Author has written 13 stories for Toaru Majutsu no Index/とある魔術の禁書目録, Manhwa/Korean Comics/만화, Fate/stay night, Naruto, Harry Potter, and Ultimate Marvel.
I love getting constructive reviews since it improves my writing skills, and I normally respond to reviews if you make a valid suggestion or point out something wrong, but a few have been a pain in the rear and unconstructively bashing me. I usually just have the email alerts for Naruto Wind Monk Banishment just sent to my trash-can now as a result.
Now, unlike most fanfics, I go through great lengths to justify things and make sure my content is readable, vivid, and understandable, even though I like the fighting portions most of the time and hate politics. I like happy conclusions, but I prefer reasonable ways to get there. I'm not so arrogant that I think that my fingers have typed out a masterpiece that surpasses the original and everyone else. That's insane.
Golden rule of all stories applies to my fanfics: Don't like it, don't read it. You can whine about it, but note they are your own opinions and if you can do better, go for it.
This isn't canon. It's fanon. Sometimes the destination is a given, but the path taken is an unknown.
If anything gets removed from this site, I’m not rehosting it here. You can find it onor instead.
Perfect Summoning for Naruto:
Nguruvilu - It is a river-dwelling creature and looks much like a strange fox, with a long body, similar to a snake, and a long tail with fingernails that it uses like a claw; but it's a water-being. Nguruvilus live in and are the cause of dangerous whirlpools which kill people who try to cross rivers. The creatures make the water shallow on either ford, to encourage people to try to cross it making it seem safe.
Seriously, whirlpools & fox features all in one. How had no one thought of that yet?
Issues with Wind Monk Banishment:
I've also split Wind Monk Banishment into 3 different stories since my muse for the series is back with a vengeance . The two side-stories are Beetle Chronicles & Fox Chronicles and are the backstory for the characters.
Issues with Advent of the Spiraling Ninja:
Meh. I can only do some much as a single writer. I'll start working on it again next month (May).
Harry Potter Notes
Things I Dislike:
SNEAK - Hermione, who is normally rational, permanently disfigures another student with a jinx...and she gets away with it.
She puts a jinx of her own devising on a teenage girl that leaves her with pimples all over that develop into scars. Even the Weasley Twins don't do anything permanent to the people they prank, so that's saying something. On top of that her jinx on the paper was utterly pointless besides identifying who sold them out, when there were a number of other ways to do it. The question is, why didn't she take other preventative measures rather than something that does nothing to help after the fact, like not putting Dumbledore's Army on the paper given they know the Ministry is paranoid? Moreover, you would think that with her buck teeth issues early on in the series she would know better about disfiguring someone.
Let's be honest here, if she weren't the author's avatar she would have been expelled.
Umbridge and the Centaurs - Let's be blunt here, we know what happened in that forest with Umbridge and the Centaurs. Mythology and her reaction afterwards pretty much paint an ugly picture. For all the evil that Umbridge was and deserving of Azkaban or Death, the fact that Hermione purposely led and subjugated another woman to that intentionally is simply unforgivable.
Again, she should be expelled from Hogwarts and be brought up on criminal charges at least.
Oblivating Parents - Hermione oblivates her parents and has them move to Australia. This is supposed to be seen as a noble thing for her, sacrificing her relationship with her parents to keep them safe...until you remember they had an entire damn life outside of her and she just made it all vanish. She uprooted them from their home and used magic on them to make them forget an entire life in place of a fake one without their permission.
What she did here wasn't noble, because she denied them the choice to choose. Moving is a big deal, especially to another country, and there are a ton of complications and factors to be taken in. Their jobs, their friends, a year of their lives was taken from them. If something, even as random as a mugging, happened and one of them got hurt or killed that would be on her too since she put them there.
Quite frankly its for reasons exactly like the the Magical World had to stay hidden, because this was not even done by a professional, but a young woman who thought she knew what was best for two people capable of equal thoughts and didn't take their own feelings into account. Let's not forget there were plenty of other options if she had the decency to tell someone before she did this, magical or otherwise. At least the Dursley's kept their memories and they weren't nice people.
In all honesty her parents should've and would've been in the right to fear her and cut her out of their lives the moment they got their memories back.
Love Potions - These are date-rape drugs in a nutshell. The fact they can last up to 24 hours for the weaker ones alone makes them horrible, because all it would take is someone getting slipped one and then dragged into a broom closet for a lot more than snogging. I could think of several other and worse ways to use them and it would not be remotely funny. Not only is it intentional poisoning, but Voldemort coming from such a pairing alone shows why the Twins ought to be treated as drug dealers given they even help disguise them getting into the school.
Fate Stay Night Notes
Summoning (Kariya's Legacy): I received a decent question in a review on why I chose Lu Bu instead of Karna or Sigmund or Medusa.
The reason I chose Lu Bu was because he met several qualifications:
Kariya Matou’s Legacy Challenge
We all know that Canon Shinji is someone who we’d all like to see murdered in most cases, but what about when he was younger? A chance meeting with Kariya Matou before the 4th Holy Grail War ends up with Shinji deciding to protect Sakura and fight for her in his deceased uncle’s stead…but in order to do that, he must become a magus, and accept all the pain and burdens that come with it.
1.) Shinji cannot be verbally, physically, or sexually abusive towards Sakura.
2.) Shinji has to have a rivalry with Rin Tohsaka due to the fact that from his perspective she didn’t do anything to ease Sakura’s burdens or acknowledge her after their father and mother died. How it escalates or resolves itself is up to the writer.
3.) Shinji becomes a magus through a transplant of magic circuits from his father thanks to his mother having a Sorcery Trait ‘Inheritor’ and passing it on to him. As a side effect his body is weakened to the point that strenuous physical activity becomes difficult for him. After that he studies with his mother's surviving relatives and trains with them for at least a year.
4.) Shinji doesn’t use the Matou mysteries, meaning no Crest Worms.
5.) Shinji and Sakura have a Shared Mastership similar to the Archibald team in Fate Zero, with him holding the command seals.
1.) The Seven Servants are up to the writers.
2.) Team-Ups are up to the writers, if any.
3.) Pairings are up to the writer, but Shinji x Sakura is a no-no.
(I'm still active, but real life is beating me like I owe it money)
4/13/14: Wind Monk Banishment 11 [300 Words]
4/13/14: Wind Monk Banishment 3 (Beetle) [300 Words]
4/6/14: Harry Potter and the Path of Indifference 11 [880 Words]
4/2/14: Kariya's Legacy 7 [275 Words]
4/2/14: Advent of the Spiraling Ninja 11 [1921 Words]
2/24/14: Ultimate Vanguards Chronicles 6 [Complete]
5/25/13: Icha Icha Complications: Silk hiding Steel [2581 Words[Hiatus]
(Setting goals so low that if I fail I will never live it down)
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