Author has written 9 stories for Naruto.
Hey people i'm LMD
I like Bleach, Full Metal Alchemist, and recently started on DeathNote but my all time fav is Naruto (Fav char is Hyuuga Hinata, she rocks)
and i hope to be a writer at some stage in my life, tell you what take a look at the stories and tell me if its a path worth pursuing
I share my mind with several alter egos which are too numourous to list but if your looking at this you already know at least oneso you can excuse any randomness
thats it, read, enjoy.
I reject your reality and substitute my own!!
I got a ripping review from a guy called Slivery Crow and i have to say, i respect the guy. unlike Toxic he read the story before passing judgement. Fair enough he didn't like it and he found and exposed alot of plot holes... (shame on LMD's short attention span)
Seems he didn't like that Naruto slid into the background, but guess that Naruto and Hinata's relationship didn't come around until later, and the story did launch off in a couple of different directions...
If anyone knows who he is, or if You have come back to read this, can you message me?
I'm always open to constructive feedback, and Crows was insightful. His comments have points behind them and can help me improve in future.
How often do you get thanked for a ripping review XD
A funny story
The saturday after me 20th bday me and skip went to the cinema to see beowulf right, its a fiver (£5) for an adult ticket.
I don't look that young... do i?
at the end of chapter 24 of 'Training' i asked you to read a review from Toxic maniulpater, did it piss off you as well? here is my replay (please note i was late for work and got chewed by my boss i wasn't in the best of moods then he REALLY pushed it)
(disclaimer: im all for constructive feedback but at least read more than the first chapter before you rip the entire story apart. For this SOLE reason i dislike Toxic)
i will admit that the first paragraph was poorly writen as it was rushed and yes it was bunched together.
But if you had bothered to read the introductory paragraph you would have seen that it was a brief sum up of the first fucking story you hypocritical fucker.
If you really wanted to see why the story was so fucking popular then you should have stopped reading at the first paragraph and went to the first fucking story as it said.
How dare you pass jugdement on my entire writing ability on a introduction to a sequel. as you pointed out, yes it was spelt wrong, but shouldn't the word 'sequel' give you a fucking hint!
And my spelling? I'm dyslexic asshole, i can turn out a chapter a week so there's bound to be a fucking spelling mistake! Live with it!
If you want a real view on the story read 'Extended training of Hyuga Hinata'.
Of course i will understand you to decide to say 'fuck you LMD'
but then you are a dickhead aren't you, I'm sure my fanbase will agree
Once this was sent he replied to me, want to see that?
Hey, it's me again. Yeah, that 'diskhead', as you seem so fond of calling me.
Now, I'll start off by 'again' pointing out a spelling error, namely
Secondly, you labeled the first chapter as: 'Chapter 1: prolauge'. From what
Please forgive my arrogance. I humbly ask your forgiveness, as I had no idea
Now, lets carry on, shall we?QuoteHow dare you pass jugdement on my entire
You'll have to forgive me on this, but on ffnet I have come to realize
You make me sound evil, when in reality I wish to help you realize any small
Again, even in a rant, you forget to use basic punctuation. Question marks...
And I must say you wound my poor little heart gravely by insinuating I'd do
So to conclude this reply, again, I'd like to ask for your forgiveness. I
I hate this guy, this was a more thought out replay to that
Er... yeah about that I may have gone over the top... bad day.
However, I feel that you have unfairly judged my work on a hacked up version of a summery, which I’m sure you can understand, made me just a little angry.
To have left such a damning review by just reading the first page is basically judging a book by its cover so to speak. It's unfair to the writer. I would have been less insulted if you have read the first few chapters still didn't like it, fair enough you didn't like it, you stopped reading, your choice. So I’ll invite you to read the first couple of chapters of 'Extended training of Hyuga Hinata'. From which you can see how my writing style evolves along the way as I became more experienced.
And on the debate of the misuse of prologue, okay I'll admit it was a poor choice of words, synapses would have been more accurate but both words can be used in a similar context, I feel you're just being a little picky there. I was wrote that first chapter with the assumption that people would have read 'Extended' first (due to the 'Stop reading' in the opening paragraph). It was basically something I threw together in ten minutes to recap the main points of the story. It wasn't meant to be taken altogether seriously.
Now from your writing style and choice of words I can tell you are an intelligent person (or a sad git with a thesaurus, which I hope is not the case), however, you need to learn that although you do have exceptional vocational abilities, I find that using too many needlessly complex words can intimidate readers and often discourage them from reading. Therefore I try to avoid it with the exception of formal speech by my characters.
And to be truly honest your formal way of writing, choice of words and patterns of speech has put you across and an arrogant ass who thinks you’re better than me, (I would like to direct your attention to your profile “I AM the shit“).
Even in your reply there are examples of this,
“Now, I'll start off by 'again' pointing out a spelling error” This was unnecessarily hurtful and invalidates your apology regarding my Dyslexia. Also in your profile you express your dislike others pointing out your spelling mistakes, Hypocrisy anyone?
“Again, even in a rant, you forget to use basic punctuation. Question marks...
“I simply wish to help you improve your writing skills”
I understand your sentiment behind this but I’m afraid to say, you have only made yourself appear to be a pompous, hypocritical prat. There is no need to use these formal phrases, (Allow me to reiterate) let me rephrase or what I meant, will work just the same.
It may not have been your intent, but you have talked down your nose to me and it has insulted me greatly.
As for my spelling, yes there will be mistakes, but as you say we are only human, there will be spelling mistakes. I’ve seen some in The Hobbit for crying out loud. There will always be the mistakes with homonyms in my case, but I like to believe that people can overlook these small errors if they enjoy the story.
I don’t portray myself as perfect, and don’t expect my story to be taken too seriously, it is after all a ’fanfic’.
So please, if you do intend to genuinely read my work, I implore you, lighten up for fuck’s sake.
After this a few fan sent him hate mail... not my intent but i apprecane the support so the pendico did this after chapter 25
Curious... So this is why I've received two 'hate messages'. Rather childish of you, and your pitiful fans, don't you think? One of them sent me a rather colorful message, insisting that he/she wasn't a child, yet... the way you handle my review is far from an adult response. I did not insult your fan-base, far from it actually. It seems my words held truth, if they are foolish enough to do what you request of them and follow your orders like the sheep they are.
By the way, I read the prequel to this. And my opinion remains unchanged. Just bad writing in my eyes. If you can't take criticism from readers, then why are you putting fics up in the first place? Not a very mature way to handle things, that is for sure.
So, i did this...
okay, its obvious you missed my point.
Fair enough, you didn't like my story, but it seems you wouldn't get the subtle detail I put into my work.
As to not be unfair I read your work. Naruto the super pervert.
And I’m sorry but it was not something I would enjoy. You have no depth to your characters, you just lift them from the manga and throw them together.
For example, why was Naruto's books burned?
was it because that character was evil in the manga?
Was it because he was bored?
And I find it highly unlikely that a child of Naruto’s age would have been able to buy an 18+ rated book.
Your liner progression of the story is very stunted as well, for example, was it only the two of them in the room when his books where burned? why didn't anyone else react?
You implied the classroom was full yet no one seemed to notice a bonfire and they calmly left as the bell rang leaving Naruto to stamp it out.
You add nothing more than what the main character is doing at the time, is there nothing in the background?
I stopped reading there because your writing style simply doesn't hold my attention. But did I leave a flaming review to 'help you improve your writing skills' no, you have your fanbase who enjoy your story, I'm not one of them so I left you story be, fair enough.
Its not criticism I can't handle. its your poisonous hate reviews I can't stand.
It seems you are also 'immature' as you put it by attacking my work again because the fanbase you insulted didn't like it(and yes you did insult them by calling them seven year olds, which is more the reason I didn't like your review, poke at my work not my fans.) You say you don’t mean to insult them but turn around and do it in your next sentence.
I drew their attention to my reply on my profile I didn't ask them to attack you. Just to make that clear. And I wish to apologise for that.
However, you are trying to place yourself on a pedestal, just because you threw a few things together and posted a fic you think you can tell everyone else how to write, you mentioned that I can't 'force my will on others' by asking them to other look a few spelling mistakes but that is exactly what you are doing now.
You don't like my writing style so you try to change it to something you like, don't even try to deny it because that’s exactly what your doing.
Its very clear we have different preferences as to what we would call writing or a good story. Normally I would like you leave things at that and agree to disagree on this but you seem to want to making something of this.
Now lets look deeper shall we?
You posted your reply publicly instead of talking directly to me you shouted it out in a crowded room and also didn't reply to my last message. Your reply is also nothing but a knee jerk defence because you have forgotten your precious grammical correctness, it was written quickly and is full of mistakes. Now this tells me you are an attention seeker, you believe people should take notice of you. I, however don’t, you are still a child who believes the world revolves around you. How dare you lecture me on maturity when you are two years my junior. Let me ask, where is your qualification in Literature? On what merits do you feel gives you the right to say which writing style is right and wrong?
You have only proved by point again that you are a pompous Hypocrite. You feel you are better than me, I choose not to associate with people who place themselves above others.
Your name is very appropriate Toxic. You are an unpleasant person who seems to insult anyone you speak to and even those around them, and you head is too far up your own ass to notice.
Here’s hoping to never hear from you again.
And i never did, bliss
just you cheer u up here's some more random phrases:
When all else fails, lower your standards.
Sarcasm helps keep you from telling people what you really think of them.
You've gotta' die in creative ways.
They keep saying the right person will come along; I think mine got hit by a truck.
If it's not nailed down, it's fair game.
To err is human, to forgive is not Company Policy
When in doubt, use brute force.
Honesty is the best policy, but insanity is a better defense.
If at first you don't succeed, redefine success.
If you are feeling good, don't worry. You'll get over it.
Never put off till tomorrow what you can avoid all together.
Death is God's way of telling you not to be such a wise guy.
I haven't lost my mind -- it's backed up on tape somewhere.
You can't fall off the floor.
Anything can be made to work if you fiddle with it long enough.
If you mess with a thing long enough, it'll break.
Push something hard enough and it will fall.
You are only young once, but you can stay immature indefinitely. (I Live by this one XD)
There's no point in being grownup if you can't be childish sometimes
I talk to myself because I like dealing with a better class of people.
I'm prepared for all emergencies. But I'm totally unprepared for everyday life.
Had this been an actual emergency, we would have fled in terror and you wouldn't have been notified.
Tomorrow will be canceled due to lack of interest.
Schizophrenia beats being alone.
Why is it that when adults have multiple personalities it's schizophrenia, but when a child has imaginary friends it's cute?
Question: If someone with multiple personalities threatens to kill himself, is it a hosage situation?
Do what comes naturally now. Seethe and fume and throw a tantrum
Sleep: A completely inadequate substitute for caffeine/sugar
The smaller the monkey the more it looks like it would kill you at the first given opportunity (it's true i tell you!)
Nobody ever dares make cup a soup in a bowl
If at first you don't succeed, destroy all the evidence that you tried.
Success always occurs in private, and failure in full view
The first VCR, or video cassette recorder, was made in 1956 and was the size of a piano.
Hippopotomonstrosesquippedaliophobia- Fear of long words
Why don't you ever see the headline "Psychic Wins Lottery"?
Why is "abbreviated" such a long word?
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