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Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond

Author: Nimbus_Llewelyn

Story: A_Divine_and_Demonic_Interview (Scripted fic)

Story: What_Crowley_did_in_emergencies (List fic)

Report, sign with the Order insignia if you like. Be sure to hit aspects of the first story. The second... doesn't have much to hit on, seeing as it is a list... but if you find anything, touch it up. :3

Concrit on his other fics could be well-versed as well.

Additions:(cr)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6116156/1/BURN_BABY_BURN

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6185593/1/Dirty_Dancing

Bolds purged and listed.

Code V

2/15/2011 . Edited 9/30/2011 #31
Persephone999

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2717334/NiggaSnipaz1337

Houston, we have a troll.

Edit: All stories are removed from the trolls account.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6632554/1/Cloaked_Under_the_Night

Several plot holes and rated T despite a sex scene in the first chapter.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6770138/1/Renesmee_and_her_secret

Needs help with punctuation and grammar.

Code V

2/19/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #32
Lessthanthree-Carissa

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6624434/1/Those_Three_Lives

The author is looking for concrit reviews. Figured I'd help her out and post it here. I've reviewed, but I may have missed something, so take your shot at it. Its for the fandom Fairy Tail, but even if you don't know said fandom, feel free to comment on plot or spelling/grammar. Thanks~

Code R

2/23/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #33
Brinkmess

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6497774/1/A_Selfish_Dreamer

My story, on another profile.

I would love some concrit reviews. Grammar, plot, anything is good. It's a One Piece fic, but it's an AU, so you don't really need to know the original story.

Code R

2/24/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #34
Feeling-Grand

I wouldn't mind a critic on my story Silver from Treasure Planet.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6737023/1/Silver

I think it started off too slow but would like to see if this goes for anyone reading it.

Code R

2/24/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #35
Persephone999

http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6451407/

This is a Twilight re-write I'm working on. I'd really appreciate concrit if anyone has the time.

Code R

2/26/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #36
Serenity in Virginia

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6774948/1/Bambi_Friends_Like_Us

This is a first for me.

I never have done a Bambi story.

Not only would I like some help on this, I was wondering if it's interesting.

Deleted. Listed.

Code R

2/26/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #37
Persephone999

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6785923/1/The_New_Girl_In_School

Needs help with grammar and spelling. Their first story, so try to go easy on them, please. Code V

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6451407/2/Shooting_in_the_Dark

The second chapter of one of my stories. Be harsh as possible, please. By the way, does anyone know if americans and brits have any major differences in grammar? Code R

3/1/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #38
Persephone999

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6734176/1/The_Phantom_Did_It

One of mine. I'd appreciate any concrit anyone has to offer.

Code R

3/1/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #39
Chaos Productions

Just a quick drive-by:

Story: Truth and Dare - Negima

Another silly author who defames and desecrates one of my favorite fandoms. I warned him about his story breaking the rules, and he responded with

"I could, but I won't. The mods won't care. They recieve complaints like this every day from all the stories like mine, so they won't care."

So I responded with a simple "So be it", and received this in reply:

Look, I don't care what you think of the rules, I'm kind of stopping a hacker right now, so yeah, I could care less for the rules at the moment.

So I replied with this:

And I, honestly speaking, do not care for excuses. I said no more, simply "So be it". That should be enough of a hint that the conversation is finished.

And now? Now I see a simple sentence saying "Screw you Chaos Productions" in his newest chapter - which, remarkably, is rather lacking in terms of grammar and spelling.

Please, help me report this fool...

EDIT: Story seems to have been removed. Thanks, guys.

Listed.

Code V

3/1/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #40
Chaos Productions

Truth and Dare: Negima

The sodding fool reposted... I guess this can be considered "Report Only" now, no?

Story purged~

Listed.

Code V

3/1/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #41
Ever Heard of a Dictionary

Author

Story

This author said that she's the best writer in her class, and her punctuation and spelling is the strongest~ Could be.

She doesn't want to improve, listen to anyone, thinks concrit is bad and at the same time, wants to improve. She said one opinion doesn't matter, because she's only looking at the mindless praising reviews.

Code R

3/4/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #42
Persephone999

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5970210/1/Surviving_after_Jimmy

One of mine, if no one's busy. Code R

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6799793/1/The_Phantom_of_the_Opera_The_Girl_with_an_Angel_V

May include song lyrics, possibly a minor sue. OC is described as having "silver eyes" in the first paragraph. Code V

3/6/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #43
Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond

Plagiarized: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6522212/1/Danny_Phantom_Trial_By_Fire

Original: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4294999/1/Danny_Phantom_Trial_by_Fire

Author didn't even bother to change the title of the fic.

Plagiarized fic pulled.

Listed.

Code V

3/7/2011 . Edited 9/30/2011 #44
Compass Indigo

Umm... hey.

I was just wondering if any of you would be willing to reveiw what I currently have for my fic? I know there's not much to go on at this point, but Ch. 1 (Prologue [approx. 3500 words] is up at the moment) is completed and is merely awaiting some final edits.

I hope this works... http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6773795/1/Once_In_A_Blue_Moon

Sorry to bother you all... if you don't want to review you don't have to, I was just looking for some advice now so that I won't start any particularly bad habits...

Code R

3/9/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #45
Brinkmess

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6794143/1/Truth_or_Dare_Kingdom_Hearts_Style

I highly recommend sending a warning to this author, as well as a possible report. This story is written in chat speak and is interactive.

Today I've received a PM that he will petition this site, and that he holds higher power than most people on the site.

Deleted. Listed.

Code V

3/10/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #46
Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond

Clean-up I

Title: a pirates tale

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6422742/1/a_pirates_tale

Author: heartlova

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2410600/heartlova

Synopsis:

Poor grammar and a hardly discernable plot, but that may just be me in Naruto. Have fun with this one.

Remember the R.I.'s!

Title: How To Succeed As A Naruto Fanfiction Writer

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6608123/1/How_To_Succeed_As_A_Naruto_Fanfiction_Writer

Author: LightningHunter

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1190353/LightningHunter

Synopsis:

Well, this story comes from the Naruto fandom. It is a "guide" on how to be a successful author in that fandom. Big mistake. The stuff in there encourages things against the rules (i.e. lemons, et cetera), and is generally... I don't know, narcissistic? Anyhow, the call is yours. The story is against the rules.

Remember to review the Reviewing Ideals section of the Forum Rules. It is updated recently. Always remember to touch up on things, if possible. Notify the author it is against Guidelines in your review.

Some key points to focus on in your review would be (insert things here, just for you Atao)~ :D

Title: Hgh school well is high school

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6607533/1/Hgh_school_well_is_high_school

Author: Perseus Poseidon Jackson

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1914323/Perseus_Poseidon_Jackson

Synopsis:

Grammatical issues as far as the eye can see, improper capitalization, and generally something non-understandable. Some key points to focus on in your review would be the plot structure and grammatical issues that need to be addressed.

Title: Spyro and the dragon withinhttp://www.fanfiction.net/s/6410824/1/Spyro_and_the_dragon_within

Author: Peacegrrl http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2493965/peaceGrrl

Synopsis: Poor grammar- Use of punctuation, spelling, etc. Real person casting Poor format style- Massive wall of text.

Deleted fictions removed from this clean-up list and placed to TSM deletions list.

Code: Possibly mixed. Case-by-case basis.

3/15/2011 . Edited 9/30/2011 #47
Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond

Cleanup II

Story: The Legend of Star

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5879602/1/The_Legend_Of_Star

Author: Chuckles the Cheat

Telling rather than showing. Issues with punctuating dialogue. Problems with tenses. Sentence fragments.

Story: Her Broken Soul Version 2

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6628121/1/Her_Broken_Soul_version_2

Author: Polaris the dragon

Seemingly bad attitude. Song lyrics without any sort of disclaimer or what, have you. Issues with properly punctuating dialogue. Sentence fragments.

Story: Hero

Fandom: Naruto

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3393666/1/Hero

Author: FeatherxxDreams

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/896096/FeatherxxDreams

Songfics, and old ones. This story started up in 2007, with a recent authors note chapter update. Mention that, but never let it be your main reviewing focus! Crit the story behind the songfics.

Story: Bring It Up

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6631878/1/Bring_It_Up

Author: Twisted Twilight Tales

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2594222/Twisted_Twilight_Tales

Synopsis: A lemon, though a very well-written one at that. Give it your best work.

Author: lucylovesyouxoxo

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2627759/lucylovesyouxoxo

Synopsis: Breaking the rules through interactivity and an authors note chapter is not necessary something to look up to. Three chapters of no content.

Since you are required to critique, just state the violation calmly, since there is nothing to critique, really.

Story: Crash: The series: Season 2

Fandom: Crash Bandicoot

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6313007/1/Crash_The_series_Season_2

Author: Capt. Liam X

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1009726/Capt_Liam_X

Synopsis: This generally is not poorly written, it just needs a nudge back into correctness in some spots. Places lacking include language and phrasing, and, at least I think so, plot. Oh, and there is extreme lack of detail in most chapters.

Deleted posts removed and placed on the deleted TSMs list.

Code: Varies. Go by case-by-case basis.

3/15/2011 . Edited 9/30/2011 #48
Stolloss

the one place you can't escape is looking for inmates. Here's a select quote from chapter two that will make you interested:

DONT LISTEN I DIDNT STEAL THIS there mad b/c im new and better than the rest of them! if i stole this, then HOW ARE YOU'RE CHARACTERS IN HERE?

The original is here.

edit: story has been deleted.

Listed.

Code V

3/17/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #49
Devils-Advocates33

Author: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2389201/Bunniez

Story:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6820167/1/Songfic_Gallagher_girl_edition

Song-fic with very bad spelling/grammar. I've reviewed twice and reported, because the author PMed me to whine and bitch about how her stories not against the rules. She's PMd me multiple times with pretty much the same message. She's been warned, so feel free to report.

Story removed. Listed.

Code V

3/20/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #50
decidedlyindecisive

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6848012/1/The_Crossing

Yes, that would be one of my own fanfictions. I haven't written any pieces for the genre (horror) before now, so I'm entirely unsure of whether it works or not. Honest opinions welcome, basically. Same goes for harsh concrit~

Deleted. Listed.

Code R

3/26/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #51
Chaos Productions

Hrm... Didn't even know we could post our own here... If I may, here goes:

Project Archangel

This here's one of my crossovers. Resident Evil and an anime called Burst Angel. Is it possible for one of my fellow members to leave me their thoughts of it in a review?

Code R

3/27/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #52
Persephone999

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6848372/1/Lunch_Time_Fun

Rape fic. Need I say more?

Story removed. Listed.

Code V

3/27/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #53
Persephone999

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2873069/1/

An FP story that I am currently reworking. Be as harsh as you can, please.

Code R-- recommended for deletion due to content link being FP.

3/27/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #54
Serenity in Virginia

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6809156/1/The_Legend_of_Spyro_Eternal_Mates

I reviewed this story and the chap didn't exactly take it too well. If you guys disagree with my opinion. I'm more than welcome to apligize to the guy.

Code V-R(?)

4/4/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 9/30/2011 #55
Venere Veritas

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6462558/1/Slave_No_4

This is a link to a multi-chaptered Kingdom Hearts fic. I reviewed the first chapter a while ago, and decided to take a look at the second.

The second chapter has rape in it. The story itself (from the two chapters I've read) has grammar and punctuation errors, as well as just plain awkward sentences. Marluxia is the cliched sexual deviant, and Vexen is a helpless "uke". I warned her in my first review that PWP fics are not allowed.

I would really appreciate some reviews and warnings. Rape isn't cool and shouldn't just be thrown into a story. Thanks.

Story deleted. Listed.

4/12/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 7/9/2011 #56
Suk-fong

Hi, how are you all?

I was wondering if I could get some feedback on my story White Noise in Bleach. It's AU, and I really want to learn to improve. I haven't been gettign feedback on how to improve my writing, and what I can do to make this story better, so any help would be much obliged and loved.

Thank you,

Suki

4/12/2011 #57
Brinkmess

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2796259/phil331

This author has written several (I wanna say 11) stories in chat/script format. Some of his stories are in the wrong genre, a few with wrong characters listed to be in the story, and there are quite a bit of grammar errors as well.

Possible troll, seeing that I warned him and his response was to post even more stories. Please help me in getting rid of his stories. He has thirteen up, and all of them break some sort of rule.

Edit: He deleted his stories and says he won't be on this "stupid site anymore".

Edit 2: Profile active again!

4/13/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 7/1/2011 #58
Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond

Author: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2750785/Rsces

Story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6821333/1/Are_you_Obsedded_With_Coraline_Or_a_true_hater# (quiz fic/non-story).

Story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6884802/1/7_ways_to_annoy_tbe_Coraline_Cast# (list fic).

Story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6843859/1/Funny_chat# (script fic in a weird fashion).

Story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6826963/1/the_new_side_of_me# (script fic).

Story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6842312/1/She_will_be_loved (script fic).

Story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6894257/1/Altenate_Ending (lyrics are confirmed to be from somewhere... is this a songfic to you?)

4/13/2011 . Edited 4/15/2011 #59
Lessthanthree-Carissa

Alright, get ready for my clean up list o' doom. These are stories that I've reviewed to that the author hasn't fixed up or is against the rules.

Author: Adventure Prince

Story: Odd chibified

Notes: Bad grammar, talked to the author awhile back and they claimed they were looking for a beta but no beta is apparent, says "No flames"

Author: Flyleaf-Punkie

Story: Depleting Hope

Notes: Bad grammar, original fiction

Author: random duck

Story: one to many

Notes: very poor grammar, both Mandy and I have review this fic, a lot of OC characters and random places, maybe a Mary Sue

Author: dijah12

Story: From Darkness To Light

Notes: original fiction

Author: poochigirl101

Story: Lava Island

Notes: original fiction and author even says so in the summary

Author: lalamachu

Story: Divided heart 1, I love you

Story:Amando a un inmortal 1, el corazon de diamante

Notes: double post, both of the above stories are the exact same, poor structuring

Author: Ghost Whisperer Fan 6

Story: Holiday Fic

Notes: a poll

Author: dark master's domain

Story: New Eyes

Notes: original fiction and the author knows it

Author: volleyball98

Story: three ninja lives

Notes: text blocks, poor spelling/grammar

Author: Stewiefan6868

Story: Lesbian:Rape

Notes: original fiction, nothing to do with rape, both chapters are exactly the same

4/15/2011 . Edited by Sextuple Covalent Mo2 Bond, 7/1/2011 #60
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