alexandria takes up too many chapters.
4. As one of you reviewers pointed out, any ultimate stronger than champion could wipe out Japan, and I retaliated by saying that I didn't want to leave Japan in ruins. But now that I think back on it, you have a point. What evil digimon wouldn't want to destroy the real world?
5. There are certain plot holes that I have not anticipated due to... unexpected events. Don't worry, it's not the OCs that are making me lose my focus. It's something else in the story which does not need your interest.
Hi, hi! you have a really great story here! Is it alright if I submit an OC?
Sure, I don't mind if you submit an OC. And please note that this intention for a rewrite did not come from your OC. I've been planning a rewrite for a few weeks now. And thanks for the comment. I hope you enjoy the rewrite as well as this one, if not even better. And one more thing – sorry I didn't put in you full review, but I didn't want to unnecessarily (I'm not saying your character is useless) lengthen this saddening chapter/note.
Hmm...Could that Sora be...!
Yes, that Sora's the '…!' you're thinking about, if the '…!' you're thinking about is the same as the '…!' I'm currently thinking about. Sorry I have to force you into re-reading this whole thing again in the rewrite.
Good chapter. You did a good job setting up the group, which I assume will be the digidestined group. You did a good job intergrating others' characters as well. I' m excited to see how this will lead into Road to Victory. Can't wait for more-X
Yes, the group's probably the digidestined group. And thanks, I tried the previous chapter a few times before I posted it, so I'm glad it came out well. I'm just disappointed it didn't come out well enough. This will easily lead into Road to Victory, as some of you might have already guessed and figured out the plot line, but the sad part is the rewrite. I can never seem to get any stories done, can I?
Oh, the group is all together now. ^-^ I really liked all the interactions. Wonder who pulled Hiroto into the water...anyway, can't wait for the next chapter.
Yup, the group's practically altogether except for one member. And shouldn't it be obvious that it's the shadow pulling Hiroto into the water? Maybe not. :D Sorry to say, but this is the last chapter, due to the mentioned problems this story has.
Nice to see that Seishirou and Hiroto are 'acquaintances'. Good job on the friendly rivalry as well.
The mode of transportion to the Digital World sure is advancing. In 01 they travel via the sky, here they travel via the sea and in 02 they travel via the Internet. Hehehe.
Perhaps you could have a scene where Hiroto and Seishirou meet up with each other in the Digital World. Then out comes a Champion or Ultimate-level Digimon which forces them to fight. After Hiroto sends out Veemon and gets him to evolve, Seishirou debuts the D-X.
He whispers for Dracomon to evolve and Coredramon comes out of the D-X almost instantly. Hiroto will of course accuse Seishirou of being a show-off.
Hope you take this idea into consideration.
Yeah, I'll surely take that idea into consideration. However, although this update may not have been the one any of you were hoping for, I still want to say that the rewrite is expected to be much better than this one. But you readers can help me make it much better by pointing out any flaws that I might leave in the story. Once again, I apologize for this.
Sorry, I can't login to Fanfiction via cellphone :(. But I just read the last four chapters...OH MY GOD! Shoutmon's gone! D': The secret's out! And I adored the first Arc! I already love the new Arc! My character is so goofy! XD Awesome! I can't wait for more! Keep up the good work! :D
Really? I always thought it was possible, considering all the notices puts up. And I appreciate that you enjoy the first arc despite it not being complete, but I'm sorry this so-called good story will have to come to an end. I hope you'll enjoy the rewrite, though.
Very good so far. Got most of the OC's together now too. Can't wait for more. And I hope my OC will show up soon :P
I was planning for your OC to be the first of the elder digidestined to show up, but I guess that dream's going to just remain a dream for now, until I manage to put up the next story. I really hope you'll still look forward to and read the rewrite.
Ooh this looks good, can't wait to see the old digidestind in action soon.
I totally agree. I was looking forward to writing the old digidestined in action, since it'd be something like a cool battle scene and all that, but I guess it can't be done in this story.
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Thanks, and I apologize for this.
Sorry I'm on the iPod for any mistakes. Tell me what needs to be changed.
Sorry I didn't put in your OC subbmission, but as I said in a previous reply, I don't want this saddening chapter to be longer than it has to be. So far, everything about your OC's perfect, and I'll tell you should you need to change any information. But for now, I only have two requests. One, would you want your digidestined to be an elder or younger digidesitined? Two, please read the rewrite. P.S. You have an iPod? That's cool! Lucky for you.
Something dictionary related
Is Yuki Digidestined? Is Will American Will or coincidence? Although he would have a Betamon.
Maybe you can have a later scene involving the family reaction in a flashback.
Is the shadow an ally from Adventure 01?
Regarding your questions, I can only answer a few. Will is coincidentically identically named to the American Will, so I will not be putting interactions with the American Will in the rewrite. To be truthful, I was almost planning to write a meeting with 'some guy with a Betamon that slipped my mind'. And no, the shadow's no one from Adventure 01.
That was a really good start to your new arc. I enjoy your description and character interaction. I liked the sneaky Sora name dropping :P (thanks for that,honestly). Keep up the good work dude, can't wait for more.
Thanks for being a reader ever since the start of my first story, then through the rewrite, and the rewrite's rewrite, and now to this story. Unfortunately, you'll have to read another rewrite. It's also annoying for me, but I guess this is what happens when I rush things. And thanks for the encouragement. I truly appreciate it. :D
Before you read my new story (Digimon Miracles: The Start of Miracles), I hope that you'll all help me out with any mistakes, storyline-wise, or vocabulary-and-grammar-wise. I once again apologize for this.