Author has written 3 stories for Naruto.
ALRIGHT. SO. TO CLEAR SOMETHING UP. IF YOU ARE HERE TO BITCH AT ME FOR COMPLAINING ABOUT YOUR STORY: PLEASE READ THIS NEXT SECTION FIRST.
-My usual Critiques for authors include, but are not limited to...
Spelling Now, this is a pain for me, since spelling makes a story so much more professional, my usual pet peeve being in Naruto fanfictions calling Naruto "blond" instead of "BLONDE" which is how it is spelled. I'm not being a jerk, I'm simply trying to help you improve your writing, thus hopefully making everyone's overall experience here at FF better. Normally, I'll just suggest a beta instead of pointing out individual words, since that could get aggravating for both of us VERY quickly.
Grammar Ok, so. I'm usually not a stickler for grammar, and since I myself am not gifted; I'm not going to complain about participles, or whatever we went over 10 years ago in grade school. However, certain misuses of terms such as "too", "two" and "to", or "it's" and "its" grind my nerves, since they are easy to remember and easy to fix. Thus, I will most likely point out basic construction issues, or misuse of words.
Tense Alas, it seems tense is an issue here. It can get tricky, I won't lie, but proofreading or getting a beta can VERY easily fix any tense issue. If you do not understand what I mean, here is an example:
(EXAMPLE!!!any relation to a work is coincidental)"Tenchi was very upset, so she cried miserably into her hands, much to the dismay of her friends. Rosa *wants to help since *she's Tenchi's best friend, so she patted her back gently and *murmurs soothing words." The tense errors are located at the '*' symbol.
Poorly Executed Plot I know the differences between a One-Shot, a Chapter Fiction, and a poorly executed Chapter Fiction. A seemingly bad habit on FF sadly includes the third story type. By a poorly executed chapter fiction, I mean multiple types of poor execution. I have two examples here:
(1) The Two-Paragraph-Length-Chapter Fic- If your chapters are only a few lines long and yet still contain several archs in the plot, they are TOO SHORT. Flesh out your story some more, show some background on your characters, add more dialogue, entertain the audience instead of rushing out your thoughts. That will help people become more involved with your work.
(2) The One-Shot Train Wreck- Many excellent One-Shot stories have unsuccessfully been dragged out past their plot potential and in turn been ruined. This is a shame. To avoid that, if you plan a One-Shot, try to make it a One-Shot. One arch is all you need, since One-Shot stories are written to end fairly quickly with easily closed plots. If you get a wild hair and decide you want to continue the story, by all means, go for it. I'm not saying stifle your creative writing mojo, but I will make a suggestion. Write a sequel story instead of adding to the other. A story designed with a more complicated plot, one that is far less easy to resolve.
On that note, I'm ONLY TRYING TO HELP YOU. I'm not trying to hurt your feelings and I'm NOT putting down your writing by critiquing it. I'm just trying to help you grow as an author.
Alright. That's all I needed to say about that. Have a good day, and more importantly, HAPPY WRITING!
Now, normally people put profiles here, no?
Name- Byz (pronounced "buys, bizz, or bees" depending on your accent)
Sex-Put simply,a machine of pure cyclical RAGE.
Current Fandoms-Naruto, (puppies die) I know. I know...Sankarea, Franken Fran, Soul Eater, and The Legend of Zelda, Dark Souls. (A DURRR)
Why are you still reading this? O_O?
Don't you have better things to do? Some stories to read? Stories to write?
ANYTHING? Yeah...I thought so...
...Now go away.
I'll update sooner or later. Geebus people.
There, another update, 6/4/10 still working on DDTW. First few pages are done.
There, another update, 11/3/10, 3:45 a.m. I'm so damn tired. Just updated DDTW. Enjoy.
There, another update, 4/20/11, 2:35 a.m. I'm tired. blah, wurkin on stories, blah blah, not dead, blah, will post next chapter asap.
There, another update, 7/9/12, 1:08 p.m.
There, another update, 8/23/12, 9:36 p.m. I'm tired. At school, friend won't help with fic. So, I guess I'll have to grin and bear it. Working on DDTW. Good day. I have no muse atm, since I'm so busy. Sorry.
There, another update, 1/4/13, 11:56 a.m. I'm home. Taking a break from my degrees and credit hours to work and help at home with the animals. For my sanity more than anything else. Yeah. On a good note, My muse is back, I'm finally writing again, should have the next chapter done this evening.
There, another update, 11/16/14, 2:33 p.m. I am no longer at home. I moved away to work two jobs for a year, and now I'm back in school. Life is real. As for my stories, I won't update til they're done, and I can just post chapters without pressure. Yep.
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You can finish this 'ice ice _'
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You haven't always had a computer, and it was cool to have the internet.
What Yaoi Stereotype Are You? [QUIZILLA] My Result: Supreme Seme [131 other people got this result! That's 4%]
You are a very rare breed indeed, and for good reason. If there were a lot of Supreme Seme wandering about, then there would be a LOT of conflict. This is because your kind likes to take control of EVERYTHING. Think alpha male with wolves, but applied to humans. People are either your plaything or they're in the way. You manage to manipulate people into wanting what you want, without them even knowing it. You'll also stop at nothing until you get what you want, doing whatever it takes to get it. And you want more from your uke than just the carnal pleasures of the flesh. You want their mind, body, and soul.
Likeliness of being uke: 0%