I wrote this in class the other day and my friend who read it said that it was good and I should post it here. I don't consider myself a poet or a great writer(I like to think I'm not too terrible though) so please criticism is welcome. Enjoy.

Hollow thoughts

I was born dead.

A bleak, pale contradiction to the vibrant colours of life.

I have no name, culture or family to belong to.

I am simply your twisted self reflection,

the other side of your life's coin.

hollow...

I see through your eyes...

I hear through your ears...

I feel through your skin...

I hate through your heart...

Not cared for, not wanted I break.

hollow...

You think of me as the secret part you want to keep hidden,

the skeleton locked in a closet of your soul.

Ever thought about how the skeleton feels?

It doesn't feel, you say?

Then why do I hate you, or is hate not a feeling?

hollow...

With boiling rage I break free,

I tear apart your world with my claws,

sharpened by hate and my fangs,

craving a taste other than eternal despair.

You don't want me around so I try to vanish...in a

hollow...

I have no escape from this horizontal hell

I plaster on a smirk,

a grin you mistake for pure sadism.

You're the sadist, keeping me locked up

in the recess of your mind.

I slowly drown in my own misery

which was once yours.

You have friends, comrades even.

I have only...

hollow...

I see through your eyes...

I hear through your ears...

I feel through your skin...

I hate through your heart...

Not cared for, not wanted I break.

hollow...hollow...hollow...

You get to live!

I get only eternal death

the fate of a monster

the punishment of a soulless being

I am soulless because you have even claimed that too.

You are... what I am not

You feel... what I've never felt:

Love

No love for your

HOLLOW

So what did you think? Let me know and don't worry about being too harsh, I can take pretty much anything. One thing though if you are going to rip this apart with criticisms at least make them somewhat constructive so I can improve.