The Mechanics of In Flight
One of my reviewers mentioned the idea of starting a forum for those who want to debate various points of my story without clogging up the review section too much. I decided to go ahead and give it a try.
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Obiki Doragon

Going to have to agree that, that was excessive.

6/29/2011 #1,801
HubiKoshi

Awwww, and Kaien was such a perfect target for Kashimashi ^^;

6/29/2011 #1,802
Mu-Sensei

Relax, guys. He will get his junk back... Eventually. Is just that in the concept of the character, he and Aoshi were slightly perverted, nowhere near Karin, but considering that in his family Harems are normal, giving him Lala wouldn't put the guy in any trouble with the girls at his school. Hence the gender-bending. That is also the reason of the Aoshi & Fuuko incident, as I have stated before, I was planning throwing them in hatsukoi, but considering their "aptitude" for love troubles, I had to put a twist.

6/29/2011 . Edited 6/29/2011 #1,803
Kreyn
Requiem of Chaos: Genderbend Karin into male how would she use this condition?
6/29/2011 #1,804
deus-rasengan2

Plus it may take some time for all his brothers to get use to the changes. Certain habits will need to be change.

"Kyon, aren't you going in?" Haru asked as he was heading into the bath area.

"Kaien's in there..." He simply said.

"And your problems is..." Haru trailed off as he opened the door and walked in. Kyon metally counted down then...

"Kyaaa!"

"AAAHHH!!"

Haru quickly bolted out of the bath dodging bath objects as well as an occasional fireball. "I Forgot!!"

6/29/2011 #1,805
Mu-Sensei

@Kreyn: Frightening concept, possibly dangerous to sanity.

@Rasengan: That is the spirit!

6/29/2011 #1,806
Kreyn
@Mu-Sensei: Weak try that: in the same accident Genderbend Matsu and give her Idea to genderbend Shirou....... NOW this is what I consider frigheting concept my young padawan.
6/29/2011 #1,807
HubiKoshi

Want scary? I'll give you scary.

http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/053/2/8/gender_bender_by_andarion-d3a67ba.jpg

And Shirou becomes a girl

6/29/2011 #1,808
Kreyn
@HubiKoshi: If one was of weaker mind he might try tho crush his face into monitor in order to try burn out his eyes, do not use such images carelessy, if your fellow readers hurt you wish not. And now lets leave concept of gendebending Shirou. Why? Because in long term it's useless, thanks to wishes of Akasha his GAR overrides laws of common sense and Five Magics, sooner or later he will return to his true form.
6/29/2011 . Edited 6/29/2011 #1,809
HubiKoshi

@Kreyn

Or will become the most badass woman in history, I won't complain :-3 Well time to go sleep,

6/29/2011 #1,810
Mu-Sensei

@Kreyn: And suddenly, we have the reason for Shirou's Heroic BSOD in Fate / Lost in the World omake. Scary indeed. Remember to never taunt you. Ever.

@Hubikoshi: Fearsome, not as much as Hap-you know who, but fearsome. And the subtext was right.

6/29/2011 #1,811
deus-rasengan2

Haru's training with Rakan: Day 1

(Scene)

After celebrating Haru's winnings, Jack Rakan slept in the first day from an intensive hangover. After that he finally began his training for Haru.

So now we find Haru, standing on a wobbly rock, in the middle of a steep hill, being careful not to fall. Normally this wouldn't be a problem for Haru, he was training with Jack Rakan. So Jack had weights strapped to his arms and legs, nearly tripling Haru's weight. Add to that, he was forced to hold onto a rope in each hand, which was tied to a medium sized rock. That in which he had to hold his arms apart. Anyone looking at him would think he was a human scale.

"So why am I..." The rock tilted slightly, causing his grip on one of the rocks to lower slightly. He quickly pulled back up to reset his balance. "...on this stupid hill!"

"Well, we need to increase your strength more in order for you to properly learn the techniques I'll be teaching you." Rakan said as he sipped from his bowl of sake, sitting comfortably on the grassy plain next to the hill as he observed Haru. "Also, think of it as your first lesson, learning patience."

"Patience...?" Haru asked as he kept himself steady. He'd been up here for almost a half hour and the weights were starting to take their toll on him. "I always thought the first lesson... was discipline?"

"It is...?" Rakan blinked, scratching his head before shrugging. "Well, this'll kill two birds with one stone." He then blinked again. "Or would it be three in this case?"

"And just how... will this teach me....patience?" Haru asked as he was finally able to stop the rock from moving. He blinked as butterfly landed on his left hand, making it lower slightly. As he tried to blow the butterfly off, he didn't notice Rakan suddenly standing up, casually tossing a rock in his hand.

"You will learn patience..." Jack caught the rock. "When you can avoid distractions!" He then quickly threw the rock.

Haru smirked as the butterfly flew away. He turned back to his sensei... just in time to get smacked in the face by a small rock. "Ah! son of a-" He's cut off as the rock he's standing on slips out from under him, causing him to tumble done the hill the large rocks quickly rolling after him.

"You were distracted by the butterfly, Haru... as well as trying to steady the rock." A faint crashing sound and a groan later, Rakan sighed. "All right... five minute break then we'll move on.." Another groan was his only response.

(Scene end)

6/29/2011 #1,812
Mu-Sensei

I awake in a beautiful room. Probably in that heaven dad told me about, for the last thing I remember, was being dragged out of my burning spaceship by a angel with white-streaked red hair and the kindest golden eyes I ever saw.

Now I am in a room of light blue, with glassy windows, and white curtains, and out there one of those beaches like father told me about in his stories. I wake up, and a beautiful woman clad in white at my side talk to me:

"Easy there sweetie, you've being unconscious for almost two days."

"Is this heaven? Where is the angel who saved me?" I said, not yet fully awake.

"And she was not even conscious, damned pornomancy!" She grumbles. Damned what?

"What?" I ask numbly.

"I think you were hallucinating..."

"Uh." I couldn't keep the disappointment out of my voice. He was so handsome, yet so cute. I must've blushed cause my caretaker grumbled some more, something that sounded like tying some one for punishment, and Miya's gear.

Must be a terran's stuff. "Please to meet you, my name is Mizuho Kazami." I bow in my seated position, but once back up my head spin like crazy.

"Chiho Emiya. Welcome to the Earth, Kazami-san. Rest for a bit, I will get you something to eat."

...

I go assault the kitchen, and Gil calls me on it, closing the fridges door little time after I opened. "Lunch will be ready in one hour and forty minutes, no soon, no less, eating before that will ruin your appetite."

"Yet, you could be a bit more polite about it." I glare at him.

"You are not intimidating anyone." He towers above me easily, for I spend most of my adolescence on a bed. Kazehana-chan calls me tiny, but I prefer pettit. "I am the ruler of the kitchen, if not of the house. The faker build the estates, but I am the one who maintains them. And tasting my cook is a privilege that can't admit being spoiled-"

I simply igned his speech going to raid the fridge again. "Is not for me, is for Kazami-san, the girl Shirou-kun have rescued the other day..."

"I still can't believe the faker is getting another wife. I hope he is at least satisfied with the number of kids. If you got more, I will definitely need help. And don't even start with the 'you have the prinni-', Stop leaving me alone when I talk!"

I couldn't suppress my giggles. But my happiness was short lived, for as I entered the infirmary, Shirou, MY Shirou was talking with Kazami-san.

"... and we have a lot of kids too. They're a bit energetic, but very nice guys once you get to know them."

"Sounds nice. I got a little sister, but always imagined how is like to have a large family." She smile cutely while blushing. He is doing it again, and not even trying dammit! It was the same with Luvia! She came for a visit, talks for an afternoon, have tea, she stays for a week, and the next time I asked when she was going back to england she decided to marry him!

No, I will not let it happen. "Honey? Met Kazami-san already?"

"Yes Chiho-chan." He kiss me on the lips, forcing me to cling of my anger with all my might. "Is there something wrong?"

"Gil was giving me a speech. I think I've heard Saber calling you, better not leave her waiting..."

Darling leaves, and I turn to our guest, a smile reminiscent of my daughter gracing my lips. "Look, I know how handsome is he, how charming, utterly kind ans loving he is... but he is set! He have enough wives as it is, and we do not need an outsider to start joining our family!"

"I, I, I was just talking." She embrace her legs, trying to appear smaller. "I meant no harm."

"You all start talking. Then you want to touch, then kiss, then you go to bed with him..." She turn red, but I don't relent, "And then you want to marry. I saw that many times. HE.IS.OFF.LIMITS!"

"You really love him. And I can see why..."

"That is the problem, every woman can see why." I let my head fall in my hands, and drop on the bed. "He spend time with all of us, as much as he can, but sometimes I feel he is neglecting himself, or pushing himself beyond his own limits to make us happy. And that makes me sad." She embrace me warmly. "I know how bad is to push your body beyond your limits, and I don't want that to no one. I know he mean well, but I can't help but worry for him...I don't want to go through this, never again... Uzume-chan was enough..."

"Shh. I understand... I understand..." She made circling motions on my back...

I was trying to break her, but I was the one who broke.

...................................................................................................................

Don't kill me for it. Pretty please?

6/29/2011 . Edited 6/29/2011 #1,813
throwaawy

@Mu-Sensei

chiho seems oddly assertive O_o

i thiiink we had planned for onegai sensei already so nothing to kill there.. but is chiho like that in canon?

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Emiya Clan - Nerima 07

---

Koyuki looked around cautiously as she opened the door to the main entrance as quietly as she could. Seeing no one else around, she opened it just enough to squeeze through, then turned to close it just as carefully.

"And where do you think you're going, brat?" A shadow fell over her and she turned around slowly, staring into the annoyed visage of the family caretaker.

"Uncle," she solemnly greeted. She tried to shrug, one shoulder moving while the other was held in place with a cast and sling. "I was merely about to go for a walk."

The Golden King-turned-Nanny snorted. "The Faker warned Me you'd try to pull this. I find myself agreeing with him in spite of Myself." His eyes softened fractionally. "You shouldn't be walking around like that, kid. Go back inside and get some rest."

"With respect, Uncle, I must refuse." The snow girl walked past her guardian, who simply stepped aside without comment. "I have not yet properly introduced myself to the remaining competition. I cannot leave this task incomplete."

Gilgamesh watched her silently as she took the steps from the entrance towards the main gate. "It's on your head if fall on hard times again," he called as she reached out to open it. "I'll not have the Faker laying any of the blame on Myself!"

Despite his harshness of his words, she heard the undercurrent of worry from the man who had almost single-handedly raised her and her siblings. Koyuki smiled as she pushed her way out.

---

The King of Nannies stood in silence for a few moments, watching the main gate slowly swing closed. Turning back towards the house, he looked up and called out into the heavens. "So, what now?"

A blur detached itself from the roof and dropped lightly to the ground before him. "I can't -- in good conscience -- allow my injured sister to wander off by herself." Chiyo smiled at him as she rose to her feet. "Especially not when I haven't finished patching her up again."

Gilgamesh simply snorted and looked off to the side. "You too?"

"Like we'd let 'Yuki run off on her own like that," scoffed Karin. She and Keiko stepped away from where they'd been hidden in the shadows as Sakuya dropped her concealment. The three walked up to join Chiyo as they presented a defiant air towards the grounds keeper.

Gilgamesh let out a theatrical sigh and shook his head as he stepped out of their way. "Such uncouth youths," he lamented. "Clearly that mongrel didn't raise his children properly if they disobey authority so easily."

Chiyo smiled as the four children headed towards the gates. "Then it's a good thing we have you around, Gil-ojisan," she said cheerfully. Turning back around, she bypassed the gate entirely, leaping over the walls, then to the rooftop of a nearby building.

The other three followed their roof-hopping sister at street level, chasing the trail Koyuki had left into the city.

---

Koyuki's knock on the door was answered fairly quickly by a smiling woman in an apron. She looked to be Arika-nee's age, but she possessed a maternal air that reminded her more of Miya-kaasan when she wasn't in one of her moods.

"Ara, are you a friend of Ranma-kun?" she asked politely as she stepped to the side.

Koyuki accepted the implied invitation and stepped through into the foyer. "I am, but I have come seeking Akane Tendou."

"Ah," somehow the woman's smile tightened. "Fortunately Akane is home today... helping to prepare dinner. I'll go let her know she's being asked for so she can meet you without delay!" She extended an arm down the hallway, "Please make yourself at home in the living room. She should be out shortly."

Koyuki nodded as she pulled off her shoes and followed the directions to the large room she had visited with her parents not a week ago. Already seated at one of the couches was a girl with close-cropped hair, flipping through a newspaper. The Tendou's middle child, if Koyuki recalled correctly.

Nabiki noticed her walking in and glanced over her shoulder. "You're looking for Ranma?"

"Akane-san," Koyuki corrected. "I wished to speak with her regarding our... situation."

Nabiki eyed the newspaper, which Koyuki could now see was a large spread of family-restaurant coupons. "Well, if you can, try to keep her talking for a while. Otherwise we're eating out."

Before the snow girl could puzzle out that statement, the middle Tendou had gathered up her belongings and headed up the stairs to her room.

---

Outside the Tendou dojo, the other four Emiya children made themselves comfortable on a neighboring building's rooftop. Karin immediately pulled out a set of binoculars and focused them through the ground-floor window while Keiko and Sakuya surveyed the property. Chiyo was perched on the chimney stack, using her higher vantage point to scan the surrounding streets and rooftops.

"I only see Koyuki and the Tendou girls," Karin finally reported. "The grownups and Ranma must be out or something."

"Did you check the dojo itself?" Chiyo asked.

"Er, not yet."

"I got it," Keiko said. She had traced the Leupold Mk4 scope attachment from her sniper rifle and was using it as an makeshift telescope. She studied the view for a moment then dissolved the accessory. "No movement, he must really be out."

"Pity," said Sakuya. "I was looking forward to seeing him again."

Above them, Chiyo sniffed the air a few times in confusion. "What is that smell?"

---

An annoyed Akane stormed out of the kitchen and into the living room, slapping a towel over various grease, food, and other unidentifiable stains on her clothing and arms. Her eyes narrowed as she saw the newest proof of her fiancé's perversion rising from the couch to greet her, then blinked as she noticed the girl's arm in a cast and sling.

"You're not here to fight in that condition, are you?" she blurted out.

"No, Tendou-san," the girl quietly replied. "Unless there is no other alternative, I would much rather try to talk our way through our differences."

Akane's thought process momentarily stumbled at the deference the other teen was offering her. It quickly reasserted itself in its default mode -- suspicious. She eyed the girl speculatively as she moved towards the couch on the opposite side of the table. "Koyuki, was it?" she said as she sat down.

"Koyuki Emiya," she affirmed. She waited until Akane was seated comfortably before taking a seat herself. "I wished to open a dialogue between us, hopefully reaching a compromise regarding Ranma-sama."

"Ranma is my fiancé," Akane bit out. "The only compromise is for you to accept that and walk away from this whole nightmare."

Koyuki frowned, "That is not an acceptable outcome. Ranma-sama and I are bonded and-"

Akane's mind took the phrasing and interpreted it in the most negative way possible. "He did what?!" she shrieked. "I will kill that pervert!"

"What?" The other girl was blinking rapidly, her face growing pale.

"You... and he..." Akane struggled to to keep the mental image out of her head, failing miserably. "That's disgusting! That pervert!"

"It was just a kiss, Akane," Nabiki wandered back down the stairs. "And she was the one to initiate it, not the other way around."

Akane's face went red, "B-but it sounded like..."

Nabiki's mouth curled into an amused smirk. "Only you would take an innocent innuendo and run off with it like that..." She made her way back to the couch and sat next to her sister. "Here, I'll help you out since you're obviously to distraught for delicate negotiations."

---

Karin's binoculars creaked as she glared into the eyepiece. "They're double-teaming her now..."

"Are you sure?" Keiko peered over her shoulder. "It looks to me like the other girl's there to control her own sister."

Karin offered the device over to her sister. "Look though, they've got 'Yuki-chan sweating. She never sweats."

"Oh?" Chiyo suddenly looked concerned. "She shouldn't be... unless..." She suddenly groaned. "That girl..."

"What?"

"She still hasn't recovered her strength. I'd say the physical strain of walking over here combined with the mental strain of trying to talk to a Grade-S tsundere is finally taking its toll on her," their elder sister explained.

Sakuya cocked her head to the side, "Grade-S?"

"Think Rin-kaasan and Tsuki-kaasan, combined."

"Eew."

Karin pressed the binoculars into Keiko's hands. "I'm gonna go help her out."

---

"So," Nabiki said casually. "Koyuki, was it?"

"Yes, Tendou-san."

"Call me Nabiki. I admit I haven't heard much about your circumstances. Tell me, why would you say you and Ranma are 'bonded' together? Are you from China, by chance?"

Koyuki blinked. "Why does everybody ask that...?"

---

Chiyo suddenly sat up straight. "Hum."

Sakuya turned towards her, "What is it?"

Chiyo motioned towards the skyline being outlined by the sunset. "There's another person roof-hopping... I think they're coming this way."

"Is it Ranma?" Sakuya asked eagerly.

Chiyo turned an amused smile on her younger sister. "Doesn't look like it. And I thought you had better control than that, Sakuya-chan."

The shadow girl frowned, but let the comment slide. "If it's not Ranma... should I hide us?"

"Please. Until we know what they want, we should probably stay out of sight."

The shadows rose up to surrounded the three girls, and soon they had completely vanished from sight.

---

Akane clenched her fists in a futile attempt to control her temper. "That's the stupidest thing I've ever heard! You expect us to believe that just by kissing him, your entire existence is dependent on him?"

"It's more or less true," said a new voice. All three girls turned towards the entrance to see Kasumi leading a new girl -- a redhead with glasses -- over to their table. "Thank you, Kasumi-chan."

She moved over to stand before Koyuki. "You should really take care of yourself better, 'Yuki-chan. You wont convince them to go along with you by keeling over in mid-sentence."

Nabiki turned her attention back to the bluenette, suddenly noticing that the girl had been sweating profusely, something she didn't see at first because of her pale complexion.

"Karin..." Koyuki slumped into her sister's side as the redhead sat down next to her. "Why are you here?"

"Just relax," the redhead replied. She ignored the question and she wrapped an arm around her shoulder. "Go ahead and try to listen in, but don't exert yourself trying to answer."

"So, Akane-chan~" Karin smiled as the other girl bristled at the casual form of address. "You were asking about the Winging Ritual. Well..."

---

A shadowy figured landed on a nearby roof, chosen for its clear view of the building next to it. Silently making its way to the edge, the figure peered down to look at the meeting taking place.

"Hm, it appears my loyal servant was correct," a melodious and haughty voice proclaimed. "I shall have to find a way to reward Sasuke for his efforts."

There was a flurry of movement and Kodachi Kuno appeared, her cloak draped over one arm and a gymnastics ribbon-baton held at the ready in her other.

"Such a clear opening!" she declared. "Time to take out the pesky Tendou girl and this new harlot that has appeared. Once they are out of the way, Ranma-sama will have no choice to but to accept my love! OHOHOHOHO-erk"

"That doesn't sound very nice."

Chiyo stepped out of the shadows, one hand holding a blade at the ready while the other pressed a second sword against the gymnast's throat. "Threatening innocent people is not a very smart thing to do, that goes double when my sisters are involved."

Kodachi turned her head slowly, exposing herself to the full measure of Chiyo's Angelic Smile of Doom. A part of her quailed at the sight, mentally withdrawing on itself into a shivering wreck.

The other, much larger part of her simply did not care. She turned a bright-eyed, insane smile back on her captor. "How amusing! Yet another wench is trying to keep me from my Ranma-sama!"

She exploded into a storm of black rose petals.

Chiyo frowned and took her combat stance.

---

Nabiki leaned back, frowning as she sorted through Karin's explanation of the Winging Ritual, Ashikabi, and noritos. She noticed Akane had gone slightly cross-eyed, apparently having much less success in processing the idea that kissing equated to marriage for Koyuki's family. Although the redhead still managed to avoid saying what particular culture they were part of...

Koyuki was still collapsed onto her sister's shoulder. She still looked pale but her breathing was back under control. She had sat through the explanation, eyes watching them carefully but otherwise immobile.

Karin pulled out her tablet -- which she'd affectionately named her MBiPad -- and flicked it on. She navigated her way through the database she had stored on it, finally coming across the entry she was looking for.

"Akane Tendou," she read aloud. "A few months ago there was an incident in the Qinghai Province in People's Republic of China. This involved a demi-god, a race of flight-capable demons, and a majority of the Nerima Wrecking Crew -- including Ranma... and you." She flipped her tablet around to show a satellite picture of what was unmistakably Saffron's in the middle of one his fire attacks being impaled by Ranma's Hiryuu Hyou Toppa.

After a few seconds of letting them stare at the image in shock, she spun the 'pad back around to let Koyuki see it. "Your boy's pretty impressive... Anyhow, the situation was resolved with the death of the demi-god -- although he's supposed to come back to full strength in a few years -- and Akane was... killed." She peered over the screen to look at the shocked girl in question. "Clearly you got better."

Nabiki narrowed her eyes to glare at Karin. "You've been spying on us."

The redhead waved her free hand dismissively, "Oh no, not at all. We didn't even learn about you people until 'Yuki-chan here got winged. We did have to pull the satellite images from the PRC's own database, but the notes here are all from you."

The middle Tendou's eyes widened, "You're the one who hacked my computer!"

"That was my Mom. But she did share the results with me." Karin grinned at the stunned girl, then turned her attention back to Akane. "I wanted to bring that up because I had a question for you, Akane-chan. It was Ranma who saved your life, ya?"

"...Yes," she said quietly. No doubt she was in the middle of reliving her memories of the whole episode. "I heard him... he told me..."

Karin and Nabiki both waited patiently, knowing exactly what happened.

"He told me he loved me..."

Koyuki sighed in defeat. Karin reached over to pat her on the head comfortingly. "Do you love him back?"

"What?!"Instantly her energy was back. "Why would I love that masochistic, perverted --" She broke off as she noticed the two Emiya siblings glaring at her. Beside her, Nabiki breathed out an exasperated sigh.

Karin rubbed her forehead, "'Yuki-chan, tell the girl how you feel about Ranma."

There was a pause as Koyuki levered herself back into a sitting position. She stared at Nabiki and Akane in turn, holding the younger Tendou's eyes as she opened her mouth.

"For Ranma-sama I would do anything, I would go anywhere. When I think about him it hurts, as if my heart does not know whether to leap for joy or to shatter into pieces. When I think back on my life before I met him, it feels so empty. I would stay by his side forever if I could. If we were separated I would seek him out for eternity. For every day I am able to be with him I thank the Root of the World.

"No matter what has happened to me in the past, or what will happen in the future; for this chance to be with him I would consider all of that a trade in my overwhelming favor. I love him."

As she spoke, her voice rose and gained in strength from her normal quiet murmurs. By the end of her declaration, her eyes were alight, a beatific smile spread across her face. When she finished, though, she suddenly blinked and withdrew back into herself. She slumped back against the cushions as if all the strength had suddenly left her body, and Karin pulled her back to lean on her shoulder.

Nabiki blinked. "That sounded like a very nice speech," she drawled. "Now what do you really think?"

Karin and Koyuki both glared at her.

The redhead turned back to address Akane. "For all the perceived faults you find with him, you were still willing to marry Ranma," she brandished MBiPad to prove her point. "...and he was willing to marry you. Despite everything he went through, despite the fact that you died on him, he still risked everything to bring you back. You know he loves you. You should treasure that love, you'll never find anything else like it again."

Karin patted ruffled Koyuki's hair, drawing an annoyed look from her sister. "Koyuki knows -- we both know -- this too. She's not asking to steal Ranma from you. Honestly that would be ideal, but it's probably not going to happen. All she wants is for you to allow her to remain close to him. You heard her, if you keep separate them separated she will be miserable for the rest of her life."

Akane stared. "Do you really feel that way?"

Koyuki nodded slowly.

"I mean -- not that I love that jerk," she protested. Karin and Nabiki both sighed. "But... if... we... marry...," she blushed, "I suppose it wouldn't hurt to let you visit... sometimes."

"Well again," Karin adjusted her glasses, which suddenly became opaque with reflected light, "ideally we'd have all three of you, and maybe the rest of those nice girls in a sweet little harem; but i suppose she can settle for just that, right 'Yuki?"

Koyuki nodded much more enthusiastically.

The Tendou sisters both gaped openly at the redhead, now softly chortling to herself. "You... you're a pervert too!" Akane yelled, standing up and hefting one of the couch cushions.

Just as she was about to throw it, the ceiling collapsed in a mess of wood and tiles and a body flew through the opening to land on the floor beside the table. Closer inspection revealed a very dazed, very bruised gymnast in a familiar black leotard.

Chiyo poked her head through the hole in the roof. "Whoops, sorry about that!"

---

The rest of the visit went moderately well. Once the Tendous had adjusted to the presence of all five Emiya siblings -- and Koyuki adjusted to the idea that she'd been followed -- a truce of sorts had been reached. Nabiki had attempted to wrangle whatever information she could get about the Clan, but once Chiyo had entered the conversation she suddenly decided to spend the rest of the evening in her room. Kasumi had played the role of gracious hostess, telling them amusing stories about "Ranma's many friends" and other events which were used to update the database on Karin's MBiPad.

Kodachi had been unceremoniously dumped onto the street in front of the dojo.

Finally it grew somewhat late, but before they could excuse themselves Kasumi came to them with one last request.

"You can have dinner with us! Akane was working hard to make a meal for Ranma-kun, but he appears to not be coming home tonight so we have more than enough for you and your sisters."

Nabiki suddenly paled and dived out of the window... from her second-story bedroom.

Chiyo glanced at each of her siblings and got shrugs in return. Sure, why not? Free food!

---

Gilgamesh narrowed his eyes as he peered into the darkness. Five ghastly figures emerged from the gloom, shuffling in a manner normally reserved for the living dead. The otherwise quiet nighttime air was filled with the moans and wails of the damned.

With a flash, the Golden King's armor manifested itself and he keyed open Gate of Babylon, ready to purge the living world of these monstrosities. In the light of the opened Gate, however, he suddenly made out details that were previously lost to the darkness. Scarcely believing his eyes, he drew on the comfort of Ea as he approached the intruders. One by one, as they reached the gates they collapsed, twitching on the ground.

He cautiously reached out and flipped one of the bodies over with Ea's point, only to confirm what he'd seen previously. With a sigh, he shoved Ea back into the Gate and dismissed it, letting his armor dissipate as well.

"What. Happened. To. You?" he glared at a near-comatose Chiyo.

"I have tasted from the Recipe-Book of the Necromicon," she whispered, her voice raspy. "I seen beyond the Veil of Death."

"Kill me..." Keiko's voice floated from somewhere behind her.

There was another cry of sheer agony. "Help me, please!" Sakuya wailed. "I think she killed Yang!"

Koyuki simply lay where she had fallen, face embedded into the concrete.

Gilgamesh started as a trembling hand grasped his leg. He stared down as Chiyo struggled to lift her face up, "Remember us..." she whispered. Her hand went limp and she fell, moving no longer.

The King of Nannies sighed as he turned to head back into the household.

===

a bit of waff, a bit of humor, a bit of serious, more waff, more humor, i think i should be able to trim this down somehow. anybody see anything i can chop out? (i want to keep the kodachi bits in, i dont feel like writing another omake just for her)

6/29/2011 . Edited 6/29/2011 #1,814
Mu-Sensei

@throwaawy: How would I know [shrugs], she spent Sekirei's entire series unconscious in a bed. If you had to share you lover with others you would be a bit more assertive. And my father woke up with my laugh and is your fault.

6/29/2011 . Edited 6/29/2011 #1,815
Kreyn
@Mu-Sensei:: Shirou should invent technique of time spliting with help of Reiko or ask Zelrecht to send him on training to narutoverse to learn kagebunshin no jutsu.
6/29/2011 #1,816
Mu-Sensei

@Kreyn: Technically is a form of projection, so he should be capable of it...

@throwaawy: DON'T YOU DARE TRIMMING THAT OMAKE! IT'S PERFECT AS IT IS.

6/29/2011 #1,817
throwaawy

@Mu-Sensei

but it's so wordy :(

@Kreyn

eeewww noooo don't give him shadow clones. personal preference but i'd rather not see naruto stuff outside of naruto =/

6/29/2011 #1,818
Mu-Sensei

It has a balance between touching and comic, and very well written. Trimming will leave things hanging up or to the readers imagination a bit too much. Long omakes are OK if well written, long is only bad if is stretched without a purpose.

On the Clone stuff, Kaede and Kotaro have them too you know. Shirou could learn from them.

Now goodnight, 23:00 here.

6/29/2011 . Edited 6/29/2011 #1,819
Trooper1023

Yes! If you must go the clone skill route, take the Negima path! Shun the Naruto! That's right, SHUN THE DAMN FISHCAKE!!!!

6/29/2011 #1,820
lhklan The Unpronounceable

Guys, i just though of this crazy idea:(My English is very bad so if i got something wrong tell me okay?)

'Las Vegas sure is different than Fuyuki City at night.' Shirou mused to himself 'It's as if this city doesn't rest at all.'

He has come here on a business trip for MBI, and maybe hunt a few demons on the loose too.'Dante would have taken care of them thought.Then again, if he does,there should be more damaged building around.'

As he rounded the corner,he heard something from a nearby alley.

"My Lady, it is your father wish that you return with us immediately!"

"Sorry, not interested.Beside, it's more fun down here."

"Then we will have no choice but to take you by force!Men, SEIZE HER!"

He rushed over to see a green haired young woman being surrounded by a group of demons.His instincts kicks in and he trace Kanshou and Bakuya, thowing them at the demons.As the two blades struck, he trace another pair before charging the surprised demons.

*A moment later*

"Are you okay miss?"

"I'm fine thank you"She look at him,a seductive smirk on her face"Allow me to ... thank you properly"

"No need to thank me miss"

"Oh but i do"She purred"And my name is Morrigan"

Yes, i decided to add Morrigan Aensland from Darkstalker into Shirou's Harem.Imagine the chaos and hijinx that will ensues,especially if she decide to "have fun" with Altrouge,Lorelei,Rider,Aoko and/or Miya,What do you guys think?

6/29/2011 #1,821
Bloody Hero

Morrigan Aensland.......MORRIGAN AENSLAND........MORRIGAN AENSLAND!

Are you serious?! By the Damn Root, Everything will go to hell literally! Oh Shirou is in for one hell of a Ride. How would Darkstalkers even react to someone like Shirou. I'm not kidding he's fricken broken there. Oh this will not end well, not well at all.

By the way I completely approve of this idea, good job ;)

6/29/2011 #1,822
Kreyn
So he finaly did it and gotten himself another Demon Lord Huh. Well everything is fine and dandy with Althrogue because she is NEET and doesn't cpme ouut often (I think it is connected with her being more active after dark), but Morrigan hmmmmmmm....... She would probably help Kazehana with her novels (double authors?) gone on hunts with her to night clubs seducing men and then leave them all excited and bothered after few drinks, and she woul with the same purpose on Saber and Riders races, using Shirou every time he comes to watch/act as technical support and awakening burning jealousy in racers. But besides everything like that what would be her occupation?

No need to say I approve It's never bad to add strong woman to mix with Shirou.

No narutoverse huh then let's think of something that would allow Shirou to fullfill all of his duties, spend time with his children and his wifes without breaking himself, so Chiho won't be worried . The doubles, Archer, pernament Clones ARE FORBIDDEN

But Strugling while he tries to acomplish that and making Others worry more as result is approved.

6/30/2011 . Edited 6/30/2011 #1,823
HubiKoshi

@Kreyn

Hmm.... using Reiko's sword and time-manipulation abilities to make small loops so he can satisfy all his wives? Or perhaps giving Rin Cassiopea to experiment with?

6/30/2011 #1,824
Kreyn
@HubiKoshi:What's Cassiopea?
6/30/2011 #1,825
lhklan The Unpronounceable

@Kreyn

Cassiopeia is one of Chao's invention, a time machine.It can send the user back and forth throught time, but it has a limited use.

If that's the case, why don't we give him a Time Turner?Aya can get one from Harry for him

6/30/2011 #1,826
Kreyn
From what I hear those things have one major fault.
6/30/2011 #1,827
HubiKoshi

@Kreyn

Well from what we've seen they create stable time loops, besides they can be only used for short-term time travels, hours, maybe 2-3 days. Plus they need mana-rich environment to function at all. We could limit it's use to Emiya Mansion and avoid any game breaking. OR! We could get one of those 24 hours inside, 1 hour outside pocket dimensions from Evangeline, that would solve the time problems :-3

6/30/2011 . Edited 6/30/2011 #1,828
Kreyn
Problem is more basic, if Shirou starts using this method then he would need to do at daily base for years, to others this would look like he is aging much faster, in my opinion it would be 3-4 times faster at least, so unless his physical time stops, Avalon stops or at least is significaly slowing down his aging or Althrogue went DA on him then this method would have heavy price for everyone around him.
6/30/2011 . Edited 6/30/2011 #1,829
HubiKoshi

@Kreyn

Well the established fact is that Avalon grants immortality to a person who holds it, and Shirou is pretty much fused with Avalon. And even if it's NOT true, let's make it true, this is our world and we make the rules :-3

6/30/2011 #1,830
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