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Author has written 5 stories for Death Note, Naruto, Sherlock, Hellsing, Sword Art Online/ソードアート・オンライン, and Elder Scroll series.

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A Different Scroll: Additional Content

TV Tropes page available here as of 2/21/14

The story was blogged about on 3/19/14

Opening Themes

Introduction Arc - Eternal Blaze

Chuunin Exam Arc 1: Initiation - Haruka Kanata

Chuunin Exam Arc 2: Interim - Resistance

Chuunin Exam Arc 3: Invasion - Chase the World

Search for Tsunade Arc - Uragiri no Yuuyake

Sasuke Retrieval Arc - Alones

Hyuuga Coup Arc - Scarlet Knight

Sasuke Gaiden Arc - D-Tecnolife

Three-Tails Arc - Rolling Star (AMV with non-pitched sound)

Five Kage Summit Arc - Revolution Dualism

Invasion of Pain Arc - Courage (Another AMV, also non-pitched)

Fourth Shinobi World War Arc - Love Deterrence

Original Jutsu list:

Wind Release: Wind Scar - A C-rank ninjutsu that forms and throws wind blades, varying in number between one and ten depending on how much chakra is used. The blades can be dulled for a non-lethal attack, but the main reason Naruto uses this jutsu is because, like Temari's Wind Scythe, it can be fired from a weapon without hand seals. When used without a weapon, however, it requires hand seals.

Wind Release: Air Bullet - A weaker version of Shukaku's Drilling Air Bullet. Both are vastly weaker when used by a human instead of a Bijuu.

Wind Release: Erasing Wind - A C-rank defensive jutsu originally used to deflect small projectiles like kunai. Asuma Sarutobi has used it to blast away the Hidden Mist Jutsu, and Naruto has used it to destroy thin defensive ninjutsu from within by increasing the air pressure inside, once with Gaara's sand and once with Hinata's Guardian Sixty-Four Palms.

Lightning Release: White Vajra - An unusual B-rank ninjutsu. It moves slowly for a lightning technique, slightly slower than a kunai, but tracks its target's heat signature. Because of this, it was intended for use with the Fire Release to redirect it if necessary.

Water Release: Hollow Water Dragon Bullet - A-rank ninjutsu, created by Hinata to reduce the chakra cost of her Water Dragon Bullet. This version is, as the name says, only a hollow layer of water, but because it's more rigidly shaped, it's as strong as its parent jutsu. It requires excellent chakra control like Hinata's. A Jounin-level or Hyuuga shinobi could learn it.

Water Release: Guardian Sixty-Four Palms - Hinata can add nature transformation to her Guardian Sixty-Four Palms grid, increasing its defensive abilities in exchange for discarding its ability to cut the enemy. This version, since it's completely solid, can keep the user safe from poison and even some genjutsu.

Fire Release: Hellhound Flame Armor - Fire nintaijutsu, A-rank. It takes a human and canine Inuzuka team to use the full potential of this jutsu, allowing them to combine their bodies together and control it as one. Level One of this transformation, Baskerville Mode, turns the human partner into something reminiscent of a werewolf: a bipedal canine with clawed hands and feet rather than paws, and a full coat of fur. Level Two, Cerberus, turns the shared body into a fifteen-foot-tall, three headed dog that otherwise resembles the ninja hound's original form. Level Three, Barghest, places the canine in control of the shared body, which becomes an elongated, distorted abomination with an incredible healing factor. It can freely breathe fire, but its main weapon remains, as always, intimidation.

Fire Release: Hidden Smoke - a fire version of Zabuza's Hidden Mist. Kiba has used it in conjunction with his Ash Pile Burning, which looks identical to this until he detonates it.

Dynamic Substitution - Naruto and Hinata with their respective doujutsu have learned to track a moving object like a kunai through the air, and switch places with it using an ordinary Substitution. Most ninja's eyes can't track a flying kunai so easily, although Tenten can do this within a limited range. Sasuke has seen it demonstrated by both Naruto and Hinata, and has done it himself with the Sharingan, though only once.

Sage Art: Rasensuigan - Hinata can absorb the water nature from natural energy in existing water, resulting in a weaker variant of what her Water Release: Rasengan will eventually be.

Ninja Art: Seal Summoning - An object or container marked with a fuinjutsu can then be summoned by this technique. It requires a secondary fuinjutsu to mark where the object will be returned to. Naruto uses this jutsu to summon a vault containing the Uzumaki Clan fortune, along with spare weapons in case he breaks his sword.

Pulse Step - This simple jutsu allows the user to force chakra into their legs for a brief burst of movement faster than an ordinary eye can see, like the Body Flicker. However, unlike the Body Flicker, this technique requires no hand seals. Its main drawback is that the user can't turn while running at this speed.

Empty Wind - Despite the name, this is a non-elemental ninjutsu, B-rank. Much like the Pulse Step, it involves flowing chakra through the leg muscles to increase one's speed to superhuman levels, but this is Kiri's continuation of the Pulse Step which was only a prototype. This version allows the user to turn while running by increasing their reaction time and balance. This is accomplished through precise chakra flow to the eyes, resulting in a similar but watered-down effect to the Sharingan's precise sight.

Mangekyougan - The doujutsu carried by Uchiha Ootsuki, the younger son of the Sage of Six Paths. Eventually, these eyes evolved into the Sharingan and Mangekyou Sharingan of the Uchiha Clan, and as such they show some of the Sharingan's powers. Uchiha demonstrated inhanced sight and perception similar to the Sharingan's sight, as well as the ability to cast exceptionally powerful genjutsu through eye contact with it. In addition, he wielded a Susanoo with the same three layers (bone, flesh, armor) as demonstrated by the Mangekyou Sharingan. It is unknown whether the Mangekyougan can cast Amaterasu or Tsukuyomi, or any other powers of the modern Mangekyou.

Demon-Human Chakra Fusion - If both parties are willing, a Tailed Beast sealed within a Jinchuuriki can allow their 'red' demonic chakra to mix with their human's 'blue' chakra. This process takes years, but once finished, the Jinchuuriki's chakra will permanently be in a new 'purple' state, where it will be much more potent. The empowered former Jinchuuriki will then be able to manipulate their chakra in ways that are normally limited to Tailed Beasts, such as a unique chakra cloak or a Tailed Beast Ball.

Banshou Karu - Using the Asura Path, Naruto creates a giant metal blade by swinging his sword. Through a combination of the Deva Path and his Wind Release, he sends it flying with tremendous force. He can also form up to three Rasengan set into holes in the blade, adding an explosive finish to an already fearsome attack.

Water Release: Aspect of the Water Deity - A continuation of the Hollow Water Dragon Bullet and Guardian Sixty-Four Palms, both utilized by Hinata. In essence, this jutsu allows the wielder to create and float inside a giant, hollow replica of their own likeness, made of shaped water. This allows the user to interact with their environment and attack their enemies on a much larger scale, while also providing considerable protection from incoming attacks. However, it's incredibly taxing on chakra, and Hinata has thus far been unable to use it with only her own chakra.

Water Release: Dragon Rasengan - The user starts by forming a Hollow Water Dragon, then spins the chakra in the dragon's head to create a Rasengan inside its hollow mouth. At this point the attack can be fired, but the Rasengan can take on the Water Release nature from the surrounding water if the dragon is maintained for long enough. The resulting Water Release: Rasengan explodes with an additional wave of concussive force, much stronger than the explosion of an ordinary Rasengan.

Water Release: Rasenyari - The water equivalent of the Rasenshuriken, which ejects two beams of blue chakra from the top and bottom of the Rasengan, resembling a spear or staff. Its effect is very different from the Rasenshuriken; rather than cutting, shredding and eventually vaporizing the target, the Rasenyari explodes with tremendous force, enough to cause a minor earthquake. This will typically send any opponent flying when they're struck by the shockwave, although said enemy won't be cut by it, merely pummeled brutally. This certainly doesn't make it any less lethal however, and because it explodes it has a greater area of effect than the Rasenshuriken which cleanly contains its destruction in a perfect, measurable sphere shape.

Caustic Chakra Cloak: Having forcibly taken some of Kurama's chakra years before her death, Kushina intentionally made it more damaging. The effect of touching the cloak is like being burned by fire and acid simultaneously, and it is easily capable of damaging a shinobi's equipment. The blade of Naruto's sword was worn off by her power, and Hinata's barrier armor suffered serious damage as well. She has shown herself to be capable of wielding up to a six-tailed Version Two cloak with this chakra.

Original Weapons/Ninja Tools List

Kuroshi - Translating as "Black Death," this weapon was created by Tenten to replace Gaara's gourd of chakra-infused sand. At first glance it appears to be an ordinary katana, but a storage fuinjutsu on the guard contains fifty times as much sand as Gaara's gourd. The sand itself is black, and made of compressed carbon crystals ground into a powder. In other words, diamond. Drawing on her inspiration from Bleach, Tenten added an additional security measure: the sand can only be released from the seal by calling a passphrase, "Stain, Kuroshi." Continuing from this theme, an additional seal on the flat of the blade was later added. It contains a much larger reserve of sand, mixed with Shukaku's chakra instead of Gaara's. By releasing this "Bankai," Shukaku is allowed to build a sand body without Gaara having to open his seal and release the Bijuu permanently. Furthermore, the chakra mixed into the sand is gradually used up, and cannot be replenished without Gaara's cooperation. Because of this, Shukaku obeys Gaara to prolong his time outside the seal as well as earn additional time even when not needed for battle.

U-1917 Kuroga - A saber designed and manufactured by the Uzumaki Clan prior to its demise. The sword is of relatively high quality, and it's hard to damage, but it has no unique abilities. Naruto wields one copy of the sword, and has inherited several more copies along with the rest of the Uzumaki Clan's collection. It was inspired by this real-world sword.

Barrier Armor - Tenten's favored ninja tool. By dyeing one of Might Guy's training suits stealth black, and then adding a layer of steel mesh armor, she formed the base of the suit. However, she was unsatisfied with the incomplete protection offered by mesh armor. She applied her skills with fuinjutsu to cover the mesh in a seal that she can focus her chakra into, creating a simple barrier ninjutsu over her whole body. It can deflect most weapons including explosive tags, withstand some but not all ninjutsu, and safely hold back the crushing force of Gaara's Sand Coffin.

Seal Ring - Simple bronze rings bearing a small storage seal capable of holding one, and only one object. Namely, the bearer's signature weapon. Examples include Naruto's cutlass, Hinata's spear, and Kiba's heatproofed kunai.

ANBU Kunai - These are unique to Suna's forces. They're high-quality kunai made from ceramic with a stealth black finish, carried in a carbon fiber forearm sheath designed to make no sound when the weapon is drawn. Years ago, Gaara came into possession of one when he killed his first ANBU, and he later gave it to Tenten.

Hinata's Spear - The first weapon Naruto created entirely with his Asura Path. At first glance it appears to be a short staff, about the length of a sword. It's made of cherrywood, inlaid with curved gold bars fitted into the wood. But when Hinata pulses chakra into it, a mechanism inside releases two spring-loaded blades from the ends of the staff and locks them in place. The blades are each a foot long and feature delicate gold leaf inlays.

Manipulated Tools: Wrath of Heaven - Tenten's most powerful offensive weapon, carried in bulk inside a ninja scroll. The initial version consisted of senbon wrapped in a thick layer of explosive tags, but she later modified the design into tightly packed spheres of explosive tags, each about the size of a golf ball.

Manipulated Tools: Pain Without Suffering - a large collection of kunai sealed into a scroll. They look ordinary, but the hilts are hollow, and each one contains an explosive tag. The name is actually a pun: in kanji, 'kunai' is written as 'no hard feelings' or 'no suffering.' So 'Pain Without Suffering' could also be read as 'Pain With No Suffering' or 'Pain With Kunai.'

Barrier Armor 2.0 - Using more complex sealwork, Tenten has created a more powerful barrier and applied it to her own outfit as well as Hinata's. Her suit is made of slightly thicker, heavier-looking fabric, but it's still sleek and smooth over her body, not bulky at all. The suit bears a brown digital camo pattern as requested, but Tenten made the pattern gradually fade into a slightly lighter brown over her belly and the insides of her arms and legs. On her back and the outsides of her arms, the brown is slightly darker. There are bands of chocolate brown leather two inches wide on the outsides of her arms and legs, from her wrists to her collar and her ankles to her waist respectively. She has removed her headband from around her neck and now wears it as a belt. On her right shoulder is a small, curved metal plate with a dull grey finish that doesn't reflect sunlight, and hidden under it is an Uzumaki fuinjutsu. She now also wears fingerless gloves of soft black leather, bearing another fuinjutsu. Since this covers the bronze ring on her right hand and prevents her from unsealing her staff, she now carries it in a black leather scabbard on her back.

Ninjutsu Formation Seal - Originally an Uzumaki Clan seal, meant to be worn on gloves or a similar garment. It allows a ninja with sufficient chakra control to use ninjutsu without hand seals, using the seal as a crutch to aid in the formation of the jutsu. Hinata is currently the only user.

Soujihonou - The name is translated as "Sweeping Flame," and it certainly fits. Tenten's fuinjutsu-augmented jian makes use of her Fire Release affinity without the need for her to hone it or learn powerful fire ninjutsu. A seal on the blade takes in her chakra and molds it as if she were making a sequence of hand seals. Her chakra then takes the form of an extended blade of fiery energy, almost like a blowtorch. However, Tenten can vary the length of the energy blade from a less than a foot in length to one hundred times the length of Soujihonou's real blade, depending on how much chakra she's willing to spend. The energy blade has far greater cutting power than a metal one, though it can be blocked and caught by a sufficiently strong or thick object.

Shashka - In the real world, this is a Russian sword with Caucasian origins, somewhat like a saber without a hilt. In-story, it's from the Land of Lightning and the design was in use since before the Sage of Six Paths was born. Sasuke Uchiha currently wields one, with a pommel stylized as a dragon's head.

Fuuma Shuriken Bracers - Simply a pair of steel bracers with storage seals under the wrists, for carrying and quickly unleashing a large collection of Fuuma Shuriken. Naruto is currently in possession of them, however he has only used them once and no longer seems to be wearing them.

Anaconda - A small ninja puppet made by Tenten for Kankurou. It's constructed entirely of metal, making it much tougher than an ordinary wooden or terracotta puppet, however its size is limited by its weight, and Tenten's scarce knowledge of puppet warfare has also limited the variety of weapons she included in the design. It's currently known to have poisoned fangs, a flamethrower in its throat, and a collection of senbon launchers hidden between its scales.

Kekkai Kokuei - Tenten's third known barrier armor, "Barrier Silhouette," covers the entirety of her body in a much tougher, opaque black barrier. It also does much more, allowing her to move it as she would her own muscles, but with far more speed and force. This grants her superhuman strength and speed, even allowing her to flicker around the battlefield as though using a Pulse Step or Empty Wind.

Umiyou - Translated as "Sea of Lava," Tenten's new sword is a huge reddish-black falchion that she wears on her back, without a sheath. It sticks to the back of her armor when not in use, and bears a storage seal containing a massive pool of molten glass. Using her secondary affinity, the Earth Release, she can move it around in a manner similar to Gaara's black sand. Meanwhile, her chakra is always being absorbed by the seal in small quantities, where her main affinity for fire keeps the inside of the seal hot enough to melt the glass. She can refill it with any ordinary sand, which will melt inside Umiyou. The sword itself is lightened with a gravity-manipulating seal, because it's ridiculously massive.

Naruto's Saber - Because of the enhanced strength he now wields thanks to his half-demonized chakra, normal swords usually break when Naruto wields them. This one, however, is made of harder, denser metal. Although he needs to be stronger to swing it easily, it in turn can take whatever punishment he dishes out. The weapon has an ordinary curved, single-edged blade of dark grey metal, but its hilt is odd, resembling that of a katana with half the usual length. This is because Naruto prefers one-handed kenjutsu, so a longer hilt is unnecessary.

Character Stats PRETIMESKIP

Note: These stats simply show what a character is best at. If Naruto Uzumaki and Hiruzen Sarutobi both have a 5 in Ninjutsu, that doesn't mean their power levels with ninjutsu are comparable. It simply shows that their ninjutsu skill is better than their other skills ranked four or lower. Similarly, character stat totals mean absolutely nothing in terms of power.

Naruto Uzumaki:

Ninjutsu 5, Taijutsu 1, Genjutsu 1, Bukijutsu 4.5, Strength 3, Speed 4.5, Stamina 5, Hand Seals 4, Chakra Control 2

Naruto focuses his style on ninjutsu, kenjutsu, and speed. His massive stamina allows him to make constant use of powerful ninjutsu, and subsequently he neglected his abilities in close quarters until taking up kenjutsu, at which he excels.

Overall Skill Level Pre-Timeskip: Special Jounin or possibly Jounin

Hinata Hyuuga

Ninjutsu 4, Taijutsu 4, Genjutsu 1, Bukijutsu 4, Strength 3, Speed 4, Stamina 4, Handseals 4, Chakra Control 5

With mostly even attack stats with ninjutsu, weaponry and taijutsu, Hinata can engage any sort of opponent on any sort of battlefield. Her highly advanced chakra control allows her to cast ninjutsu using less chakra, so in spite of her average chakra reserves, she can use ninjutsu almost as consistently as Naruto himself.

Overall Skill Level Pre-Timeskip: Special Jounin or possibly Jounin

Gaara

Ninjutsu 4.5, Taijutsu 1, Genjutsu 1, Bukijutsu 3.5, Strength 1, Speed 2, Stamina 5, Hand Seals 3, Chakra Control 2

Having focused his abilities on sand control for most of his life, Gaara's other skills are lackluster. His fighting style does not require him to be strong, fast or capable in close quarters, and his massive chakra reserves thanks to Shukaku have also impeded his chakra control. On the other hand, his kenjutsu lessons from Tenten have given him another means of attack, if admittedly one he hasn't yet mastered.

Overall Skill Level Pre-Timeskip: Jounin, or S-rank with Bankai

Tenten

Ninjutsu 1.5, Taijutsu 2, Genjutsu 1, Bukijutsu 5, Strength 3, Speed 4, Stamina 4, Hand Seals 3.5, Chakra Control 4

Tenten's skills revolve entirely around her exceptional use of fuinjutsu-enhanced weaponry. Her use of explosives has allowed her to take on ranged fighters as though she were a ninjutsu expert, despite the fact that she makes little to no use of actual ninjutsu. She can move and close in on an opponent quickly, but hitting hard isn't much of an issue with the bladed weapons she prefers, so her physical strength is average.

Overall Skill Level Pre-Timeskip: Special Jounin

Sasuke Uchiha

Ninjutsu 4, Taijutsu 3.5, Genjutsu 5, Bukijutsu 1.5, Strength 3, Speed 4, Stamina 3.5, Hand Seals 5, Chakra Control 4

Sasuke's training under Kakashi has allowed him to awaken his Sharingan and make heavy use of it in his fighting style. His ability to cast genjutsu through mere eye contact is impressive, though he prefers to attack with ninjutsu and taijutsu, with which he is skilled. He can move quickly to deploy Chidori and taijutsu, and while his physical strength is only average, he makes good use of it with his close-range attacks. His enhanced reflexes, both from the Sharingan and his natural skills, allow him to make hand seals at an impressive rate.

Overall Skill Level Pre-Timeskip: Chuunin or possibly Special Jounin

Character Stats POSTTIMESKIP

Note: Rather than the style I used for pre-timeskip stats, I wanted to use a system this time that allows one character's abilities to be compared to another's so:

Note 2: If a character has a speed stat at or above 70, it means they have a high-speed movement jutsu. The higher their speed stat is above that point, the faster and more effective that movement jutsu is. If either of a character's offensive stats is below and not at 70, it means they prefer not to use that skill and will attack at the other range whenever possible. For instance, Haku is better at ranged combat while Sakura heavily favors close-range fighting.

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NINKEN

Naruto Uzumaki

Close-Range Offense: 95/100

Ranged Offense: 95/100

Defense: 90/100

Speed: 100/100

Chakra Reserves: 100/100

Chakra Control: 50/100

Overall: 530/600

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Hinata Hyuuga:

Close-Range Offense: 80/100

Ranged Offense: 95/100

Defense: 95/100

Speed: 70/100

Chakra Reserves: 80/100

Chakra Control: 100/100

Overall: 520/600

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Gaara:

Close-Range Offense: 70/100

Ranged Offense: 95/100

Defense: 95/100

Speed: 70/100

Chakra Reserves: 100/100

Chakra Control: 65/100

Overall: 495/600

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Tenten:

Close-Range Offense: 70/100

Ranged Offense: 90/100

Defense: 85/100

Speed: 70/100

Chakra Reserves: 65/100

Chakra Control: 85/100

Overall: 465/600

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Haku:

Close-Range Offense: 60/100

Ranged Offense: 85/100

Defense: 50/100

Speed: 90/100

Chakra Reserves: 70/100

Chakra Control: 70/100

Overall: 425/600

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Kiba Inuzuka:

Close-Range Offense: 70/100

Ranged Offense: 30/100

Defense: 90/100

Speed: 50/100

Chakra Reserves: 70/100

Chakra Control: 60/100

Overall: 370/600

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Shikamaru Nara:

Close-Range Offense: 85/100

Ranged Offense: 80/100

Defense: 40/100

Speed: 45/100

Chakra Reserves: 75/100

Chakra Control: 75/100

Overall: 400/600

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Chouji Akimichi

Close-Range Offense: 90/100

Ranged Offense: 80/100

Defense: 65/100

Speed: 45/100

Chakra Reserves: 85/100

Chakra Control: 70/100

Overall: 435/600

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Sakura Haruno:

Close-Range Offense: 95/100

Ranged Offense: 20/100

Defense: 55/100

Speed: 65/100

Chakra Reserves: 60/100

Chakra Control: 100/100

Overall: 495/600

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Sasuke Uchiha:

500/600 - See TAKA

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Ninken ranked from one to ten overall:

1. Naruto Uzumaki 530

2. Hinata Hyuuga 520

3. Sasuke Uchiha 500

4. Gaara 495

5. Sakura Haruno 495

6. Tenten 465

7. Chouji Akimichi 435

8. Haku 425

9. Shikamaru Nara 400

10. Kiba Inuzuka 370

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AKATSUKI

Madara Uchiha:

Close-Range Offense: 90/100

Ranged Offense: 95/100

Defense: 95/100

Speed: 90/100

Chakra Reserves: 100/100

Chakra Control: 80/100

Overall: 550/600

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Tobi:

Close-Range Offense: 80/100

Ranged Offense: 70/100

Defense: 100/100

Speed: 100/100

Chakra Reserves: 80/100

Chakra Control: 90/100

Overall: 520/600

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Nagato Uzumaki:

Close-Range Offense: 80/100

Ranged Offense: 100/100

Defense: 80/100

Speed: 90/100

Chakra Reserves: 95/100

Chakra Control: 80/100

Overall: 525/600

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TAKA

Sasuke Uchiha:

Close-Range Offense: 90/100

Ranged Offense: 95/100

Defense: 95/100

Speed: 70/100

Chakra Reserves: 80/100

Chakra Control: 70/100

Overall: 500/600

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Kimimaro Kaguya:

Close-Range Offense: 95/100

Ranged Offense: 65/100

Defense: 80/100

Speed: 90/100

Chakra Reserves: 70/100

Chakra Control: 80/100

Overall: 480/600

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Karin Uzumaki:

Close-Range Offense: 90/100

Ranged Offense: 70/100

Defense: 60/100

Speed: 60/100

Chakra Reserves: 100/100

Chakra Control: 80/100

Overall: 460/600

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Juugo:

Close-Range Offense: 60/100

Ranged Offense: 85/100

Defense: 90/100

Speed: 85/100

Chakra Reserves: 95/100

Chakra Control: 60/100

Overall: 475/600

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Suigetsu Hozuki

Close-Range Offense: 85/100

Ranged Offense: 65/100

Defense: 70/100

Speed: 50/100

Chakra Reserves: 60/100

Chakra Control: 60/100

Overall: 390/600

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Itachi Uchiha:

Close-Range Offense: 85/100

Ranged Offense: 95/100

Defense: 90/100

Speed: 90/100

Chakra Reserves: 80/100

Chakra Control: 90/100

Overall: 530/600

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Taka ranked from one to six overall:

1. Itachi Uchiha 530

2. Sasuke Uchiha 500

3. Kimimaro Kaguya 480

4. Juugo 475

5. Karin Uzumaki 460

6. Suigetsu Hozuki 390

Author's Commentary 1: Writing Style

Of all the classes I took across my entire education, English was my favorite subject. I absorbed all the lessons I was given there, and learned what to do and not to do in writing over many years. I'm still refining my own personal style, but here's a few of the rules I'm always careful to follow.

1. Punctuation has to be right. No matter what, you cannot overuse commas, especially in dialogue. People don't pause that often when they talk, even if, strictly speaking grammatically, there should be commas in there more often.

2. Dialogue should feel as natural as possible. Real people use contractions when they talk; they don't sound like they're reading a script and most of them don't use a bunch of especially descriptive words. Leave that for the actual narrative.

3. Try to avoid the word 'said' in the narrative. Example: "I'm very angry," Naruto said. It doesn't look right; 'said' is too bland. Using a word that conveys the emotion matching the line, like Naruto growled, Naruto snarled, etc. always seems to make the emotion feel more real to me. You don't have to just use this for emotions though; you can use it to convey the way the character is saying something: "Holy crap!" Naruto exclaimed; "Bankai," Gaara declared, "N-Naruto-kun?" Hinata called. Anything but 'said.' It's boring.

4. When two things are described as happening simultaneously, use 'as' to connect them in a single sentence, but don't do it constantly. Everything's better in moderation. Example: Naruto unsealed his cutlass and tightened his grip around the handle as the Zetsu clones approached, roaring and screaming incoherently in their fury.

5. The example sentence above shows this rule as well: be descriptive. Compare that example to this one: Naruto drew his sword as the Zetsu clones ran toward him. Look at how bland, empty and plastic that sentence is. Sure, the other one isn't exactly great, but it's better than this one here. It's easier to picture a scene and the attached emotions, thoughts and pace, when the writer is being descriptive and telling you what's happening with a certain measure of detail. What are the characters doing, why and how are they doing it, how do they feel about it? On the other hand, you don't want to overdo this. If you get too descriptive and ramble on and on about a setting, a character's appearance, or something like that, then the scene gets just as boring as it would if you were being bland.

Author's Commentary 2: My Thoughts

When I first started writing A Different Scroll, I was still watching Part I of the series. In fact, if I remember correctly, I finished Part I after I was already five or so chapters into this fanfiction. On top of that, I was still writing another story at the time. I never expected this story to get more than ten reviews, and I honestly believed I would quickly give up on it and return to my previous work, which currently has seven reviews.

Yeah... that totally happened.

As of this writing, A Different Scroll sits at 37 chapters, 260,000 words, and 580 reviews. We're nearing the conclusion of Part I, and this story is the most meaningful thing I've ever done. Now, when I say that, I should really make it clear that I'm 18 and unemployed. Still, it's not like I'm gonna win the Nobel Peace Prize when I grow up. I'm going to live an ordinary life, full of ordinary accomplishments. If I'm lucky, I'll meet an extraordinary girl and she'll make me extraordinarily happy, but my point is that this story touches more lives than anything else I've ever done. In that sense, it's my most meaningful accomplishment.

Author's Commentary 3: Naruto (Canon and ADS) vs Bleach

This section has been redacted since it was kinda stupid. The short version is, Bleach attacks are bigger but Naruto attacks do more damage in a smaller area. Bleach characters are stronger on average.

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Minds, Names and Faces by ShutUpAndCalculate reviews
An AU/Continuation recursive fanfic of the excellent "Harry Potter and the Methods of Rationality". Harry James Potter-Evans-Verres, the Boy-Who-Lived, General Chaos, etc., has had a rather busy year. With the term drawing to a close, Harry starts to discover the truth behind the enigmatic Defence Professor, Quirinus Quirrell.
Harry Potter - Rated: T - English - Drama/Humor - Chapters: 11 - Words: 27,249 - Reviews: 45 - Favs: 66 - Follows: 157 - Updated: 8/1 - Published: 3/31
Draco Malfoy and the Practice of Rationality by taogaming reviews
A continuation of Harry Potter and the Methods of Rationality, focusing on Draco in his second year. I try to not deviate from HPMOR, but I may make mistakes and there are some plot points open to interpretation. More political than HPMOR, but still some cognitive psychology ala Harry's Lessons. And not nearly as good, so lower your expectations.
Harry Potter - Rated: T - English - Drama/Humor - Chapters: 28 - Words: 82,392 - Reviews: 84 - Favs: 74 - Follows: 169 - Updated: 7/30 - Published: 5/2 - Harry P., Hermione G., Draco M.
I Am NOT Going Through Puberty Again! by EvilFuzzy9 reviews
Our heroes did not come from a future where everything has gone horribly wrong. They did not travel back in time to save the world from a bleak or miserable fate. As a matter of fact, all they want to do is find a way back home as soon as possible. [cracky, epilogue-compliant time travel fic] [Now has a TV Tropes page!]
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Humor/Parody - Chapters: 28 - Words: 175,522 - Reviews: 2570 - Favs: 3,604 - Follows: 4,204 - Updated: 7/29 - Published: 11/29/2014 - [Sakura H., Sasuke U.] [Hinata H., Naruto U.]
Trials and Forthcomings by Team Dragon Star reviews
With war looming on the horizon, Team Seven is put back on active duty after several years of intense training. Having overcome every obstacle thus far, have they done enough to defeat the challenges they'll have to face in order to save Konoha? Sequel to Failings and Misunderstandings.
Naruto - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 11 - Words: 56,215 - Reviews: 181 - Favs: 460 - Follows: 663 - Updated: 7/23 - Published: 2/28 - [Naruto U., Hinata H.] [Sasuke U., Sakura H.]
Harry Potter and the Bleached Hallows by Eradona reviews
The Finale! Part 3 of the Trilogy started in Harry Potter and the Bleached Phoenix. While Harry, Ron and Hermione search for the remainder of the Horcruxes, the Soul Reapers stay at Hogwarts to help protect the students and get ready for two upcoming major battles: against Voldemort and Aizen! Now being co-written by Arei-the Peridot Dragon!
Crossover - Harry Potter & Bleach - Rated: T - English - Supernatural/Suspense - Chapters: 19 - Words: 85,877 - Reviews: 445 - Favs: 565 - Follows: 703 - Updated: 7/19 - Published: 11/24/2013 - Harry P., Ichigo K.
Fairy Dance of Death by Catsy reviews
AU reboot of the entire SAO storyline, beginning from the premise that Kayaba Akihiko was obsessed with magic and Norse Mythology rather than swords and pure melee. As a result, he created the Death Game of Alfheim Online rather than the floating castle of Aincrad—a world in which PvP is not a crime, and the nine player races are in competition to escape. **SPOILERS IN REVIEWS**
Sword Art Online/ソードアート・オンライン - Rated: T - English - Drama/Adventure - Chapters: 36 - Words: 376,265 - Reviews: 1545 - Favs: 2,350 - Follows: 2,396 - Updated: 7/4 - Published: 11/6/2012 - Kirito/Kazuto K., Asuna/Asuna Y., Klein/Ryoutarou T., Argo
Actions and Words by Ekusukallybaa reviews
In the aftermath of Orochimaru's Invasion and Itachi's second Tsukuyomi, Sasuke is left with two revelations. The first is that his friends were put in danger because of him. The second is that he will do anything to protect them.
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Friendship/Adventure - Chapters: 18 - Words: 95,224 - Reviews: 432 - Favs: 555 - Follows: 569 - Updated: 7/2 - Published: 1/31/2014 - Sasuke U., Team Seven, Team Hawk, Indara
Not Sick by Ser Serendipity reviews
In one world, after defeating his brother, Itachi Uchiha dropped dead, victim of a mysterious disease, and the future of the ninja world was set for the worse. However, in another, Itachi was not sick. From this small difference, many changes will spring, and many plans will be overturned. The path of the last of the Uchiha, and the world itself, will be altered forever.
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Family - Chapters: 32 - Words: 286,427 - Reviews: 1244 - Favs: 1,194 - Follows: 1,348 - Updated: 6/30 - Published: 11/24/2013 - Sasuke U., Itachi U., Naruto U., Sakura H.
Ricochet by Strix 4 reviews
Sometimes it's easy to see the familiar in the faces around you. Sometimes it sucks to figure out why.
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Family/Drama - Chapters: 10 - Words: 42,646 - Reviews: 848 - Favs: 1,780 - Follows: 1,713 - Updated: 5/9 - Published: 3/25/2012 - Team Seven
Harry Potter and the Methods of Rationality by Less Wrong reviews
Petunia married a biochemist, and Harry grew up reading science and science fiction. Then came the Hogwarts letter, and a world of intriguing new possibilities to exploit. And new friends, like Hermione Granger, and Professor McGonagall, and Professor Quirrell... COMPLETE.
Harry Potter - Rated: T - English - Drama/Humor - Chapters: 122 - Words: 661,619 - Reviews: 30356 - Favs: 16,770 - Follows: 14,603 - Updated: 3/14 - Published: 2/28/2010 - Harry P., Hermione G. - Complete
Failings and Misunderstandings by Team Dragon Star reviews
When Team 7 is expelled during the first phase of the Chunin exams, the Sharingan falls out of Orochimaru's reach. In his attempt to salvage something of worth from his plan, the Sannin searches for another bloodline. However, when he chooses Konoha's other Dojutsu, the consequences exceed even his wildest expectations.
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 42 - Words: 210,355 - Reviews: 955 - Favs: 1,723 - Follows: 1,740 - Updated: 2/28 - Published: 4/27/2013 - [Naruto U., Hinata H.] [Sasuke U., Sakura H.] - Complete
Harry Potter and the Natural 20 by Sir Poley reviews
Milo, a genre-savvy D&D Wizard and Adventurer Extraordinaire is forced to attend Hogwarts, and soon finds himself plunged into a new adventure of magic, mad old Wizards, metagaming, misunderstandings, and munchkinry. Updates Fridays.
Crossover - Harry Potter & Dungeons and Dragons - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 72 - Words: 301,307 - Reviews: 5311 - Favs: 3,828 - Follows: 4,403 - Updated: 2/27 - Published: 5/7/2012
Our Ninja Way by Just Retribution reviews
During the battle with Pain, Naruto hears Hinata's confession. Now, with the upcoming war looming he must decide if love will make him stronger, or lead to his downfall. But war isn't the only problem as his home becomes threatened by one of its' oldest clans. New alliances will have to be forged and an old family reunited if the Hidden Leaf is to survive. seal-savy/mature/Naruto
Naruto - Rated: M - English - Drama/Romance - Chapters: 41 - Words: 315,835 - Reviews: 853 - Favs: 919 - Follows: 1,072 - Updated: 1/27 - Published: 2/12/2012 - Naruto U., Hinata H.
101 Ways to Make Hinata Hyuuga Faint by Mya Uzo reviews
Naruto finds out early on in the academy that he has an amazing talent. He can make Hinata faint! Now he is determined to find all the ways to make her faint. Starts in academy years and ends sometime in their married life.
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Romance/Humor - Chapters: 37 - Words: 37,475 - Reviews: 1642 - Favs: 1,771 - Follows: 1,911 - Updated: 1/21 - Published: 3/14/2012 - Hinata H., Naruto U.
Lighting Up the Dark by Velorien reviews
AU inspired by an omake in HPMOR. 12 years ago, the Fourth Hokage gave his life to seal Kyubey, the Nine-Brained Demon Fox, into the infant Naruto. Now, the time has come for a smarter, more creative Naruto to take on a world in which quick thinking and a solid grasp of strategy are worth a dozen rare techniques, and a brilliant mind can challenge even the deepest darkness.
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 15 - Words: 100,138 - Reviews: 511 - Favs: 1,046 - Follows: 1,264 - Updated: 11/18/2014 - Published: 5/20/2013 - Naruto U.
Link to Reality by Queen of Corners reviews
Reboot of ALfheim Arc. After everything they'd been through in SAO, Kirito and Asuna find themselves trapped in yet another virtual reality setting. This time, however, they don't quite know the requirements for getting out.
Sword Art Online/ソードアート・オンライン - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Drama - Chapters: 29 - Words: 222,189 - Reviews: 375 - Favs: 676 - Follows: 463 - Updated: 6/27/2014 - Published: 1/13/2014 - Kirito/Kazuto K., Asuna/Asuna Y. - Complete
Rationalising Death by Scientist's Thesis reviews
What if the mentioned super intelligence of Yagami Light and his antagonists wasn't just informed, but was actually true?
Death Note - Rated: T - English - Crime/Supernatural - Chapters: 10 - Words: 54,841 - Reviews: 424 - Favs: 613 - Follows: 818 - Updated: 6/21/2014 - Published: 6/11/2013 - Light Y., L, Misa A.
In Just Seven Days I Can Make You a Man by Velorien reviews
Byakuya needs to be kept busy long enough for Rukia and Ichigo to take their relationship to the next level, and there's only one man up to the job. Will Byakuya survive the legendary Zaraki Manhood Training Programme with his health, sanity and honour intact, and be transformed into an ultra-masculine badass in just seven days? Or has the Sixth Squad Captain finally met his match?
Bleach - Rated: T - English - Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 13,092 - Reviews: 11 - Favs: 63 - Follows: 13 - Published: 5/17/2013 - Byakuya K., K. Zaraki - Complete
Bleach and the Half Blood Prince by Eradona reviews
Sequel to Harry Potter and the Order of the Bleached Phoenix; picks up where that story left off. Ichigo and Harry main characters; go with them as they return to Hogwarts and ready themselves to battle two enemies! Part two is now COMPLETE!
Crossover - Harry Potter & Bleach - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 50 - Words: 273,769 - Reviews: 1847 - Favs: 940 - Follows: 750 - Updated: 5/14/2013 - Published: 12/25/2011 - Harry P., Ichigo K. - Complete
Harry Potter and the Order of the Bleached Phoenix by Eradona reviews
Due to an old Friendship between two meddling old men, Ichigo Kurosaki and Company end up at Hogwarts. The mission: protect Harry Potter! Primarily Bleach Characters interacting with the Wizarding World. Rating changed to M to be safe.
Crossover - Harry Potter & Bleach - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Supernatural - Chapters: 49 - Words: 231,883 - Reviews: 820 - Favs: 1,143 - Follows: 456 - Updated: 1/8/2012 - Published: 7/19/2011 - Harry P., Ichigo K. - Complete
A Growing Affection by Xavon Wrentaile reviews
After a misunderstanding reveals hidden emotions, Naruto and Hinata begin training together, getting to know each other. At the same time Sakura finds herself jealous. Takes place in a tangent after the Elemental Training Arc of the Shippuden timeline.
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 170 - Words: 686,165 - Reviews: 3045 - Favs: 2,890 - Follows: 1,595 - Updated: 9/25/2011 - Published: 11/27/2007 - Naruto U., Hinata H. - Complete
Saying I Will by DameM reviews
To return Ichigo to his "Substitute Shinigami" status, Rukia is assigned to stay by his side, even to the point of going to college. And it all starts in the typical Ichigo/Rukia reunion fashion- at Ichigo's expense.
Bleach - Rated: T - English - Romance/Humor - Chapters: 80 - Words: 196,949 - Reviews: 1941 - Favs: 1,242 - Follows: 631 - Updated: 9/24/2011 - Published: 11/30/2010 - Ichigo K., Rukia K. - Complete
Oh God Not Again! by Sarah1281 reviews
So maybe everything didn't work out perfectly for Harry. Still, most of his friends survived, he'd gotten married, and was about to become a father. If only he'd have stayed away from the Veil, he wouldn't have had to go back and do everything AGAIN.
Harry Potter - Rated: K+ - English - Humor/Parody - Chapters: 50 - Words: 162,639 - Reviews: 10411 - Favs: 12,939 - Follows: 5,284 - Updated: 12/22/2009 - Published: 9/13/2008 - Harry P. - Complete
Like the Back of My Hand by Juupitrie reviews
Hinata knows Naruto like the back of her hand, so she's surprised and secretly smug when he challenges her to a game of 'who knows who best'. NarutoXHinata one-shot
Naruto - Rated: K - English - Romance/Hurt/Comfort - Chapters: 1 - Words: 4,930 - Reviews: 231 - Favs: 883 - Follows: 110 - Published: 9/22/2009 - Naruto U., Hinata H. - Complete
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A Different Scroll reviews
Ten-year-old Hinata works up the courage to talk to Naruto, and ends up teaching him the Clone Jutsu. He passes the Genin Exam properly and never learns the Shadow Clone Jutsu. Their world will never be the same. NaruHina. Rinnegan!Naruto. Chapter 81: The Final Calm
Naruto - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 81 - Words: 560,408 - Reviews: 1567 - Favs: 1,607 - Follows: 1,690 - Updated: 7/17 - Published: 8/15/2013 - [Naruto U., Hinata H.] [Gaara, Tenten]
Glitch reviews
"He was moving too fast... he could actually see his arms skipping animation frames in the complex motions of Starburst Stream..." In which the battle between Kirito and The Gleam-Eyes leads to a drastically different result. Crack, or perhaps not quite crack.
Sword Art Online/ソードアート・オンライン - Rated: T - English - Parody/Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 3,370 - Reviews: 9 - Favs: 19 - Follows: 13 - Published: 4/2 - Kirito/Kazuto K., Cardinal - Complete
Hellsing Ultimate Abridged: The Unofficial Novelization reviews
The events of Hellsing Ultimate Abridged, as experienced and narrated by the cast. Their true thoughts may not at all be what you expect...
Hellsing - Rated: T - English - Parody/Humor - Chapters: 3 - Words: 13,762 - Reviews: 26 - Favs: 93 - Follows: 83 - Updated: 9/4/2014 - Published: 7/11/2014 - [Alucard, Seras] Integra, Walter
The Fangirl Mentality reviews
"Sherlock, why do they think we're gay?" Written as one of John's blog entries. Sherlock/Molly.
Sherlock - Rated: T - English - Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,755 - Reviews: 14 - Favs: 35 - Follows: 1 - Published: 2/17/2014 - Sherlock H., John W., Molly Hooper - Complete
L am Dragonborn reviews
Less than a day after Higuchi's arrest, L falls asleep, and wakes up in a carriage in Skyrim, bound for Helgen and his execution, only to be saved by a dragon attack. Now "free" to find his own way in Skyrim, L soon finds that the blood in his veins forces a dark destiny on him, and he's not the only one from the Kira case to arrive in Skyrim. No pairings.
Crossover - Death Note & Elder Scroll series - Rated: T - English - Fantasy/Adventure - Chapters: 19 - Words: 69,419 - Reviews: 68 - Favs: 58 - Follows: 37 - Updated: 1/21/2013 - Published: 6/23/2012 - Light Y., L, Alduin - Complete