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Author has written 41 stories for Mai HiME, Naruto, Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha, Puella Magi Madoka Magica/魔法少女まどか★マギカ, Bokurano, Girls und Panzer/ガールズ&パンツァー, Saki/咲, One Piece, Accel World/アクセル・ワールド, Sword Art Online/ソードアート・オンライン, Fairy Tail, Persona Series, and Inside Out.
I enjoy video games, reading, writing, anime and movies, and have written fanfics for some works I enjoy, and that have inspired me to write more.
As a reviewer, it may seem as though I focus on criticism over praise. This is in large part because in criticizing, I identify problems, which requires an explanation of the problem and what I think should be or should have been done, thus leading to more explanation. I will, however, indicate when I am mostly satisfied with the work, or if I like something in particular. I also try to avoid overlapping with other reviewers' comments unless a part is controversial or important to the story.
Here are some disclaimers regarding my work:
1.I do not own the works or characters I am using.
2.I realize stating the above does not mean anything on its own.
3.I will try to keep characters as close to their canon personalities as possible, although it is possible that an event might challenge their perception of the world and change from what they are in canon. For example, if a character starts to grow as a person, only to regress into a bitter and vengeful individual when a personal tragedy occurs, a fic in which the tragedy does not take place will have the character go on the former development track. Characters' development and actions are shaped as much by their circumstances as by their inherent personality.
4.I will try to keep things realistic, but will prioritize keeping them consistent with the setting, since I am no expert on physics or other various subjects. For example, it may be realistic for characters to suffer adverse effects from heat even if they don’t touch the heat source directly, but it can raise issues of consistency if I make a fanfic of a work in which characters walk around inside volcanoes, in which this happens. One may be tempted to ask why characters are immune to heat in the source materials, but if heat is used realistically in a fanfic, it raises several more questions, such as "Why now and not then?" Realism can help make a story more believable, but only if it is done in a consistent manner.
5.For fics based on works in which characters use honorifics, I will include them if I am familiar with translations that incorporate them, keeping characters’ uses as close to the source material as possible. The reasons include A)they do not always have precise equivalents in English and B)You can tell small details about characters through how respectful their addresses are in general or specific..
6.Similarly, I will use sibling terminology, but only in direct address. For an example, Takumi might say "Goodbye, Onee-chan, please be careful too," to Mai, but ask Akira, "Do you think that my sister's not telling us something?"
7.In crossovers between works in which characters use honorifics and ones in which they do not, however, I will use the rough English equivalents (for example, Mai Tokiha of Mai-Hime might be called “Mai,” Mai-san” or “Tokiha-san” in the fan-translated version, but would be called “Mai,” “Mai” again, and “Miss Tokiha,” respectively in a crossover).
8.Comments and questions are always appreciated, but please keep in mind that I typically start by writing out the entire story in advance, and post chapters after they have been proofread. Perhaps the next installment will answer your questions or address your concerns. Or perhaps the story is already going in a different direction you had hoped. But one comment that I especially appreciate is when things seem unclear to others; I try to avoid beating people over the head with points, but often, things can seem clearer to me than to readers who don't know what I intended by writing it, or plan to write in the future.
9.Similar to 3 and 4, I may have to guess how various aspects of canon work , especially in crossovers, when there is no evidence in the original work to indicate what would happen. One common example is characters' powers, such as whether a character's deflector shields could stand up to an attack that was never used on them in canon. In such cases, I will provide information as to why I interpret things such a way, if I anticipate or am asked questions.
Final Disclaimer: I will add or edit disclaimers as I see the necessity. Start here and scroll up if you’re looking for new ones.
I've noticed many other fanfiction authors often put a section listing advice for aspiring writers. I consider this less advice than a set of principles that I tend to follow.
1.Your work begins with a good idea. Poor execution can ruin a great idea, but excellent execution can only take a mediocre one so far.
2.In that vein, write about topics that you care about and resonate with you. If you do so, it's not difficult to write a story that resonates with the audience.
3.One interesting genre of fanfiction is exploring what would change through subtle but significant alterations to circumstances. But in those stories, it's often as interesting to see what happens the same way as it once did despite those changes, as what happens differently because of the changes.
4.Your reviewers are important, and the more detailed the review and the more willing it is to point out what needs improvement and how it can be improved, the more useful it typically is.
5.Approach your work with at least some respect for the source material, even if parodying or deconstructing it. Your fanfiction exists because of the original work, as its creator(s) made the world yours is set in and the characters you are using.
6.Read as much as you can about the work for which you are writing fan fiction, including the spinoffs and supplemental materials, so you can pay close attention to details. Those who read fanfiction tend to include many of those who read more than the main work itself.
7.Try to challenge yourself. Consider the perspective of a character you don't like. Write about a character whose true thoughts and motivations are difficult to discern. Often, in writing about something that is outside your comfort zone, you can broaden your horizons.
8.One thing that I've found useful is to write out a story in advance- at least the first draft- before you begin uploading to Fanfiction.Net. It helps you know what direction the story will take, and ensure that you will be able to complete the story. Some of my works are not finished, and they will remain unpublished until I have, at the very least, found how to end the story and how to get it to that point.
9.The Universal Mary Sue Litmus Test is a good resource to tell whether your OC is close to being a Mary Sue. Keep in mind that some points are not necessarily a bad thing, as long as they don't combine with other factors or go to an unbelievable extent, just as a little bit of spice can make certain dishes taste better, while too much can make them inedible.
10.Somewhat related to 5., there's usually a reason for why things are the way they are in canon. As such, you should be careful about simply blindly following or imitating canon without including the reason for certain improbable events taking place, but also should not simply change things for the sake of changing them.
Some of my favorite characters from the works I have written about:
Girls Und Panzer
-Maho Nishizumi: She's an exceptionally talented tank commander, but how many of you knew she's also a loving older sister, whose primary motivation is to enable Miho to live freely and happily?
-Miho Nishizumi: She's a well-developed and interesting protagonist, who's a clever strategist, has good integrity and is stronger at heart than many realize.
-Mako Reizei: She has an interesting backstory and, in spite of her laziness, cares greatly for her family, her friends and even some of those who get on her nerves.
-Shiho Nishizumi: Yes, you read that correctly. While she's far from a good mother, she can be an interesting character when used well, having a great deal of untold backstory and potential for character development. That makes me wonder why so many fanfic writers have her frothing at the mouth over boys in tankery or disowning Miho at the drop of a hat.
-Shizuru Fujino: By simply reaching out to Natsuki in a time when she couldn't trust anyone else, she made a surprisingly profound difference in her life, and she continues to care for and watch over Natsuki. Those feelings, and the possibility of losing Natsuki in the Carnival, drive her to extremes, but in this regard, she is no different from many of the other Himes.
-Mai Tokiha: She's a fairly deep and compelling protagonist, not immune to the various hardships she faces, but always determined to protect and care for those closest to her.
-Hinata Hyuga: In the face of people looking down on her and repeated failures, she strives to better herself. She also displays perhaps the deepest understanding of just what Naruto has had to endure and its effects on him from a surprisingly early point in the story, and understands why he tries as hard as it does, which is why she makes a good match for him.
-Pain: He's perhaps my favorite Naruto villain. He has a good mix of powers that makes him a formidable opponent. His past is tragic, but he tries to do what is right, even if his circumstances leave him with a twisted vision of what that right thing is, but he's ultimately able to do what he can to make things right in the end.
-Momoko Touyoko: Her backstory and the degree of devotion she shows to the first person to reach out to her are touching.
-Toki Onjouji: She's come a long way in mahjong, and not solely due to her acquired clairvoyance. It would have been nice to see her school continue on to the finals.
Sword Art Online
-Klein: He's one of the unsung heroes of Sword Art Online, who rose from a newbie to one of the best players, while never losing sight of what matters or forsaking those he cares about.
-Yuuki Konno: She's impressively talented at ALO, but more than anything, her story is one of enduring adversity, living life to the fullest, and realizing that there is meaning even in a short life. Her death was one of the most moving parts of the series.
-Yukiko Amagi: She's kind, intelligent, beautiful, the best magic user in the party and endearingly quirky, which is everything you could want in a girl.
-Kanji Tatsumi: His story of coming to terms with and taking pride in his true identity is quite compelling and easy to relate to.
Some themes I tend to express in my work
-Life isn't perfect, but it's not hopeless, either. You may not always be able to save the world, but you can make a difference.
-When you're about to make the "hard choices", ask yourself a few questions. Will they solve your problems? Are they the only way to do so? Are they the best way? Sometimes, people who resort to such decisions and claim there's no alternative do so too hastily, often to avoid having to think more deeply about their alternatives.
-Even when people are clearly wrong, it can still be enlightening to see how and why they came to their conclusion, especially if they, in their reasoning and certainty in their beliefs, are not entirely different from you.
My Fan Fiction Pet Peeves
Here's a list of some things that honestly get on my nerves when it comes to fan fiction.
Bad spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc.: A few mistakes will likely get through, but there are some cases in which it's clear that the writer isn't even trying to proofread the work, or is misinformed on certain aspects of writing the English language. As such, it's not unreasonable for readers to assume that the writer isn't really trying if they can't proofread properly.
Writers who dictate the type of reviews that they like: It's understandable that fanfic writers don't want flames, but that definition can be overly generous in some cases, sometimes even including constructive criticism. In general, writers should let reviewers review as they wish; if a story's good, it will get praised, if it needs work, the reviewers will say what should be improved, and if it's terrible, nothing the writers can do will stop the reviewers from saying it.
Writers who are unable to keep to a consistent update schedule and/or writers who ultimately stop writing their stories: I understand things come up in real life, and writers can often suffer from writers' block, but ideally, they should be able to consistently update their stories. And while writers may not always be able to finish their stories, having a plan for how to proceed can help ward off some issues, such as running out of ideas or writing oneself into a corner. I see this as something of a matter of commitment, and when a story slows down or is abandoned, it's not only disappointing to see a promising work stop for good, but also disheartening to see a writer giving up.
Writers who keep starting up new projects without finishing their old ones: Let me lay out how it often goes. A writer often starts out with Story 1, and then decides to start up Story 2 while in the process of writing Story 1, then Story 3 while writing the two, and so on and so forth. This can end one of two ways, among others; 1)Said writer eventually forgets about Stories 1-3 while working on Stories 4-6, or 2)Writer is doing Story 1-6 at the same time, not updating any of them with much regularity. The former can be disheartening for those who like the abandoned stories, and the latter can lead to the writer not giving regular updates or any of the stories, essentially being stretched too thin.
Writers who give almost no description or character development: With fiction and other written works, you have more space in the text to flesh out characters and settings in ways that you do not in more visual media. Failing to add in those details results in your work feeling bare-bones, empty and rushed.
Writers who try to "improve on" canon: It's called fan fiction for a reason; you're writing because you like the work and are inspired to write stories about it, not to rewrite canon as you see fit. In cases of the latter, it's clear where the original author's touch ends and the fanfic author's begins, and it comes off as a patched together work rather than a naturally flowing story. This is especially true with regards to the ending of Naruto (I'm one of those people who likes the ending, and thinks it made sense for the work, a more common sentiment than some think), where people make up poorly thought out revised endings simply because their favorite ship wasn't approved or they don't like Sasuke.
Writers who obsessively research smaller details at the cost of things that are more important to the story: It's often good to research various things that you plan to include in the story, but when you spend so much time on minor details, the oversights you do have in are all the more glaring. For example, in a Girls und Panzer fanfic, a small portion of tank fanatics may be able to appreciate the trivia about tanks that you include, but a larger portion will notice that you didn't read Little Army if your story ends up contradicting it.
Excessive self-deprecation: Humility is a virtue, and if we know about our shortcomings, we can easily remedy or work around them. But, at least in my mind, it's quite easy to go too far in selling oneself short, and producing work that others will read requires a certain amount of confidence in it. Going too far can come off as fake and almost sycophantic for those whose talent far exceeds their estimates. And, of course, when said self-deprecating authors' works aren't very good... I'm tempted to agree with their own estimations.
Walls of text: Overly long paragraphs may seem like a small thing to complain about, but of all the mistakes fanfic writers make, they're the easiest to notice and the easiest to fix. If you can put every line of dialogue on a separate paragraph and cut paragraphs into multiple parts, then you've made your fanfic easier to read. If you learn how long to make paragraphs, when to begin and end them, and how to organize your thoughts appropriately, then congratulations- you've become a better writer.
Just For Fun
Here's a little tongue-in-cheek parodying of various Fanfiction dot net memes.
99 percent of all people on Fanfiction dot net arbitrarily categorize themselves into some kind of minority. If you're part of the 1 percent that doesn't, paste this into your profile.
It's most important for people to think for themselves, and not blindly follow others or give in to peer pressure. If you agree with this, copy and paste this into your profile, along with the name of the person you got it from.
My family and I are refugees from a country that the US won't intervene in because it doesn't have any oil. We get discriminated against all the time, but no one cares. I also happen to be a homosexual, and can't come out of the closet because my family's religion condemns it as a sin. I have nowhere to turn... but you. By writing an appropriately tear-jerking and emotionally manipulative paragraph on your profile, you can show everyone how much you care for people like me without having to actually do anything about it.