First of all, I want to say that I'm sorry that I've been gone for so long. I know that its been a long time, longer than I wanted, but I got stuck after the last chapter of Breaking Point and it took me until now to figure out what was wrong.
The next chapter of Breaking Point kept turning into walls of exposition because things that needed to get set up weren't. Some of it was because my plans for the story changed, some of it was because I was winging the last half of the story so I could put it out on a schedule, and some of it because I just thought of it or because reviewers gave me ideas that I'd like to use. Either way, I left things out. Important things.
Things like Gwen's parents, who need a lot more development than I gave them, and the Highbreed. I was planning on Breaking Point picking up after the episode 'What Little Girls are made of' so I didn't do much to set them up. I left it to the actual episodes and that was a mistake. I also left out Gwen's view on their first date. Also wrong of me.
So I've decided to go back to Little Moments and do a second draft to put in the details that the story needs. Some of the chapters won't change much, but some change a lot. Like chapter two, which I'm updating now.
Hopefully the new draft won't take long so I can get the story moving again. I'll add a notice so everyone gets a story alert as the new chapters go up and put a revision tag on the chapter title so people can see which are the updated versions. I want to thank Firiette for all the work she did proofreading the first version and Black Ahab for all the advice on dealing with writer's block.
Today I'm posting the new versions of chapter one and two, and I hope that you enjoy the new draft as much as the original. Again, I'm sorry it took me so long to figure out what was wrong.
Also, I'm thinking about adding a FAQ section to either my notes or to the end of the story, so if anyone has any questions I'll be happy to answer them as long as it doesn't lead to spoilers.