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Warning: The following passage is very graphic. Please do not read it if you are uncomfortable with graphic content.
One morning on her way to school, Na-Young was dragged to a public toilet by a 50 year old strange man. He was under the influence of alcohol at the time of the incident, told by the police department which handled her case.
l Beaten and strangled:
He punched her face and stomach when she refused to take off her clothes. He then strangled her neck to make her pass out but when he didn’t succeed he held her head under the water of toilet seat until she did pass out. It was assumed he did this to make it easy to force himself on her. Up till this point, she was still conscious, said Na-Young when she was asked to describe everything she could remember. It was also confirmed by physical evidences.
l Violently raped and sexually tortured:
When she fell unconscious he made held her against the closed toilet seat cover then had penetrative intercourse (anal and vaginal). He then performed the same penetrative pistol action to her right ear. Her head and her ear were crushed against the water tank each time of his pistol action. Her right shoulder was also dislocated as a result.
l Injury of internal oragns and a rupture:
Thinking he had to destroy the evidence by cleaning her inside out of his semen, he pushed her face down in the toilet again to wash her ears. He then used a pump (used for blocked toilets) on her via anus in attempt to extract his semen which lead to severe rupture of her large intestine where he, this time, tried to push the organs back inside her using the long stick of the pump. During this process, he damaged her genital organs completely.
l Attempt to destroy the evidences and cover up the crime scene:
He tried to clean her up. Flushed her blood and other traces of her organs down the toilet, washed her and made her sit upright but decides to have another intercourse. When he was finally done and satisfied, he ran away leaving Na-Young to die.
This 57-year-old man was only sentenced to 12 years in jail. If you feel outraged by this case, please support us by pasting it on your profile.
Please sign the petition for Na Young.
Perhaps, with just this simple gesture, Na Young and her family might be able to lead their lives in a better way, knowing that there are people out there who care for them.
I'm, obviously, and as you should already have realised, not here to submit or write stories, but to critique them. And seriously, if you're going to be childish and whiny about it and say something like "I bet you can't write better than me!" then I suggest you click that little red "x" on the top right-hand corner of the screen.
I'm more commonly known as a flamer and no, I'm not ashamed of it. And I reserve all my rights as a reader to critique your story. If I've flamed you and you don't want to accept it, that's fine with me, of course. It just shows your age, maturity and intelligence. And of course, might earn you an Insufferable Author Award.
Yes, of course, I've had honorary mentions on several badfic authors' accounts. I congratulate these people on quite successfully keeping up with their state of denial and hope that they will someday recover. Although that day seems pretty impossible.
Well, but if you think I've wronged you and you wish to complain, this is the place for you.
What You Should Not Do
There are a few things I cannot tolerate in fanfics. Please straighten them out if you have any of these flaws.
1. Bad grammar
4. It's just fiction!
5. Thesaurus Rape
6. Blatant ignorance of the existence of the Dictionary
7. Obvious, outright Illiteracy
8. Lack of Paragraphing
9. Mistakes in use of Foreign Language
10. Violation of Site Guidelines
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Here is a list of conducts that should always be observed:
1. Spell check all story and poetry. There is no excuse for not performing this duty. If you do not have a word processor that has the spell checking feature, use a search engine such as Google.com to find one.
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1. Multiple entries of the same material. There can only be one copy of any unique story on the entire site. No exceptions.
1. Entry title and summary must be rated G for all audience. No exceptions.
You got through that, right? So please get those rules screwed into your head, and not break them. It's a favour to the rest of us here.
11. Shameless Rip-offs
12. Rape of Word Tools
What You Should Not Be
A brief summary of the types of people who shouldn't use FanFiction. Offense meant, of course, but you'll see why.
3. Whiny, Immature Twats
4. Anti-Flamer Trolls
5. Scapegoat Users
6. Review Wh.res
7. Praise Wh.res
What You Should Not Say (unless you're a self-proclaimed twat, in which case you'll get your replies as written below)
Some standard replies to the common crap I get from the writers in here. If you were planning to tell me any of the below, please attempt to make more creative juice. Which might be too difficult a task for your miniscule brain, but one can always try.
1. "It's just fiction!"
2. "It's called FANfiction. We can do anything we like with the characters!" (basically OOC)
3. "So you think you can write better?"
4. "You're being unreasonable. Others seem to like my story!"
5. "You're a meanie and are bullying me!"
6. "I'll report you!"
7. "I was depressed while I wrote this!"
8. "I'm dyslic!"
9. "My English teacher is gay, doesn't teach, and that story was written by my nine-year-old sister anyway!"
10. "You have no life!"
11. "U R such a bitch!"
12. "Stop insulting me! I never did anything to offend you!"
13. "Gimme a brake that's my first stroy and im only grade seven"
14. "I have better things to do than to deal with you jealous loser flamers"
15. "I LIKE THEM SO I MASHED THEM TOGETHER!"
16. "I have the highest DPA in my cohort"
Fandoms (and how bad some of them are)
I'm a random fandom dweller, and so now I shall take the liberty to rate some of the worst fandoms I've been to on a scale of one to ten. Ten being the worst.
1. Twilight scores a 9.5! Congratulations! Quite possibly one of the worst fandoms I've seen. It's forgivable when their heads are full of SMeyer's writing, but that never stopped them from using spell check, grammar check, or attending school.
2. Half-Life scores a 10! Well, I've got nothing to say about this fandom... except that its general population has the writing ability of a five-year-old.
3. Vampire Knight scores an 8.5! Yes. It's pretty bad, but this is based on the number of Mary-Sues there(possibly more than the total world population). At least there are several people there who have the decency to use spell check, grammar check, and a dictionary. And oh, who seem to know how to read.
4. Harry Potter scores a 9.5! Needless to say, my eyes got nearly blinded by the quality of the summaries in the archive.
5. Every single one of Meg Cabot's fandoms score 10! I think you know why. If you don't, that either means you haven't read her books, or haven't got a brain. Although her storylines are above average and her writing style is mildly entertaining, that does not mean that her books can be used as a margin for vocabulary and grammar standards.
6. Final Fantasy X scores a 5.5! Wow. Pretty okay, seeing as the general population of FanFiction have the writing standard of a zebra.
This is all I've got for now. Haven't lurked/flamed enough in the rest of the fandoms to rate them, but I'll get down to it someday. If you want me to rate your fandom, just PM. I have nothing better to do, anyway.
P.S. Be aware that this was done because I think you'd want to know where you stand in your fandom, and not because I have the intention of insulting the books/animes/games.
Here are just some quotes I've taken from a few twats I've met in FanFiction, and some other places. There are meant for your entertainment, and to show you how much of a twat people can be. They're not arranged in any order.
1. "How dare u say Edward (Cullen) isnt real!!1! HE IS REAL. Don't u dare say that again!1!!"
2. "You shod be throne into a incinerator im only 7 years old gime brake" - pikachard
3. "Get out of my life already. I want nothing to do with you." - AidoRockz
4. "Really? And you think I'M not mature? How stupid" - AidoRockz
5. "and i do know the diffrence i have the highest DPA i just dont know how to spell retard.I BET ITS EVEN HIGHER THAN YOURS" - XvTWILIGHTvX
6. "I know my stories are good, others seem to like them and I've even gotten request to write a book." - AidoRockz
7. "DON'T FLAME MY GOD DAMN WORK!" - edwardcullenismyrockstar
8. "I DONT FOLLOW THE CROWD AS I AM MY OWN PERSON AND THE VOICES IN MY HEAD DONT LIKE IT WHEN PEOPLE CRITISE WHAT THEY TELL ME TO WRITE" - edwardcullenismyrockstar
9. "I KNOW MY CHARACYTERS ARE OCC BUT ARNT EVERYONE'S?" - edwardcullenismyrockstar
10. "SO UNLESS YOU HAVE SOMETHING NICE TO SAY ABOUT SOMEONES STORY DONT SAY ANYTHING AT ALL" - edwardcullenismyrockstar
11. "Listen, I don't know if someone dropped you on your head as a baby or something,aparently your parents must have abondoned you, or your adopted or something, because no one on the face of the earth is so rude for no reason." - CullenLover96
12. "Am I supposed to be offended or is this some kind of joke??"
13. "oh yeah let's see how you like your own criticizm used against you." - Quil'sClaire
14. "Grade one insults" - AidoRockz
15. "There is something messed up with my brain. Doctors don't really know what it is, or they just wont tell me" - AidoRockz
16. "The contest was about 2 YEARS ago. and despite how many people entered, 3rd place is reallly good" - AidoRockz
17. "I find it funny how you hate my story so much. I was rushed at the time of making it and iI made it ONLY for a contest someone was having. Since I won 3rd prize, I don't care what anyone else thinks." - AidoRockz
18. "One more thing, if people keep insulting my work I will report them. I understand if someone doesn't like my stories, but that doesn't mean you have to seen me hate mail and tell me how I should write the stories. So Please comment, but if you don't like the story,just don't say anything, please." - AidoRockz
19. "It has come to my attention that people like ~S.U.Flamer~ and ~I Pwn You Ego~ have been spreading lies about me and/or twisting my words, on their account. Please don't listen or believe them. Please soport me if you hate flamers. I bet together we can get kicked out of Fanfiction. Some flamers seem fine, but others just seem to harras you. ALso, if you have a problem with (a) flamer(s), contact me and I'll tel you how you can block them from your account if you dont already know how to." - AidoRockz
20. "I am Canadian so I speak and write English since I was really young. You must not be from a place where they speak and write English that much, so of course it seems bad to you. Learn to understand English better before you read English stories." - AidoRockz
21. "STOP IT ALREADY!! STOP ACTING LIKE YOU OWN FANFICTION!! YOU HAVE NO RIGHT SAYING THE THINGS YOU DO!! ALSO, I'M ONLY TELLING THE TRUTH. I SAW NOTHING WRONG WITH HER STORY. THIS SIGHT IS FOR ANYONE SO FU OFF ALREADY AND LET PEOPLE GET ON WITH THERE LIFES. Oh, and I got a privet message saying that she agrees with me, so you're waisting your time with this story." - AidoRockz
22. "Until you can prove you’re better than everyone else, then I request you shut up and continue to read what I have to say from here on out." - LeoOsaka Bakura's stalker
23. "Suppose someone is not as great a writer as you, or perhaps you think that you’re better and you find it amusing to brag… Well neither situation gives you the right to tell them they suck. If you cannot do any better than you have no right to say anything anyways. It’s pathetic, and makes you look like a jealous numbnut. That’s ESPECIALLY true if you flame anonymously. I find it amusing that you can give it but can’t take it in return. If you are better then they are, obviously by your own standards then either say nothing or give then HELPFUL comments." - LeoOsaka Bakura's stalker
24. "Okay people, reality check, chances are that unless you’re rewriting the WHOLE fricking story, it’s GOING to be ‘fannon’. That’s why we call it FAN fiction." - LeoOsaka Bakura's stalker
25. "OCs are NOT evil. They’re original." - LeoOsaka Bakura's stalker
26. "If they want to me dance naked in Wal-mart singing the Barney theme and drinking espresso let them but don’t bitch, after all, YOU wasted YOUR time to READ a story that you could have stopped if it bothered you." - LeoOsaka Bakura's stalker
27. "If you have an attitude then don’t click the review button, the author doesn’t need a high review count so bad that they would be willing to open their arms to your…well I can’t really call it a review can I? Hmm…how about virtual shit smeared on a virtual paper called the review board." - LeoOsaka Bakura's stalker
28. "I don't give a shit what the people in FanFiction say about my stories" - LeoOsaka Bakura's stalker
That's all for the time being. I know this dumb quotes column has lots of AidoRockz's quotes, but it's just because she's such a twat. And a stalker, actually. The last few of her quotes were from my MST-ing blog, which she so "uncaringly" visited... just to come to tell us, in about fifty chatbox posts, how she didn't care about what we thought about her story. Talk about defensive.
AidoRockz's comments are italised. This is one of our conversations.
And it's no use adding me to your author alerts since I won't be writing any stories.
WHAT?! I did no such thing? Why would I even do that when you are insulting me??
Well, okay, so maybe you haven't (I received an email from ffnet saying you did, but that's another matter altogether).
And no, VK fanfics do NOT have to follow the real one. Of course. I would be stupid to say that they did. You were OOC for practically all the characters.
As you say, you do not own the characters. This means that you'll have to write them IN character. And not... whatever you're doing to them now.
Lastly, you know for a fact that I am not harassing you, merely trying to help you believe what you are so furiously trying to deny- the fact that your fic was not good. At all.
(Thinking back, why was I so polite? Uncalled for.)
Well, if you do like it, just don't read it and how can I add you to fav author when you have no stories?
Now that I read your message over, I can say I DO like my story thank you every much and apparently so do others. One of my fans has even been helping me come up with chapter ideas. So if you're jusyt going to continue to bug and insult me, just leave me alone already!
You sure took a long time to read my message over. And I am going to continue to bug and insult you, because I can.
Look, this is MY verson of VK, OK?? No, I don't own Vampire Knight, I just like to read and write about it. It makes me happy and others seem to like it. So go insult someone else and leave me alone!! :(
I am nothing but a bitch. So sue me.
I would if I could. But I'll settle with getting you kicked off fan fanfiction.
I'm sure they're working on it now.
My stories are fine. I got tones of GOOD fan mail, story alerts, and favorite Storys
Way to go for denial. That's because general population of FanFiction is a group of senseless, mindless, suck-up fools. If you really believed what they say, you are more delusional than I thought. And I didn't actually think that was possible, from what I was seeing.
No, it's because all humans like diffenet things. If you're too stupid to think of that, you must just be some kind of demon
All humans like different things? How did that apply to you? We all sprang from apes, but apparently you didn't spring far enough. Apparently, being a demon is much better than being a human of your calibre. Besides, how does being a demon = stupid? Unless you're telling me that you've met a demon before or that you ARE one, in which case I should feel insulted.
You are completely STUPID. I'm christian so I do NOT believe in that ape thing. And I'm calling you a demon since only a demon is heartless
Sometimes I wonder how she knows. Let me tell you one thing. I'm heartless, and I'm a demon. So suck it up and face it. Your writing is worse than a demon's.
You know what? Whatever? Why am I even bothering with you? I know my stories are good, others seem to like them and I've even gotten request to write a book. So I do not care what you say. Just leave me alone and get out of my life already
Ow. You are REALLY delusional. I shall not bother to write anything else about you since you do not seem to be able to get any facts into your think skull.
Good luck in having a good life. You really need it.
P.S. Don't bother replying since I don't think I'll read it.
Nope, this is not the end of it. I have more, in fact, but I think your eyes need a break from the rape.
Other party, edwardcullenismyrockstar, is in italics.
I HAVE TWO WORDS TO SAY TO YOU:
No, I did not edit the caps lock.
Well, if you insist on being the infantile n00b that you are now, I can't do anything. Not my call. But there are a few facts you should get straight.
Since this is a Twilight fanfic and you're using Meyer's characters, please CREDIT her. It's not your story, so don't use it and call it your own. Unless you're shameless enough to say that you own the story, to which I will have nothing to say. At all.
And since they're Meyer's characters you should at least have the decency to make them sound remotely like the people Meyer made them out to be. Or vampires, if you like. If you can't then lay off the book, man. It's not there for you to ruin.
Also, I never said anything about your storyline. So please get your facts right before you reply and sound like a whiny, childish brat.
Oh, and one more thing. If you're schizoprenic chances are the voices are the ones telling you that your stories really don't make the mark. I mean, seriously. If you have voices in your head, the first thing you should do is go to a doctor, and not tell me about it.
Lastly, if you really have nothing better to do than to fck me, I'm flattered but keep your advances off. I'm not interested even if you are.
Not the brightest bulb, then, are we? To be unable to comprehend my words, even when it's comprehensible to a five-year-old.
I DONT TAKE CREDIT FOR STEPHENIE'S WORK
Learn how to spell your favourite author's name, fool.
MY MATE TOLD ME TO WRITE IT AS SHE WAS HERE AND DIDNT LIKE WHAT YOU WERE SAYING ABOUT MY WORK
Your mate? As in... mating? Gosh, I never knew anyone in this era referred to their lover as "mate". This is a revolutionary statement!
You should have found it funny enough earlier to change it.
P.S. I HATE FLAMERS
So join the infantile club, d.u.m.b.a.r.s.e.
-passes bleach to reader- I'm sorry I had to pollute your eyes with this.
XvTWILIGHTvX is in italics.
okay if you dont have nothing nice to say dont say it. but if you want to know why i dont listen in english is because my english teacher it GAY and he dosnt even teach so just dont comment. if you actiually read what the last chapter said it said SORRY for my spelling mistakes okay . and the thing is called a storie becouse i know you dont know!!1
The fact, which you try so hard to deny, is that I really DON'T have anything nice to say about your... thing. Since it's just crap.
And what has your teacher being gay got to do with how good your language skills are? And even if he doesn't teach, you can READ, can't you? Obviously the only thing you have read is Twilight since your language skills are so substandard.
And no, I did not read the last chapter because I had to shield my eyes from the blinding crap-ness of your... thing. It isn't actually useful if you APOLOGISE for spelling mistakes; since you know you make them, why don't you edit the thing? Oh, actually, I know. Deep down, you know that that... thing sucks and does not deserve to be read twice over.
Oh, and no, it's not called a story, as you would wish it to be, because it was simply crap and calling it a story would be an insult to all stories.
Have a great day.
(Her name is so bloody irritating I cannot bother to type it out any more.)
stupid little b ok what if my story is bad let it be you dont have toread it and why did you even start reading it .
You have just insulted ALL your readers. Congratulations. Oh, I happen to be one of them, but actually I merely feel amused. Well, if you've got the highest DPA then it has to be the "Dumbass Point Assessment", since you look like you need to grow a brain.
I read your story because it sounded so BAD I just felt like reading it and giving you comments. Also, because I do not have the psychic ability you do to tell whether a story would suck or not before reading it. And what do I get now? Yes, a few immature, infantile, hilarious PMs. Oh my God, you've just made my day with this.
One last thing. Of course your dumbass points are higher than mine.
your just a little hater. you know you are you have no favorite authors or stories why?BECAUSE YOUR A HATER you dont want anybody on fanfiction .you cant stand anything cause your a hater.everything on your page is hating on something people do .YOUR A HATER
So suck it up, m'dear.
Your replies amuse me by the day. It's really hilarious, the way you try to insult me while trying to sound intelligent. Unfortunately, before you want to insult people I think you should get your grammar right.
I do not have "a hater", as you call it.
your stupid itd not that you have a hater its that you are one .and i dont have as much flaws as you because you always have to back to th grammer you cant find anything bad to say about me but that .
Well, I think you're grossly misinterpreting this so I shall clear some things up.
Actually, I never did say ANYTHING bad about you, except for the fact that you should improve on your grammar, your spelling and basically your language skills. And here you are, insulting my IQ, which unfortunately is getting lower as I speak to you.
Really. The only reason why I was going only into your lack of grammar, and not your lack of intelligence, was because I respected you and I didn't think I should call you "stupid", like you just have to me. I do not know you personally, and neither do you know me, so I think we should have a boundary in Netspeak. Even if it's blatantly obvious. And I'm not even the one who's spewing vulgarities, my dear.
But well, now that it's reached such a stage, it doesn't matter, does it? Well, in fact, I've speaken to a LOT of Americans, and look, you're by far the one on the lowest rung of the IQ ladder. Trust me, it's pretty low.
Your letter just SCREAMS of desperation, m'dear. In fact, immature and making a very sad attempt to sound intelligent. It's immature to just lump all Singaporeans together, because we're a multiracial country. Oh, but wait, your IQ is too low for you to realise. Never mind. I'm not even the one who double sent this, or who creates a new topic every single time. Learn the meaning of the word "reply", sweetie.
Oh, and one more thing. "You are" is shortened to "you're", and not "your". You are grossly in need of tuition, m'dear.
o.k. dont wast my time with your STUPIDness and im not a dum dum i know you are is shortened to you're but that how we gangser from the south say it .
Coherence, my dear, is a fundamental in literature. You're not succeeding in it.
(What's a dum dum, anyway? Never heard of it.)
Three is all I can manage in one day. No more eye bleaching before my pupils turn white.
P.S. Yes, AidoRockz. Now you have an extensive list of people you can gather for your "i-hate-ipye" gang.
I hope to see more good fics in FanFiction! Continue publishing, but if it sucks, I'll flame it. Nice and simple.
Oh, and if you really want to see the shit fanfics... click here.