Disclamer: I'm very pleased to announce that I do not own this story, but It's sad to say that Harry Potter belongs to J.K Rowling.
A/N: Well here's another commentary of My Immortal, my friend is doing one at the moment and she convinced me try give it a try, so here it goes.
AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik)(I find it extremly sad that I actually do get it, but still it's not funny) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) (Thanks for clearing that mix up, never knew there was something wrong with it, but i'll let it slide)...(and I would use EW for another thing, but I think it's noticeable)
raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling(I'm afraid to know what her grammar's like). U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2(Ahh, cute) ! MCR ROX! (I can yell out random things too FAINTING GOAT!)
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way (Dementia is a form of Alzheimer's...That explains alot) and I have long ebony black(why put two colors that mean the same thing)hair (that's how I got my name)(OK. My hairs dark brown...kind of happy that my mom didn't name me after that) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid(I wonder what that looks like) tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee(Ya I don't think so, that would be like an insult towards her.) (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!.) (Calm down, some people just don't know who she, it's not really a bad thing) I'm not related to Gerard Way (Thank God for that)but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. (Ew, you know he'd be your brother right) I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. (That must be hard to use when it comes to bitting people, they probably just get annoyed after a while, it's like having an elderly person just gumming at your neck) I have pale white skin. (Vampire Tanning Salon, I can see that now) I'm also a witch,(Great) and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England (Scotland, maybe there's a chance that she'll just get lost and they won't be bothered by her) where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen) (Judging by your grammar...I feel bad for her professors). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) (Random Statement ''I'm a purple turtle.''... and ya you pointed that out a few times) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. (Kind off insulting actually Gothic people and non Gothic people who shop their.) For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots (We don't need a visual on it, we can figure that out ourselves). I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation (Vampire = being pale, meaning you don't need foundation, and the only foundation she needs is '...' i'll let you guys think whatever you want here) black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining (Love that kind of weather, it's possibly called wet snow or hail, reminds me of Canada just a bit, gotta love my country :P ) so there was no sun (No shit), which I was very happy about (ya because if it was sunny you would die, which ruins everything for everyone Merci) . A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. (Probably wondering why you're there, I wouldn't just look at you...maybe throw a couple of spells, come on guys it's time to practice.)
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy! (Poor thing)
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly. ( A very stimulating conversation huh! I couldn't even follow that.)
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. (That's it...why am I complaining)
AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! (Trust me you don't want to know what I think...)