Author has written 4 stories for Hogan's Heroes, Sentinel, Naruto, and Ranger's Apprentice.
To Connie Crouch, I didn't have any other way to respond to your very nice review so I hope you see this at some point. I'd love to have someone read through and Beta Jim's Secret (as well as any help you'd be willing to give with a sequel if it ever gets out of the planning stage). If you want, I can send you the the full manuscript I have for Jim's Secret to make editing easier for you.
For everyone reading Looking Glass: Sorry it's taken me so long to update. My life has been unusually hectic since November leaving me behind on a lot of things. I'm working on the next chapter and hopefully will have it done soon. Thanks for your patience.
I should probably say something about myself for those who don't know me. I'm an aspiring writer/history/literature/anthropologist/archaeologist/teacher (someday). Until then I work, write, read, and play my mandolin (among other hobbies). I appreciate well written stories with clean grammar, good plot, and character development. Though, if an idea is good enough, I'll work through most types of writing mistakes. I try to give reviews, if only for encouragement, but also try to make them helpful to improve the author's writing. So please don't be angry if I point out somethings I didn't like or thought could be improved in your story.
I'm working on:
Looking Glass - a Naruto AU story
Lost! - a Danny Phantom multiple crossover that will probably end in many continuation stories including a Danny Phantom/Harry Potter crossover.
Jim's War - Sequel to Jim's Secret
Looking Glass: In Progress, chapters 1-19 done, (Aug 8)
Danny Phantom multiple crossover: In Progress, 75% done (Oct 1)
Jim's War: In Progress, planning stage, chapter 1 25% done (Oct 1)
Common grammar and writing errors to watch out for:
Ending a chapter with half a sentence or just randomly in the middle of the action is not a cliff-hanger, it's poor story planning.
Author's notes should be at the end of the chapter. If there is a specific part of the text you want to reference, use a footnote. Inserting an author's note into the text is what is called "breaking the fourth wall". While it can be used very effectively, I have only seen it used in comedy and by one of the characters themselves. It is a difficult literary device to master and should probably be used sparingly.
They're = they are... Their = possessive, "their house"... there = preposition, "there is the door"
You're = you are... your = possessive, "your house"
too = "as well"/"also"/"too much"... to = "go to the store"/"give it to him"/"to boldly go"... two = 2
its = possessive, "its home"... it's = it is
than = comparison, more than/nicer than... then = sequence, this happened then that happened
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