dEBB987
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Joined 06-20-12, id: 4071510, Profile Updated: 03-29-18
Author has written 6 stories for Harry Potter, and Overlord/オーバーロード.

Hi there! Welcome to my profile, dEBB987

I’m not a native English speaker, so comments that help me improve my grammar and redacting are very welcome!~

At first I didn’t know what to write here, but finally decided to place my personal opinion regarding reviews. The development of my first story was more affected by them than it should have, so maybe any new / wannabe writers out there can avoid this situation if they read this haha. It’s hard to know at first...

...which kind of reviews help you grow as an author, and which you should ignore?

So below are some examples of the reviews I’ve gotten in my stories. Out of basic, common courtesy the authors behind said reviews are not mentioned, only the review followed by my opinion on it.

The way I see it, there aren’t really ‘negative’ reviews. They either like it or not, and sure they can express it quite harshly, but in the end it is just that. An opinion. Like this one, for example

“You'd have to be a lot more creative and spend a lot more time making a multi-billion year old Harry believable. You don't seem to know when to stop. Master of Death is not enough. You have to make him billions of years old and outliving multiple universes. How in the fuck do you explain someone like that even able to still communicate with normal humans?”

Kinda harsh, but a valid opinion, so there goes that. It’s not a critic about my redaction, my writing style, or me as an author specifically, so you, as an author, should just respect the fact that not everyone is going to like the story and move on.

“I do not like this fanfic, why is almost every harry potter fanfic the same?” Same with this one.

“Huuurrrrk. That’s the sound of me vomiting blood. Why the hell do so many wannabes think using Hadrian instead of Harry is acceptable (here’s a hint: it’s not,) hell, a two seconds and a search (…)” They’re, pardon my French, bitching over the name I chose haha. This is the kind you don’t take seriously.

There are some others, but I think you get the point. Some would consider them as ‘negative’ but they are just an opinion at the end of the day. So don’t let them get to your head. I won’t change the name I chose for example, just because one reader didn’t like it.

There are others that are kinda harsh but actually help you learn a thing or two about writing, or help you keep plot-continuity so they are good for me.

“Your grammar needs attention. Badly.” Not really helpful, but it points to a feature that you can improve.

“its alright but missing a lot of details the pace is quite fast”

“Hmm too many changes in which character we view the world from too damn fast (..)” also something you can improve

“Last chapter he thought two of them were level 75 so why is one, and only one, at level 70 so shocking to Harry? (…)” This kind helps with plot-continuity, so they’re really appreciated! Some are written quite harshly, but they help a lot, so you as an author just have to focus on what helps you and ignore the rest.

The ones below I would classify as neutral – positive. It makes you feel valued, that your work is appreciated, and that’s it haha

“I didn't know you have this. Thank you for writing”

“Season 2 of Overlord is out” – when I said next update may be coming once the anime season ended.

“Good so far” Doesn’t really say anything other than they mildly approve, so there’s that haha.

The ones below, I would classify as fully positive. The kind of review that makes you smile and helps with self-confidence in your writting.

“Oh!!! I like it, I like it, I really really like it!!!! I can't wait for the next update. It's really good and it's really interesting as well.”

“Yeeeeeeessss this is quality shit! I love it! I can't wait for another chapter! I'm so ready! *insert SpongeBob gif* You're freaking awesome”

“I really love your other story, so when I saw this one, I decided to come read it too, and I was not disappointed! I still really like how the characters all interact with each other (..)”

“Omg omg omg you’ve combined my love of two very important things ! HARRY POTTER AND OVERLORD ! CANT WAIT FOR MORE !”

“I love your story, I love your omake, I LOVE YOUR WRITING. Thank you for the good work and I hope to see more soon

But these ones? These are the best! The kind that points out mistakes in a friendly manner

“Just a small proofread - the past tense of leave is left. ie. "Have you ever left the treasury?” (Yes, it's spelled and pronounced exactly like 'left' the direction.) It's not a big error, (I take it that English isn't your first language? I'm impressed!) just a consistent one (…)”

“I just started reading and caught up to this story. I have to say that I genuinely like what you have done with this story. I can't wait for this story. However, I feel like there are some writting errors that hinder your flow, so I would advise getting beta or making some choices (…)”

The reviews are long so I don’t want to bore you with the details, but they really helped me improve.

Oh well, if you're reading this I thank you for your time and hope you can forgive any misspelling I may have. Some always escape me and get published (sadly), but I get back to edit when I receive the comments in the reviews.

Hope it helped~ See you later!

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Indolent Overlord by UnknownRegion reviews
What if Momonga hadn't been alone in real life or in YGGDRASIL? Insert Suzuki Satoshi, his lazy younger brother who can't help but drop everything to go sightseeing! A king of procrastination and idleness! War? Battles? Momonga's unintentional harem? He'd rather not get involved, so please leave him out of it, thank you very much. GEN.
Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Family/Friendship - Chapters: 13 - Words: 59,145 - Reviews: 283 - Favs: 1,132 - Follows: 1,319 - Updated: 5/11 - Published: 7/28/2018 - Ainz, Demiurge, Victim, OC
Friendly Foreign Dimensional Exchange Student Spiderman! by Zaru reviews
Peter Parker died as a result of the Infinity Gauntlet on Titan. He awakens in a new world of heroes and villains in a foreign country... How will Peter cope and adapt in this new environment as he makes new friends and enemies... (MCUxMHA crossover, Pairing Undecided).
Crossover - Avengers & My Hero Academia/僕のヒーローアカデミア - Rated: T - English - Adventure - Chapters: 46 - Words: 523,773 - Reviews: 3636 - Favs: 5,616 - Follows: 6,135 - Updated: 4/26 - Published: 1/24/2019 - Spider-Man/Peter Parker, Izuku M., Momo Y., Pony T.
Godsfall by Shurpuff reviews
Momonga left. The denizens of Nazarick grew mad with despair, and spread death and desolation into the New World. Twenty years later, humanity is on the verge of extinction. Into this hopeless situation, six heroes will rise. They are the Supreme Beings, players brought here from Yggdrasil Mk.2. What will Momonga and his friends see, in this twisted world remade by their children?
Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Fantasy/Romance - Chapters: 22 - Words: 118,987 - Reviews: 1182 - Favs: 1,901 - Follows: 2,188 - Updated: 7/2/2019 - Published: 6/6/2016 - Ainz
Science and Madness by The Blight reviews
In their pursuit of knowledge and power, defectors from Zurrernorn try summoning something directly from the realm of the gods. However, what they pull from the other side is completely unexpected. Away from home and disoriented, a madman finds that when the world is filled impossibly powerful beings, science is his only ally.
Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Fantasy/Sci-Fi - Chapters: 24 - Words: 179,862 - Reviews: 295 - Favs: 308 - Follows: 383 - Updated: 3/14/2019 - Published: 11/3/2017
The Armored Alchemist by Nyx the Author reviews
Ainz finds himself in the realm of Truth unexpectedly. Truth decides to make a deal with him. Amestris will not be prepared, and neither are the Homunculi.
Crossover - Fullmetal Alchemist & Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Mystery - Chapters: 11 - Words: 44,665 - Reviews: 165 - Favs: 611 - Follows: 711 - Updated: 1/4/2019 - Published: 8/31/2017 - Alphonse E., Edward E., Truth, Ainz
Fork It Over by Barrel of Monkeys reviews
Little vampire Harry, along with his Sire Demetri, are about to really shake things up in Forks. Oh the adventures Harry will have.
Crossover - Harry Potter & Twilight - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 30 - Words: 80,775 - Reviews: 1933 - Favs: 4,999 - Follows: 4,086 - Updated: 7/3/2016 - Published: 8/11/2011 - Harry P., Demetri - Complete
Masterless by halowenjo reviews
When the YGGDRASIL servers shut down, instead of being transported to a new world Momonga disappeared like the rest of the Supreme Beings. Leaving the guardians of Nazarick to fend for themselves.
Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: M - English - Mystery/Hurt/Comfort - Chapters: 15 - Words: 43,323 - Reviews: 110 - Favs: 235 - Follows: 274 - Updated: 3/27/2016 - Published: 12/2/2015
The Demon's Dear Friend by Kagetsuki-taicho reviews
Harrison James Potter is bored of seeing human civilisations rise and fall. Seizing the chance to go to another dimension where there are greater powers other than humans, The Master of Death lives in the Kuroshitsuji world as a walking contradiction. The lord of Shinigami in a demon body, what would happen to the story of our favourite Earl and his loyal demon butler?
Crossover - Harry Potter & Kuroshitsuji - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Friendship - Chapters: 15 - Words: 82,731 - Reviews: 560 - Favs: 2,988 - Follows: 3,182 - Updated: 6/2/2015 - Published: 10/13/2013 - Harry P., Sebastian M.
Harry Potter and the Trip to the Past by Priya Ashok reviews
COMPLETE! 19 years after the war with Voldemort Harry Potter is thrown 25 years into the past, arriving just before the start of his first year at Hogwarts. Please Read and Review.
Harry Potter - Rated: K+ - English - Adventure - Chapters: 34 - Words: 197,996 - Reviews: 3135 - Favs: 7,251 - Follows: 5,440 - Updated: 12/29/2014 - Published: 9/26/2007 - Harry P. - Complete
Let Live and Let Die by OctoberThirtyFirst reviews
After centuries as Master of Death, Harry must return to the mortal realms and investigate why this Light is of such fascination to his shinigami. He didn't expect life to take him by the heels, nor for himself to be embroiled in such a tangled game of mass murderer versus detective. In it all, where will he side and who will he let live and let die?
Crossover - Harry Potter & Death Note - Rated: K - English - Adventure/Drama - Chapters: 11 - Words: 35,756 - Reviews: 246 - Favs: 987 - Follows: 1,255 - Updated: 2/3/2014 - Published: 11/23/2013 - Harry P., Light Y., L
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Raid Boss: Bad Timing reviews
Set after "Farewell" in Raid Boss. An AU in which Harry arrived at the New World 5 years before Nazarick and Momonga did... and when they meet, they don't recognize each other. Alternative summaries as placed in the comments by AO3 readers: "A series of Misinformed events." "Awww, poor all of them, so angry over Harry's perceived death that they want to... kill Harry."
Crossover - Harry Potter & Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Drama/Friendship - Chapters: 6 - Words: 31,804 - Reviews: 20 - Favs: 112 - Follows: 91 - Published: 4/3 - Harry P., Ainz, Albedo, Demiurge - Complete
Raid Boss reviews
A powerful Raid Boss appeared out of nowhere in Yggdrassil, wandering around the world instead of staying on a specified Dungeon. Rumors about his deadly power and merciless battles spread around the gamer community… and Harry? Well, he wasn't aware he was considered as "Raid Boss", nor that the world he had arrived at was considered a "Game". MOD!OP!Harry Game-Nazarik Real-Nazarik
Crossover - Harry Potter & Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Fantasy - Chapters: 17 - Words: 139,664 - Reviews: 1325 - Favs: 5,112 - Follows: 5,955 - Updated: 4/3/2020 - Published: 8/20/2018 - Harry P., Ainz
The Master of Death in Nazarik reviews
Today at midnight, the server would close down and any players left would be forcefully logged-out. That's what was supposed to happen at least. Harry knew better than that though. He had seen the changes in the runes, had seen how they changed to become more permanent with each "new version" of the server.
Crossover - Harry Potter & Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Fantasy - Chapters: 29 - Words: 128,941 - Reviews: 505 - Favs: 2,135 - Follows: 2,369 - Updated: 9/1/2018 - Published: 7/1/2017 - Harry P., Albedo, Demiurge
Harry Potter and the return to the First life reviews
Harry had lived in Nazarik for 200 years. With his luck though, he shouldn't have been surprised when his peace was disturbed by a summoning ritual, his old world requesting the Master of Death. How will Voldemort react when MOD!Harry and Nazarik's NPCs are summoned to end the war? How will normal!Harry? No bashing. Kinda related to my other story but no need to read to understand
Crossover - Harry Potter & Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Fantasy/Adventure - Chapters: 9 - Words: 44,369 - Reviews: 165 - Favs: 1,770 - Follows: 2,136 - Updated: 9/1/2018 - Published: 12/2/2017
Harry PotterOverlord drabbles, AUs, One-shots, and What-Ifs reviews
A collection of stories revolving around MOD!Harry and Overlord characters. Index on the first page along with a brief summary of each story.
Crossover - Harry Potter & Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Fantasy - Chapters: 2 - Words: 7,335 - Reviews: 11 - Favs: 129 - Follows: 146 - Published: 4/29/2018 - Harry P., Demiurge, Aura, Mare
Chilhood memories reviews
An accident involving magic leaves Nazarik's Guardians as 5-year-old children. A collection of Omakes from my main story "The Master of Death in Nazarik" that is in the x-over section with Harry Potter.
Overlord/オーバーロード - Rated: T - English - Humor/Fantasy - Chapters: 3 - Words: 8,080 - Reviews: 20 - Favs: 80 - Follows: 80 - Updated: 1/7/2018 - Published: 8/11/2017 - Albedo, Demiurge, Cocytus