Jakuro the German ninja
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Joined 04-04-06, id: 1021265, Profile Updated: 07-09-12
Author has written 3 stories for Naruto, and Beet the Vandel Buster.

real name: ... are you really looking at this?

like: music, dancing, sports, video games, manga, good pairings

dislike: yaoi, yuri, twighlight


gender: male

languages I speak( fluently): German and English.

status: wouldn't you like to know?

favorite music : got a lot

I have pretty much stopped writing, since when I read my stories, I don't like how they are written, and then have other priorities. I feel I can do better by helping other authors get better than improve myself for praise in an area I don't plan to travel in my future. So anyone who actually liked my stories, I am sorry but I am just not approving of myself. This does not mean I'm leaving the site though.

So what i do here is read stories of authors who have ideas that peak my interest and see if it looks like they have potential. This does not mean I am a BETA, since i do not have the requirements. Things I watch out for in stories:

Grammar: yes I know; Grammar Nazi!!! that joke aside, a good story requires goos use of grammar. I myself am not perfect, don't know perfect punctuation, but can see where it counts. thus i am lenient with a mistake or two per page, even professionals and their editors make little grammar mistakes. but when i see gapping grammatical errors which disrupt the flow of the story, sometime 10 or more in half a page, that pisses me off.

Pacing: Very important! this includes how fast the story is going in relation to the characters, plot, events, foreshadowing, etc. I have seen many, many stories that don't allow for more fleshing out of the characters you are using in your world. even if this is just a fan fiction, allow this story to affect the characters. this applies to the world you are creating as well. now I know this does not apply to all types of stories, like one-shots, but I usually don't read them, since i want something to come back to. An example of bad pacing i see a lot is bad character development, taking pokemon stories for example where the trainer get multiple strong pokemon in one chapter. this allows less time to bond with each pokemon, and show the struggles actually needed to acquire strength, or in this case pokemon.

Narrative: way, WAY too often do I see "this is this way because blah blah blah" or "this being can do is this because blah blah blah". revealing everything about everything is boring, an unneeded. if you feel needs to be explained, be crafty about it and don't be too blunt. and the great thing about these not being published works, is that with the reviews you can ask for help , and people can be found that will help you say it better. Narrative works with pacing very heavily, which can help or hurt your story. so once done with a chapter read it out loud, which can help you see the flow of the chapter, and if you are comfortable with it, let someone else read it, and see their take. the more different opinions the better for your understanding. But still have a strong grip on your ideas, just make sure they come across the way you want, and others can help with that.

Enough of that. now i know that my stories have these very same mistakes, here is a good quote:

"do as i say, not as i do."

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When One Ends by Souljah and a Gentleman reviews
About 5 years have passed since the gang saw Ash, he reappears out of the blue in his hometown of Pallet much to the surprise of everyone. Ash decides it's time for him to settle down and open a gym in Pallet. What new trials and tribulations await him?
Pokémon - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 37 - Words: 246,657 - Reviews: 881 - Favs: 1,580 - Follows: 1,590 - Updated: 2/17 - Published: 11/25/2008 - Ash K./Satoshi, Misty/Kasumi
Wild Adventures: Pokenins! by Auto-nin reviews
Adoption is pending...Naruto never knew pushing Sasuke into a pond would lead them into ended up in a massive cave where a forest is inside. However, he also can't really focus on that as now all three have to find a way out while dealing with Pokemon! Itachi also there, too!
Crossover - Pokémon & Naruto - Rated: T - English - Humor/Adventure - Chapters: 3 - Words: 10,406 - Reviews: 34 - Favs: 102 - Follows: 72 - Updated: 11/25/2013 - Published: 9/6/2010 - Zoroark, Naruto U.
Pandaries: the Golden Heart KFP3 by Whitee Foxclaw reviews
What if Shen acted on orders from a higher power? What if it is the highest imaginable? A 1000 year old prophecy told, that Po would change all of China. But the higher powers don't want this. So armies are sent to vanquish this problem. ON-HIATUS
Kung Fu Panda - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 35 - Words: 120,891 - Reviews: 248 - Favs: 55 - Follows: 47 - Updated: 1/24/2012 - Published: 6/6/2011 - Po, Tigress - Complete
Arashi by psychopath123 reviews
Naruto was only a failing academy student, until something happened to him that changed his life for forever... Eventual NarutoxHarem,possible IchigoxHarem, nice, male Kyubi . Chapter 30 up! Bleach Crossover in later chapters
Crossover - Naruto & Bleach - Rated: T - English - Adventure - Chapters: 30 - Words: 67,567 - Reviews: 176 - Favs: 381 - Follows: 287 - Updated: 9/16/2011 - Published: 5/31/2009 - Naruto U., Ichigo K.
Tails of the Fox Sage by DarthValgaav reviews
In the battle with Sasuke, Naruto is presumed dead. He awakes to find himself in a new land and will face new challenges with new powers. Watch as he makes a name for himself. I don't own Naruto so plz don't sue me!
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 27 - Words: 126,431 - Reviews: 1693 - Favs: 2,200 - Follows: 1,898 - Updated: 12/21/2010 - Published: 4/2/2007 - Naruto U., Tsunade S.
Whirlpool Country by Jasticus reviews
Naruto must first accept what happened in the past before he can move on with his future. Many will come to depend on him. Rated M just in case. Gradual AU with parts of canon added in. NaruSaku
Naruto - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 28 - Words: 230,762 - Reviews: 905 - Favs: 1,286 - Follows: 1,182 - Updated: 6/1/2010 - Published: 2/21/2008 - Naruto U., Sakura H.
Konoha Exiles II: Time Warp by EroSlackerMicha reviews
The Sequel. Time has been reset. what will this mean now? More insanity, more crossovers cameo's, and More Hina/Naru. See what happens this go around as the Konoha crew does the Time Warp
Naruto - Rated: M - English - Chapters: 20 - Words: 40,185 - Reviews: 719 - Favs: 1,000 - Follows: 690 - Updated: 5/8/2010 - Published: 10/10/2008 - Naruto U., Hinata H. - Complete
Budding Emotions by Vigilance reviews
When a mad man threatens to destroy China and kidnaps one of the Five, Po arm himself with courage to oppose this dark force. Join Po as he travels through his journey to become a full fledged Dragon Warrior A PoxTigress Story . Part 1 of a Trilogy
Kung Fu Panda - Rated: T - English - Romance/Adventure - Chapters: 26 - Words: 53,798 - Reviews: 197 - Favs: 137 - Follows: 93 - Updated: 3/20/2010 - Published: 6/16/2008 - Po, Tigress
The Power of the Chosen One by PokemonFan011 reviews
Ash has won the Sinnoh Cup and is heading back to Pallet, when someone comes to search for Ash's help. Can Ash fulfill the true role of the Chosen One, or will the Pokemon World crumble and all will be lost. Pearlshipping AshxDawn
Pokémon - Rated: T - English - Romance/Adventure - Chapters: 7 - Words: 21,352 - Reviews: 75 - Favs: 86 - Follows: 77 - Updated: 2/6/2009 - Published: 1/3/2009 - Ash K./Satoshi, Dawn/Hikari
I'm Stuck In a House Full of Girls! by Jordan R. Was Here reviews
One month. 4 Crazy Girls. 4 Love Sick Girls. 1 Strange Teen. One Great Prize. One Twist. One mansion. Rated T for some strong Language, Violence, crude humor, and suggestive themes. Part 1 of my Boy Vs. Girl series.
Pokémon - Rated: T - English - Humor/Romance - Chapters: 52 - Words: 193,646 - Reviews: 1036 - Favs: 224 - Follows: 127 - Updated: 10/21/2008 - Published: 4/4/2006 - Ash K./Satoshi
Moving On by trulywicked reviews
Sakura rejects Naruto harshly and he decides to move on and make some changes. Those changes catch Temari's attention but what will happen when Sakura decides that she made a mistake rejecting him?
Naruto - Rated: M - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 2 - Words: 9,329 - Reviews: 313 - Favs: 517 - Follows: 624 - Updated: 8/30/2008 - Published: 4/27/2008 - Naruto U., Temari
The Dragon Sennin by Rukia8492 reviews
Naruto has a big brother who has come back to check on him who has been gone for 12 years. Will he accept the way naruto has been treated by the villagers? NarutoXTenten
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 9 - Words: 8,905 - Reviews: 205 - Favs: 112 - Follows: 119 - Updated: 7/15/2008 - Published: 12/1/2004 - Naruto U., Tenten
Konoha Exiles by EroSlackerMicha reviews
Uzumaki Naruto is exiled after brining the Uchiha back. Reunited with a childhood friend, the pair embark on a journey of discovery that will eventually bring them back to Konoha. NarutoHinata later chapters OCOC
Naruto - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 69 - Words: 177,437 - Reviews: 1789 - Favs: 2,640 - Follows: 1,189 - Updated: 6/15/2008 - Published: 12/6/2007 - Naruto U., Hinata H. - Complete
Red and Black Moments by inuhitokiri reviews
Hinata lost her powers,got kicked out of the Hyuuga compound and resides in with Naruto! NOT SUCH A HAPPY STORY but will have a happy ending. pls R&R. A HinataNaruto fic. Also a slow story.
Naruto - Rated: M - English - Romance/Tragedy - Chapters: 16 - Words: 24,181 - Reviews: 170 - Favs: 67 - Follows: 51 - Updated: 10/27/2007 - Published: 1/3/2007 - Hinata H., Naruto U. - Complete
My life and I by firebenderzuka reviews
just random things go around. the avatar characters is now living with me and now i have to put up with them actually quite fun. plaese enjoy
Avatar: Last Airbender - Rated: T - English - Humor - Chapters: 8 - Words: 4,328 - Reviews: 40 - Favs: 5 - Follows: 6 - Updated: 6/26/2007 - Published: 8/12/2006 - Zuko, Katara
Back and Forth by Second Remix reviews
Temari is given am escort for her travels as the liaison for the SandLeaf alliance. [Full Summary inside]
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Romance/Humor - Chapters: 4 - Words: 3,734 - Reviews: 67 - Favs: 31 - Follows: 47 - Updated: 8/16/2006 - Published: 6/5/2006 - Naruto U., Temari
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What will happen reviews
I suck at summaries but, this is a story where YOU help making it. it will be BeetXPoala. maybe a little BeetXMilfa, but a little bit.
Beet the Vandel Buster - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 2 - Words: 301 - Reviews: 10 - Favs: 1 - Follows: 1 - Updated: 8/30/2009 - Published: 1/25/2009 - Beet, Poala
Two Survivors reviews
currently on haitus. sorry.
Naruto - Rated: K+ - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 2 - Words: 926 - Reviews: 8 - Favs: 2 - Follows: 3 - Updated: 4/17/2007 - Published: 3/25/2007 - Hinata H., Naruto U.
Konoha Dance Competition reviews
NaruHina. The dance that got them together. I know I suck at summaries. Prologue to an other story.
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 207 - Reviews: 4 - Follows: 1 - Published: 3/22/2007 - Hinata H., Naruto U. - Complete