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Forum to give me ideas for my fan fic and help me improve it.
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So anyone who has read my fan fic will have noticed rather quickly that there is a huge plot hole. And I have spent weeks trying to figure out how to fix it. The whole idea of my female charter being the only person who knows how to make a bio weapon that up until now they figured it shouldn't be used till this point. Well it totally lame and Mary sueish. So I am looking for an idea on why Vannessa needs to be apart of Delta squad for this mission and they need to go into the burrow. But not make her look like a Mary sue. Any suggestion would be approached.

9/14/2010 #1
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