Carick of Hunter Moon
To the writes of Fan-fiction, THANK YOU for all your hard work and for sharing your story’s with us all.
I like books and stories and due to the number of books I own my friends sometimes joke that I am do my best to create L-Space in my small house.
I read for fun a mix of mostly science fiction, fantasy and some horror.
I think that the best stories are those that keep you up, way past your bed time, story which you lose yourself in, stories which you wish did not have to end.
“It is said that a reader lives a thousand lives before he dies and a non-reader just one."(1)
Fan-ficition net will not let me post live links on my profile page so to use the links I posted you need to copy and paste them and then remove the spaces.
There is an old saying, you can please some of the people some of the time, but not all of the people all of the time (and reviews are like that) I like good story’s, and having read so many book over the years, I would hope by now, I would know what makes a good story.
You can tell a good story from the story teller’s hard work, and people who write fan fiction love to write, so my advice to you as a writer is write for yourself and the joy of writing, and remember to ignore a review that flame for no good reason.
As a reviewer, I will always try to be fair to you and your story, As I do understand the hard work you put into your work, as I find writing so very hard myself, so if you wish to ask me about the review that I have given you, please send me a message and I will get back to you.
How to give good criticism
It has occurred to me that a lot of people do not know how to give feedback in a constructive manner. The method that I am laying out is (in my experience) the one which is most likely to get the other person to listen to you and take what you are saying on board. It is called the feedback sandwich.
Step1 : Say something nice about the writing. This can be something small. It does not necessarily have to be about the work itself, but it should acknowledge that you recognize the effort that has gone into it. Writers are often sensitive about their work, so it eases them into accepting the negative comments that are sure to follow.
Step 2: Give your constructive criticism. This should explain clearly what you didn't like about the work and the reasons behind it. Backing it up with evidence is also helpful. By doing it this way, you enable the writer to see exactly what you are talking about, and to be able to examine the work objectively. They may not change what has happened or agree with you, but they are far more likely to accept what you say and respect your opinion.
Step 3: End on a positive note. Again this does not have to be something big. It can be a note on improvements in the writing, or again an acknowledgement of the effort. But by ending on a positive you are reminding the writer that they are not entirely hopeless, and giving them confidence to make improvements. You do not want to discourage a person from writing, but should aid them in how to become a good writer!
This is a list of what not to do when giving feedback. It is by no means complete, but it lists several things which are all too easy to fall into doing.
1) Do not use sarcasm. Sarcasm is both insulting and patronizing. It means the person is likely to disregard your comments, as the reviewer is not able to be calm and logical when presenting facts.
2) Do not insult the person. That's kind of obvious, but I thought I would say it anyway.
3) If you are pointing out grammar or spelling errors, which there are most likely going to be, it is best to make sure your review is grammatically correct. The person is not likely to take you seriously if it's not.
4) Try not to criticize the story as a whole. This can be difficult if the story plot is a bad one ;) but it is best to try and stick to specific dislikes, and to focus on small areas. The writer is going to be more receptive that way.
5) Try not to be anonymous with your feedback. The writer may want to be able to respond to your arguments. This may not always be possible as the reviewer may not necessarily have an account, but it is helpful!
6) Do not use foul language. This makes the review seem aggressive. It may not be meant that way, but it automatically gives that impression.
As for the writer. It is best to remember that whatever the reviewer says, they are taking the time to review, and they did take the time to read the story which should be appreciated. Do not take offense to criticism, because most of the time, it is kindly meant and often the criticism is helpful in developing you as a writer.
(Copy with permission from the Profile Page cap red fanfiction net https://www.fanfiction.net/u/1125829/cap-red)
Back to me
I know that some times a story is not going to be finished so if you are not going to finish a story could you please let use know in the story summary.
Now something I dislike is review fishing and particularly writters who say I not going to write/post any more of my story unless I get X reviews.
At the end of the day, you should write for yourself not reviews and as long as you are enjoy writing for your self you cannot go wrong and this will come across in your writting.
Place to find a good read for free
http: // www . wattpad . com / stories
https: // www. smashwords . com /
If you are a book person like me, you might like to check out, Project Gutenberg it’s a great place for research and also to find books that are out of print and it also free.
http: // www . gutenberg . org / wiki / Main_Page
Baen Library is a good place to read books for free
http: // www . baen . com / library
Fan-fiction net has taken your story down: This is because fan-fiction net has legal issues with the type of content that can be posted, as a host it has legal liability.
becuse of this the rating on fanfiction net caps out at teen, if you wish to post a more adult story create your own YAHOO GROUP and then LINK this group to your account Fan-fiction net profile page. This way, you get to write and publish the story you wish, the way you wish to write it, but remember if it adult rated story say by writting a disclaimer example Do not read this story if you are under the age of X.
I like to offer up something I found very usefully. This is a copy of a essays by Mercedes Lackey on this subject.
Plagiarism: a piece of writing that has been copied from someone else and is presented as being your own work
It's about time to discuss this topic. As you can see from the dictionary definition above, "plagiarism" has a very specific meaning. This is very important, because it has a legal implication. Plagiarism is actionable under civil law. It can get you into trouble if you plagiarize someone else's essay in school.
Now, you will almost never hear a professional author accusing another of this. The reason is simple; first, you cannot put a patent or a copyright or a statement of ownership on an idea. Second, every professional writer knows that no two authors will take the same idea and do the same thing with it. And again, with the exception of a handful of legal cases and an incredibly original idea (and I can personally think of only one, Art Buchwald's case against the producers of COMING TO AMERICA) it simply is wildly unlikely that any professional would bother with pilfering someone else's work. Why should we? Ideas occur all the time to us. The trick is not in coming up with ideas, but with figuring out which are the most marketable.
Now, how does it happen that authors have similar topics? There are many ways. First, and the simplest—-coming from the same source. Fantasy authors are all getting their inspiration from the same mythopoeic well— the huge backlog of myth, fable, and legends from history. Science fiction authors are usually looking at scientific papers and discoveries of today as well as projecting from current events to speculate on what will happen tomorrow. Historical novelists are, of course, bound by what actually happened in history. And so on. Second, influence and tribute. Authors are influenced by what they enjoy reading, and often pay tribute to that by showing that influence in their own work.
Nevertheless, a professional author will be careful to avoid the charge of being a copycat by bringing something original to the party.
Now, suppose someone else, drawing on the tradition of non-human servitor races that goes back to Prester John and the stories of what could be found in the mysterious East, creates a world that includes a race of lizard-servants. Unless that person makes them semi-sentient and shy, as in Andre Norton's WITCH WORLD books, space-suited, beefy and bellicose, as in E.E. Smith's LENSMAN series, or clever, incredibly helpful, and more fashion-obsessed than Carson Daly, as in my VALDEMAR series, nobody with any brains or common sense is going to whinge about copycatting. And in fact, another writer could base his new creation on any of those, bring some new idea or twist to the tale, and it would still be clear that there wasn't any copycatting going on, only the synchronicity of similar sources.
Furthermore, a professional author wouldn't care. I know this seems incredible to some of you, but the plain fact is that the ideas are not what is important. It's what you do with them. How many writers have come up with the idea of a school for young magic-users? Probably dozens, possibly hundreds; nevertheless, it was Jo Rowling who put the whole package together in such a way that she has captured the hearts of the world, and do you know what the rest of us professionals are saying? (Well, aside from, "Gee, I wish I could come up with something like that...") We're saying, "Good for you, Jo! Love the books! Write faster!" My Tayledras are based on the mythic tradition of the secretive, magical, and powerful Forest People— it's a tradition that goes back to the legend of the God Tyr, who bartered his eye to the Forest Spirits for the magic knife to defend his downs-dwelling, sheep-herding people from the Great Wolves (you can read a very neat version of the story in Rudyard Kipling's book, PUCK OF POOK'S HILL as I recall, though it might be in the sequel, REWARDS AND FAIRIES). But if someone came along with a New York Times bestselling series with similar characters, I would just admire and try to figure out what it was that made that series so successful. How many Arthurian books have there been? And yet, there are only two that achieved wild and unbelievable success—T.H. White's THE ONCE AND FUTURE KING and Marion Zimmer Bradley's MISTS OF AVALON. And the rest of us sit back and study, study, study, hoping to catch the lightning in a bottle ourselves some day. The one thing we do not do is whinge and m* about how "x stole my idea." Because, as I said before, a real, professional author knows that it is not the idea that is important, it is what you do with it.
You can't plagiarize ideas, only text. And a real, professional writer would throw themselves over a cliff before they did that— because the one thing we take pride in is our words. Our own voice. So to take someone else's would mean we couldn't come up with any of our own. Not a chance.
Misty Tulsa, Oklahoma June 2004 (2)
To Help out
JKR Harry Potter
Some of the most interesting write up about they Harry Potter books and the sub plot within them can be found on the profile's of muggledad, gphoenix51, ARedHair, distorted-me, sprinter1988 & Kalen Darkmoon all are worth look at.
One of the best thought out Harry Potter story for why did Dumbledore make Harry stay with the Dursley is
Black Sun Rising By: Mortaegus
To help with research for your stories
Links copy and past then remove extra spaces you have to do this becuse fan-ficition net will not let me post live links on my profile page
Avia Venefica is a very good place to find infromation on on a wide range esoteric wisdom from varying cultures (examples inclued Native American, Celtic) http : // www . whats - your - sign . com / signs . html
Odyssey adventures in archaeology can be used to help you find magical locations to use in your stories
http: // www . odysseyadventures . ca / articles / stone-circles / orcadian _ stonecircle _ orcadian . htm
The Theoi Project, is a site that exploring Greek mythology and the gods in classical literature and art to provide a comprehensive, reference guide to the gods (theoi), spirits (daimones), fabulous creatures (theres) and heroes of ancient Greek mythology and religion.
http: // www . theoi . com/
Hero of Camelot is a full of good information on every major aspect of the Legend of King Arthur.
www . hero of camelot . com or http: // www . heroofcamelot . com / welcome
The Hero Cycle in Arthurian Literature is an essay that can be found at http : // www . lotsofessays . com / viewpaper / 1708687 . html this is a good location to use for research and this essay is good guide to the classic Heroic story arc .
you can also find a lot of background infromation on Wikipedia
Example: Misty Lackey Valdemar stories
Search Wikipedia Velgarth
http: // en . wikipedia . org / wiki / Velgarth.
Help for Writers.
To find out all about Beta Readers take a look at the profile of David305 id: 227103
Remember if you are playing in some one sand box always reference who sand box it is use a disclaimer
Creative writing study guides. (The Good Study Guide by Andy Northedge) will help you to structure you work.
Most good bookshop should be able to recommend which type of Study Guide are the best for you to help you learning how to structure your creative writing as well as teach you how to create story boards and plot out lines.l
Write about what you know,
Example if you been some were on holiday use these location in your story.
Why becuse local knowledge lets you add depth to your writing.
Take notes and photographys
Note taking lets you record information about a location and any ideas by look at your notes and photos later on you refresh your memory when you sit down to writing about a location your using.
When writing you should try to interest the largest number of reader possible, this will then generate more feedback which in turn will help to make you writing better.
Some subject will put reader's off so if you think a large number of reader's will dislike something or find something offense, think twice before writing about it, but remember tackling a difficult subjects can result in a great story.
Research is king, always try to find three different sources for the same information.
That way you will know the informationis right
Always recorded where you got your information from, this known as a bibliography which is the academic name for writing down where you found your references.
Try to build up both empathy & interest in your characters remember character driven story do this.
Creater character refrence cards
Try to set things up before you need them in your story.
If a character uses a special sword/power/ability, have him find it three or more chapters before he uses it.
Using to many flashbacks can spoil a story if you do not use them correctly. It is very hard to use flashbacks so and good flashback stories are very rare as a result of this.
Sometimes, what happens off-screen is more impressive than what happens onscreen. Just remember to include several hints as to what occurred.
Remember the rule of the hero
The Hero must be challenged for ever power the Hero has the enemy will have a greater power
Where a Hero get to much power or money early on it kill your plot because the Hero then can use his power or his wealth to win story over.
An example from Harry Potter
Harry is left more money than he could would spend in 100 life time
(Remember 1000 galleons in canon paid for the twins to setup of their shop WWW and the most important tool wizard use is his wand which only costs 7 galleons.)
So Harry been smart thinks "I know what I will do, I will put bounty on Voldemort, say 1,000,000, galleons dead, plus 100,000 per death eater killed",
Your story is now over you just kill off your plot, So please remember to much wealth will kill your story, becuse tthe Hero will and should they throw money at the problem until it go away.
(But you can turn this round and use it as a intresting plot hook the best example of this I found is
Most Wanted: Peter Pettigrew By: BlightPhoenix
When writing the key is to mix up both old and new ideas, in new and interesting ways and then put a different spin on them.
Think about using local myths & folk law
Example in Germanic and Norse mythology, Wayland the Smith was a legendary master blacksmith who forged The Swords of Wayland
You could put a different spin on this why not make Wayland a goblin, then make one of the Swords of Wayland the Sword of Gryffindor.
Do not post a story until you have written at least 5-6 chapters or a round half the story done (whichever is less), and even then only post one chapter at a time. (Why do this because this buys you a safety margin should your muse decide to hide or if real life has to come first.)
I would suggest that it is a good idea to try to update regular say once per week or twice per month or even monthly by doing this you set yourself a dead line to work to and your readers then start looking forward to their regular story update which in turn helps to hold the reader interest in the story.
Chapters that are less than a thousand words long rarely work try to write at least two pages of A4 unless there's a specific reason otherwise.
Use the return button to separate descriptive passages and people talking. (Why this is due to the fact that large blocks of text can be difficult to read.) When writing dialog between you central characters’ when you’re done written it.
Self betaing reading your story out aloud to yourself and recorded yourself do this them play this back to yourself if it sounds correct i.e. like two people taking them it is most likely is correct also reading your story out loud to your self can help you to spot errors.
Keep your tenses correct, because accidentally switching between past, present and future in a single paragraph will destroys your credibility as a writer.
Always check your spelling. (But remember spell checking software can make mistakes too) Correct Grammar, Correct Word Usage, Punctuation, Spelling- & Canon Spelling are what you should aim for.
Do not post a new chapter for 24 hours after writing it before posting read it this is good trick to help stop any error you have made and to spot any edits you need to make it's a way of self-beta-in you own work.
Think about writing short story a very good way to learn to write stories.
Example of this in Potter fan-fiction are Regrets by NadzxthexMarauder, The Sea King by Doghead Thirteen & A Crime Fitting the Punishment or Dumbledore's Monster by Diresquirrel
When writing a very long story write it like an episode of a TV show one chapter been one episode or turn your story into a trilogy.
Combine project example if you are a student & your English class has a creative writing project well think about writing a Fan-fiction story, free feedback & homework you enjoy.
Study other fan-fiction writers by reading there story you will see what people like to read & by doing it will help you to learn how to write better. (Search for story by using the Filter function by favorites or by follows)
the basic law of writing a heroic story is Hero has to display idealism, courage, and morality
Back up your stories/work by e-mail it to your self
“The basic law of writing any story: correct, reasonable, and right choices are anathema. People must screw up. Spanners must be relentlessly thrown into the works. Fate, ignorance, and stupidity dance round the Maypole throughout any tale well told. When the dust settles, and everyone is laughing, kissing, or dead, the story is over.” (3)
There is a writer, no an Author call James Galloway (aka Fel) who releases his stories, on the internet. They vary in genres and including fantasy and sci-fi. his story are good, very good, if there were published as books I would find space for them on my book cases, Fel's stories are well thought out and well written the strength of his work is that Fel is a story teller you will lose yourself in his words and worlds and Fel story's will keep you up way past your bed time.
Fel's work it can be found at search Worlds of Fel - Weavespinner . net
http: // www . weavespinner . net / worlds _ of _ fel . htm
http: // www . weavespinner . net / Worlds _ of _ Fel . htm
http: // forums . sennadar . com / index . php
Christopher Nuttall is a Author his books and story's are well worth reading and can be found at
http: // www . chrishanger . net / Index . html
Some of his early works are free to download and read and most are very well written his books are a mix of alternate History and cross-time travel, science fictions and fantasy go take a look you will not be disappointed.
(1) Quotation from Black Bond, Chapter 19 by: CentaurPrincess (Fanfiction.net) which referenced George R. R. Martin's work (True words & a Great story)
(2) Mercedes Lackey Essay June 2004 www . mercedeslackey . com / features _ plagiarism . html (without spaces)
(3) Quote found on Aealket profile fan-fiction net) Quoting Brooke McEldowney on 9 Dec, 2011 in the comic Pibgorn