Author has written 3 stories for Naruto, Fate/stay night, and My Hero Academia/僕のヒーローアカデミア.
Just some punk writing stories to improve his writing skills. I'm shit at updating things. I have a lot of ideas and not a lot of motivation. Using my profile as a blog to write about my stories, since I don't like putting them in the chapters themselves.
Prologue: This will probably be the weakest chapter of the story, but I needed a jumping off point to establish the jump to the new world, the antagonist, and the reconciliation between mentally deranged Sasuke and the quiet-but-redeemed-and-somehow-now-totally-sane post-war Sasuke. I think that Sasuke will still be mentally not all there from everything that happened to him growing up, and Naruto is simply his morality chain. This is currently being more overtly fleshed out in chapter 2, which is being written as I type this. This chapter is ultimately necessary, but the rest of the story is far more entertaining, provided people actually read past this opening (which given the statistics of where people read, isn't all that likely).
Dissimilar: This is where the fun begins. With Sasuke in the new world, I can begin some heavy worldbuilding based on both the differences between this world and canon as well as what canon didn't flesh out very well. Political systems, social structures, civilian economic relationships between both civilians and shinobi and separate nations, and of course, how Sasuke will inadvertently upend this. Now, Sasuke's no saint, and doesn't particularly care about the reversed gender roles, nor does he care about the marginalized men in this society. So long as the world isn't destroyed in his quest to get home, he's fairly satisfied. Of course, Sasuke realizes he'll have to be more careful at the end of the chapter once he finds out, but hasn't really realized that Ameyuri is onto him and will absolutely take that shit right to the Mizukage, so act one of this fic will likely have a bunch of Kiri annoyances chasing him up and down the continent to capture him for nefarious, trashy harem purposes that probably aren't nearly as luxurious as we would all like to believe. One of the big problems with writing characters like Sasuke is that they don't normally make good main characters. The quiet loner type is an excellent side character for injecting mystery and character tension into a story, but writing from their perspective takes a lot out of that. As such, I'm somewhat forced to write from Sasuke's perspective as a bit of an unreliable narrator, and will also have to use forced companions to attempt to flesh him out and get him acquainted to the world. The other hard part is to ask where Sasuke would believably go from any point in the story. He's very goal oriented, so he would believably have no problems simply hunting down every Akatsuki base he can find and tear them down until he finds Zetsu, but that doesn't make for too interesting of a story. Of course, he is smart enough to realize that Zetsu might not even be here, or that if he is, then he won't be at any of the Akatsuki bases he knows, leaving him to start with Ame to take down Pein head-to-head or run around finding the Jinchuuriki to help prepare them against the Akatsuki. I'm honestly thinking of having Sasuke try to contact Jiraiya's spy network, though I'm not sure if he would be believably motivated to do so. The hardest part of writing a character is that you have to improve upon them and continue to flesh them out without getting rid of their base character entirely, otherwise you might as well write your own characters.
Shattered Expectations: I mostly knew what I was doing this chapter, I had set it up in the previous chapter, so nothing was all that unexpected, I imagine. The hardest parts of this chapter were the trial (and coming up with a more legitimate reason why Sasuke would still be broody and traveling the lands rather than raising his fucking family and working from Konoha as like, ANBU Commander or something), and I figured anger at the Kage at forcing him to restart what he considers a cursed bloodline and having to be under the rule of all the nations rather than just the one he vowed to his friend to protect would be a better reason than what was given in Boruto canon (which is basically nothing, they just did it because the plot demanded it). The other decision was what info he would be able to find in the library, and where his next destination would be after he found out said information. My main choices were Konohagakure, where Konoha character plots would become and Sasuke would get distracted by further changes of the world, or another hidden village that I would have to design/steal/adapt from another fanfiction to use as an information hub. I planned to use both locations eventually, but I had to decide what Sasuke's personality and motivations would naturally lead him to choose, and went with that while writing the next chapter. Harue the prostitute is admittedly more of a plot device than a character, but he allows me to develop three things: one, Sasuke's internal morality and pragmaticism fighting with his desire to not let down his friend and lose himself to his bloodline in his view; two, Sasuke's external character and reputation burgeoning within this new world for those who might want to track him down or find out more about him, and three, further cementing the shift in societal standards that I can explore more later on. Hopefully I accomplished these things fairly well in the chapter.
Information and Revelation: I didn't expect for this chapter to be nearly seven thousand words. I double checked to make sure everything was consistent, but still probably missed something as usual. Sasuke decided to reveal his power to the information broker on the assumption that it won't matter that much, as he's looking for a way home, in case that seemed out of character. I just didn't explain it. Show, don't tell and all. Plus I liked the ending line as it was. Sasuke doesn't really care about his reputation since he views this world as nothing more than an obstacle, not a world in and of itself. Nothing here truly matters to him beyond finding a way home. I also try to vary his speech patterns with the tone of the environment or situation, as I believe that would be natural, though his thoughts show his natural speech pattern. It's difficult to pull off, but I'm trying. Information will be fed to him bit by bit, and while I gave him an overview of the world and societal norms with pulling out Gatou's memories (which I don't want to just infodump, so I'm trying to include naturally through dialogue and such, pointing out specific sexes of background characters and plot devices, etc. It's hard, but I'm trying. As far as monetary concerns, Sasuke likely keeps most of his money on him given his sentencing before he got transported to this world. The money may run out, but if it does, he could likely reveal himself to Konoha and ally himself with them due to being an Uchiha. The history and mythology will be built upon later, it would be both boring and bad pacing to dump all the world changes at once, but I do have plans for how the world is different, aside from the whole genderbend plot. My biggest issue now is how to get Sasuke from one plot point to the next naturally, I'm still brainstorming the transition. It'll get there, but I'll have to work on it. My ideas have already changed from Dissimilar's post, some ideas adapted, some scrapped, and some saved for later. You'll have to find out which are which, of course.
First Contact: Finally uploading on a monthly schedule. Kind of. More flashback heavy, since the last chapter didn't have as many. The fight scene was really fun to fight. Usually written fight scenes are really boring, because a lot of people write them extremely long. In anime, that's fine, since there's a visual spectacle to it that you can simply watch and enjoy, but in written fight scenes, especially when the writing is slow and overly descriptive, it gets boring and often is skippable. So I used the Yin Release as a puzzle to solve, writing a series of short fights that are resolved, but then reset due to Yin Release, and Sasuke experiments with different ways to kill Black Zetsu to see if he can stop the technique from happening in the first place, finally taking a near-lethal injury to throw Zetsu off guard and win the fight (but fail his objective). His job will become a lot harder now that Akatsuki is a lot more aware of him, too. I'll be exploring some of the world differences next chapter, using more familiar faces. Hopefully. I don't have this fic planned out too far in advance, some of it I plan out, some of it just writes itself. I didn't plan for the flashbacks in chapter 2 to give Sasuke a real reason to be out of the village for so long, but they wrote themselves in, I thought it worked and then had to go back and change the prologue to keep things consistent. Either way, I know at least some of what I'm doing next chapter.
Unfamiliar Faces: The different spellings of Danzo and Danzou is intentional. I was scrolling through Japanese names and just couldn't find any that fit Danzo better than his own, so I just used the other (more correct) spelling of his name for his female one. I'd use the o with the line over it for the other one, since that's also correct, but I'm too lazy.
I'm worried about the pacing of my story. Is it too fast? I feel like I'm not including enough introspection, but I know I start skimming when it's too much, and Sasuke's goal-oriented, so I push things to keep happening, trying to balance the introspection and plot, but I'm worried I'm neglecting too much description. Ultimately, I'm still trying to make people feel something, to be invested, despite this entire story being unapologetic garbage, because if I can do it for this, then I can do it for some of my more sophisticated ideas, which will probably be a bit more introspection-heavy. I keep fights snappy and fast-paced and try to stretch out important places and such, and I keep each chapter at 4,000 words, since those are the amount of words in each chapter of a lot of the books I read, like the Dresden Files and Six of Crows, but I feel like I might be missing out on some internal character development by doing so. I know Sasuke's going to be developed more in the next chapter, and maybe some other Uchiha clan members, but this is my main concern with this fic. If need be, I'll try and slow it down a bit. If anyone reads these notes, this is the main question I want answered.
Opportunity: This was the first chapter I had to make serious revisions to. Pretty much all of my works are basically the rough drafts, because I just want to write fun stories and not have to worry too hard about every word choice and sentence structure (though I do run my chapters through spellcheck to make sure none of my grammar is incorrect), but the fight scene in this chapter was extremely barebones. I needed to restructure it entirely to give both the fight and the speech some authenticity. I'm not exactly happy with the suddenness of it, or the lack of buildup for what's meant to be an emotional, heart-wrenching, dramatic speech, but I didn't want to make the story arbitrarily funneled towards that point. Danzou underestimated Sasuke, he uses a technique that can't be reacted to by anyone but the Raikage and is known to almost nobody. Quick and simple, don't let your enemy get away.
Hopefully the introduction of Sai and Shin proves to be interesting. I plan to use them for some Sasuke character development (hopefully), as well as a way to tie down his loyalties to one place more effectively than methods like threats from the Kage. It's hard to corral a powerhouse like Sasuke, so making a character do what you want for the story is difficult if you don't give them a good reason to. Obviously threats don't work, and the threat of public exposure won't work in the current scenario, given that will hurt the villages more than Sasuke. So the best I could think of is someone that will bring out his protective, possessive side, while also having ties to Naruto so they can act as another morality chain. The pain in the ass is that I now have to develop these two, and developing children is hard enough, but nearly emotionless child soldiers into kids into adults is a serious undertaking if I want it done right.
Negotiations: I was planning to make this chapter longer, but I decided to cut it down so I didn't take even longer to publish it. Negotiation scenes are difficult to write well, because you can't simply follow where the plot needs to go. You need to know what each character wants, what they're willing to give, and how much they're willing to compromise. Not only that, but with intelligent interrogation scenes (i.e. two intelligent characters are negotiating), they won't say everything that they want. They'll push and prod at each other for weaknesses while trying to keep their own cards closer to the chest. It's like poker: you're only working with half the information. However, that presents writing problems as well. While giving out all the information is unrealistic and tells the readers that the author doesn't respect their intelligence, respecting their intelligence too much and keeping too much information withheld will only create a nonsensical chapter for everyone but the author. There has to be a balance of giving and withholding, and I'm hoping that ten to twenty percent that was kept from all of you comes across clearly enough if you read into it.
I'm thinking of starting to write the story from a few other characters' perspectives as well, mainly Minato, Mikoto, Sai and Shin. Do you guys think that would be enjoyable, or should it be purely from Sasuke's perspective?
Also, the name changes will be kept minimal, mainly only swapping purely male names and leaving the generally neutral ones alone, but I'm sure most of you have guessed that already.
Half-Truths: I'm back! This story isn't dead, even if it is on the backburner. I probably won't update it for a while again, since I have Another Heaven and another story that I plan to start writing now that I have 10 chapters in both of these, so for fans of this work, I'm sorry, but this is the work I'm least interested in writing. I won't completely abandon it, but it isn't going to be taking priority anytime soon.
The wording of this chapter is, as you may have guessed from the title, very exact and deliberate. Everything is written from a character's point of view, so don't expect the cold, hard truth from the narration. The next chapter will probably expand upon that from Sasuke's perspective, and more interactions with the Uchiha clan, and maybe some uninvited guests. Hopefully you guys will look forward to that, but again, it'll be a while before that comes out. Until then, though, it's been fun, and keep a lookout for my other stories coming out, since I'm enjoying writing them more than I'm enjoying writing this. Hopefully you'll appreciate them more as well.
Sacrifice: This is easily the fanfiction I've been most inspired to write, and I didn't want to delay it any longer. I plan to delve into a lot of the teased but unused Type-Moon lore in this fic and hopefully flesh out a lot of the greater Moonlit World and build upon the various characters. The main Prisma Illya plotline will not be the focus, nor will it appear until much farther down the line. I have big plans for this story, and hopefully you all will enjoy the first three arcs, since they'll be mostly original, taking ideas mainly from some cut content of Heaven's Feel and some scrapped ideas for Tsukihime 2 (and Tsukihime characters will be making an appearance, if a minor one). Prisma Illya may be a lighthearted magical girl story, but it's still set in the Moonlit World, and it is a very dark place. Shirou may be stronger, but without any real allies, it'll be tough for him to save the people he loves.
Ilya vs. Illya is deliberate, not a typo. Ilya denotes the Stay Night character, and Illya denotes the Kaleid Liner character. The Einzbern are destroyed entirely, other than Irisviel's family, and Rin hasn't heard of the Grail War, as in canon. She also does not recognize Shirou's magical awakening yet. Whether that changes...well, we'll see.
Burning Questions: I'm surprised I got this chapter out this fast. Usually I only get one chapter out a month, but I've been incredibly productive lately. We've finally hit the beginning of the first arc of this story, and I hope you enjoy it. Without allies, without servants, and without major experience with his magic, Shirou's gonna have a lot to deal with. I do know how the arc ends already, this is my most planned-out story, and I actually think the magical methodology is really interesting. If anyone can predict it, I'll be surprised. As you now might have guessed, the main Kaleid/Liner story won't be taking place for quite a while. We've got quite a bit of original plot to get through, and believe me, I'm bringing a lot more of Type-Moon's world than just the Fate series into this. Hardcore fans will rejoice (if I write it well). I'm incredibly excited for this story, it will probably be my favorite one to write, along with the best-written one, just because of how well in advance I planned out the plot. None of my other stories are planned to this extent, so they will end up taking longer to update than this since I have to figure out where the hell I'm taking them.
Shirou's personality is also incredibly difficult to write, since he's such a fake person. A machine desperately grasping for humanity, while rejecting the dreams of the human he admired most is a serious undertaking. Archer, on the other hand, is a lot easier to write, so Shirou will be borrowing Archer's mannerisms (both because they're technically the same origin, so Shirou has the potential to be Archer, and the suffusion of memories and traits from the arm transfer). I let him use some of Rin's tactics as well, given an amount of his personality is at least somewhat picked up and mimicked from those around him, but hopefully I can properly develop him into something more, as Fate/Stay Night did, though I'm nowhere near as good a writer as Nasu. Regardless, I plan to attempt to explore a lot more of Shirou's character through his developing experience, memories of Archer and expanding knowledge of the world. And he will be a very dangerous contender.
Past and Future: I'm trying to use this to flesh out Shirou's character a bit more. I understand that some of his previous actions seemed out of character for him, so I'm trying to further establish the reasons for why he seems that way, and some of the actions he's actually taking, rather than the ones he's perceived to be taking. However, Shirou is someone willing to let the entire world die for the chance to save the girl he loves in Heaven's Feel, as well as becoming a paranoid strategist approaching the level of Kiritsugu, so I believe the dealings with the yakuza are more understandable, given he has shown proof that he is willing to sacrifice others for something he wants or needs badly enough, and having Archer's memories, and subsequently his personality filtering through to Shirou's mind through his circuits will also have an impact on his moral standings in the face of efficiently completing his goals. However, he is not entirely Archer, nor is he Kiritsugu, which is why he wanted to try and hammer out a fair deal with Fujimura, even while using blackmail as leverage. Leverage that he didn't truly have or plan to use, in fact. Shirou differs from Kiritsugu in that his plans incorporate a far greater level of personal risk, and could backfire heavily if something goes wrong, something he still has trouble accounting for due to his lack of self-worth. Hopefully I've fleshed out these points in this chapter, even if some of it is still just implied. The chapters beyond will bring this element of risky strategy and more paranoid planning to the forefront, once he figures out how to tackle Zouken, and his interactions with some of the other characters will hopefully cement his guilt complex and fundamentally warped character.
Greetings: This was a rough chapter to edit. The tone felt like it swung back and forth, and I still don't feel like I nailed the bittersweet-to-tragic slide that I was aiming for, but without significant restructuring and significantly more time, I won't be able to make any major improvements, and I'd like to keep updating my fanfics on a somewhat steady schedule. This was definitely just a couple of long conversations, but I hope I really made some progress with the story with this. I plan for Shirou and Kirei to discuss plans and the Grail War, though I'm not sure if I want to have him brought on some vampire hunt. I might have some fleeing sealing designate hunted down, just to add a bit more action and help Shirou improve his abilities through combat, and maybe even have him train with Kirei, but it's always difficult trying to essentially fill time until a character has reached a point where they're strong enough to deal with the main obstacle. I always feel like I want to jump right to the next part, but then there's no build. I had the first couple chapters be a bit more fast-paced, since Shirou was trying to actively acclimate himself to the world, but his main goal isn't something that he can just go and complete like he's checking off a grocery list, so I need to add steps and include obstacles and character/relationship development to space out the time until he's ready. Hopefully I can make that build of tension and progression of power fairly believable. The other pacing issue the story has is how fast he gets in with the Yakuza, and I think that was a plot-demanded-it kind of situation, and I can't really fix that without going back and restructuring the fic from chapter 2, which I'm admittedly not that willing to do, so I can only do my best to salvage it on the back end, like I tried to do with chapter three, and I'll be adding a few more Yakuza scenes here and there to try and turn their relationship from a tentatively fearful one to a loyal one. I'm also not really sure what to do about Hortensia, but I'm sure I'll figure out how much of her I'll write eventually. I just don't really know what to do with her at the moment.
I'll think of something.
Distrust: Another slow chapter, since I felt I needed to slow the pace to get the extension of time necessary to develop Shirou's magic, and further establish character relationships. I would love to jump straight into arc two, which is where I think this story will really become interesting, but I have to get through arc one first, and I don't want to just rush the whole thing without developing anything meaningful in these first chapters. If I don't build and develop the Prillya characters, there's no reason to care about what happens to any of them later. Luckily, as you might have guessed, the action starts next chapter. We have the setup mostly complete, there are only a few more characters and relationships that need to be developed before I can start on the real action stuff, but this will be the first big hurdle for Shirou. I don't have a ton of info to give the readers without spoiling anything, but I'm excited to finally be able to write some more action. It's been too long since I've gotten to write a big fight scene.
Shirou might seem a bit more indecisive this chapter, and that was generally on purpose. He's made a choice to dedicate himself to one person, but he still tends to struggle with his nature, especially when others he cares about are involved. And any magical training he might be missing by spending time with his family and trying to put everything else out of his mind will be more than made up for in the next few chapters or so. I wanted to include a bit of that UBW-type struggle in his character, even if just a little, because Shirou's introspection in UBW is some of my favorite parts of Stay Night.
Missing: This was a rough chapter for me to write, and I'm still not entirely happy with it. I was hoping to get on with the action, but I felt I still needed some setup done, and I wasn't sure where to end it, or how much of a mystery to make it (I decided to just cut most of the mystery aspects, since it felt too meandering, and the mystery of who took Ayako wasn't the main purpose of the arc, and I don't want to just use it as padding without adding some character development. Rin's section needed to be heavily reworked, and feels a little cheap, but having Shirou be the one to hunt down Atrum all on his own felt too much like I was only giving Shirou screen time, and the mystery would have been unsatisfying. Hopefully the pacing doesn't feel too abrupt or unnatural. That's my main concern. The action will be in the next chapter. The main mysteries will be how the fuck they deal with Atrum, who has some serious firepower behind him, and I plan to really ramp up his power with curses. I figure if Gandr, a sickness curse, can be strengthened to become a bullet, then there's some nasty shit that curses can do, especially when they're boosted by mana crystals made via human sacrifice. I'm really excited to see what kind of spells I can come up with. Usually, power design and the technical aspects are my specialty, in my opinion. However, I might need to take a bit longer to properly write out the next couple chapters, so expect a small delay with the next two.
As a side note, Type Moon doesn't seem to say exactly where Fuyuki is placed, and various landmarks are incorporated from all across Japan, so I decided to set it in the Ooita province, since they have a river that runs out into the ocean, similar to the geography of Fuyuki. It's one of Japan's most southern islands. This isn't too important right now, and I can't really write it into a chapter naturally, so I'm stating it here. Maybe I'll be able to fit it in writing later on down the line.
Mission: This was a huge chapter, and the next one might be just as large. I'm not really sure yet. I knew that I wanted this chapter to really delve more into the action, but there was still a lot of preparation to be done, and I didn't want to just upload another chapter of purely preparation. I felt it would have dulled the pacing too far, so the next couple chapters will be some of the first big set pieces of the story. Hopefully this first big fight will be as entertaining for you to read as it will be for me to write. I had initially only planned to have this fight be something small, more like an assassination mission where Galliasta was arrogant and unprepared for the dynamic duo, but I kept getting more ideas and building on it and building on it, and suddenly I have a massive Legend of Zelda dungeon boss that I want to write out. The mechanics will be explained further in the next chapter, of course, but needless to say, they'll pose quite a problem for Shirou and Kirei.
Speaking of Kirei, how did you like his perspective? I tried to write him in a more significantly different style than Shirou to really show off his thought process and personality more, and it was a ton of fun to write. I don't plan to write too many of these separate perspective; the vast majority of this fic will be through Shirou's eyes, but there will be a few, mainly one each for other important characters so they can have some serious motive establishment. Sakura will obviously have one down the line, along with at least one or two other characters, but I won't spoil which ones. Regardless, Kirei was an incredibly fun character to write, and while I may not end up giving him another interlude (or I might, I don't know), I plan to keep him in the story through most of it. I really enjoy Shirou and Kirei working together, especially since they have such differing views on each other, so he won't be going anywhere for a while.
For those of you unaware who Noel is, she's a new character from the new Melty Blood and Tsukihime Remake games. She's really just here as a cameo, but she is here nonetheless, so hopefully my intentions are stated fairly clearly. This is set within the greater type moon universe, and I plan to utilize many aspects of the world, both what has been fleshed out and what has not. Mainly what has not been, though, since that was actually one of the biggest driving forces behind my writing of this fanfiction. There's so much stuff in Nasu's world that we won't ever see because the Fate spinoffs make far too much money, and I plan to try my hand at fleshing out some of the greater Type-Moon lore, just as I'm doing with Atrum here. However, none of that will come into play all that much until Act 2, so we've got a lot of ground to cover, and I hope to make all of it entertaining.
Monsoon: This is the longest chapter I've ever written. For anything. It took me a whole month to write this chapter, and two straight days to edit it. I fully expect there to be a couple of errors that I missed, but it's finally over with. This is the climax of the first act, and I wanted it to be grand, exploring Archer's arm, Shirou's strategies, some of the themes surrounding him and how Galliasta kind of parallels that, but I also didn't want him to hog the spotlight. Ayako got her moment of bravery, however brief, and Atrum showed himself to be a pretty legitimate threat himself, but I think I ended giving all the spotlight to Shirou in the end. I would have liked to have Kirei play an even larger role, but I felt like Atrum was a poor matchup for him, so he was more of a supporting role, I suppose. Oh, well.
I reworked this fight so many times, trying to figure out how everything would happen and who would play what role, even had to research the best non-ferrous metals on the Rockwell hardness scale to incorporate into the fight, etc. I think that that was honestly my favorite part to write. Kirei's always a joy to write, even if his interactions were more limited this chapter, I feel like they've had a larger effect on Shirou, especially since he's gotten a couple of innocents killed personally and will have to deal with that as soon as he gets some downtime. He'll probably have some nightmares about that for a while, and I plan for it to affect some of his day-to-day interactions as well. Shirou's running high on stress and adrenaline right now, so he doesn't have the time to really take in anything he did, but we'll get there. Don't worry.
I definitely had to force myself to write a good portion of this chapter, and I think that shows in the lower quality in the middle of the chapter, which is not up to my standards, but that's why I'm writing: so I can keep improving. I may not be entirely proud of this chapter, but I know where I failed, and I can use that to try to improve my writing quality. The next chapter shouldn't take a whole month to write, but it will be just as entertaining, and possibly more important than this one, so look forward to it.
Sixth Stanza: As I said, I'll probably be updating my stories on a slower schedule. It's becoming more and more difficult to keep up the pace I once had, so you'll start seeing these chapters once every 15-20 days or so, rather than every 10 or 11 days.
Yes, everything in the previous two chapters was essentially buildup to the new line for Unlimited Blade Works, and it was supposed to happen last chapter, but it became way too long, so I had to split it into another chapter. I know this chapter was overall pretty uneventful, but I think the pacing needed a break from nearly 12k words of action, and I hope the character development I added (then took away cruelly) really hit home. I had to rewrite the dialogue and restructure it a couple times before it was at a point I was even remotely happy with. It was definitely some of the most difficult dialogue I've written, so hopefully it's well-received. Shirou's not an easy character to write, there's so many nuances to his character that differ between the different routes that I'm probably not going to write any of my UBW Shirou ideas until I'm finished writing this story just so I don't start accidentally mixing up characters.
Family Matters: Finally, we reach the end of arc 1, part 1. It's been a long time, and I don't have too much to say here. I'm thankful for all the feedback I've received up to this point, even if none of the really exciting stuff has happened, and I hope you all enjoy part 2 of arc 1, which will only further ramp up the intensity of the story. I might end up making some decisions for a couple characters that people will disagree with, similar to Ayako, but I hope that my story will be written well enough that people will still enjoy it regardless.
Reconciliations: It's been a couple months, and I've been working on some of my other stories, but I'm back, and starting part 2 of arc 1. This chapter serves as somewhat of a soft reset point, a return to normalcy, where Shirou is finally accepting and beginning his new life, knowing now that Sella understands him and has his back. There will be a few of those points, each with more and more changing as the story progresses. I have 3 arcs planned out for this story thus far, so it'll definitely be ongoing for a long time.
I took extra care to humanize Sella a bit more, this chapter. I was planning on doing so anyway, since I was trying to show more of her professional side last chapter, and hide some of her personal feelings, but people said I made her seem too inhuman, so I put some really heavy emphasis on her character development this chapter. She won't become a super prominent main character, and the next chapter or two won't be focusing on her, but she'll see a bit more prominence than before, now that Shirou will be filling her in on his plans and such. However, the next chapter or two won't be showing much of her, considering I just introduced the newest plot twist: Tohsaka Tokiomi hasn't actually been killed in this world. I know Prisma Illya shows Rin coming back from the Clock Tower, but the show doesn't answer whether her father is alive, or who the Second Owner of Fuyuki is, so I figured introducing him would be a great way to tie up those loose ends and introduce a new plot element at the same time. The next chapter will prominently feature him, obviously. I know some people really dislike him, as with Shinji, but I dislike character bashing in general, so I plan to do my best to improve both of their characters without making them out of character, if that makes sense. Tohsaka is arrogant, but has no way of knowing that Zouken is a monster, and truly believes he's doing the best for his child. Shinji isn't portrayed amazingly in the VN due to time constraints, or the anime, though Heaven's Feel gives him a bit of subtle character development, and I want to flesh out their characters more properly, make them more well-rounded than the fan perception of them, but without making them too out of character, at least for the situations that they're in. Hopefully I'm able to accomplish that, and people don't just dismiss my story decisions outright, even though I know I'm going to delve into a bit of controversial territory in the later chapters. Nonetheless, I hope you all keep enjoying the story.
Tokiomi: I'm not gonna lie, this chapter kicked my ass. I was trying to have it out about five days ago, but I obviously failed there. This is one of the single longest scenes I've ever written without scene breaks. I hope it helps the overall pace of the story, given that the last chapter was very scene break-heavy, and the next one might be as well. I hope I characterized Tokiomi as well as I envisioned him: someone arrogant and self-assured, but whose heart is ultimately in the write place. He hates being wrong, and he hates admitting he's wrong even more, but will do everything he can to make it right. While I do believe him to be a competent magus, he honestly seemed to really care about his kids in Zero, and I think that like Rin, he's not quite entirely cold-hearted, no matter how much he tries to pretend he is. I don't know if one chapter was enough to fully develop his character, but I'm hoping I was able to deliver the emotion he's supposed to feel this chapter. Rin will likely be a similarly difficult character to write. Character studies aren't necessarily my specialty, in my opinion, and nearly all of the characters in Fate are incredibly complex and equally compelling, with few exceptions, so this is definitely a serious undertaking for me, but I'm doing my best, and I hope it's turning out well. Zouken is my main worry at this point. He's incredibly menacing in canon, and thus far I've been relying on that to build tension, but he will be incredibly difficult to really write, in my opinion. Villains are almost unequivocally the most difficult characters to write, and Fate is no different. Kirei was difficult enough, but Zouken is gonna be a whole different level. Having him actually show up and interact with the other characters is going to be a challenge, and I thought of just never introducing him until the squad rolls up to his house and kills him, but that would be uncompelling, in my opinion. For all the buildup I've giving him, I really need to make him a challenge. I've set the tension incredibly high, made him out to be the real big bad, but that means I have to deliver on that twice as much when he actually shows up, otherwise that will make him a huge disappointment in my eyes. I can only hope he'll be as menacing when I actually write him as he is in canon.
Drawstring: This chapter kicked my ass. I took twice as long to write it, twice as long to edit it and I'm still not satisfied with it. Part of that is because I've been sick all last week, and I still am, but I still feel pretty iffy about this chapter. I wanted to do a more introspective chapter, re-establishing Shirou's link to kyudo in the way I don't ever remember the VN explicitly doing, revisiting Ayako to show the impacts that her storyline made and introducing Luvia and her Butler into the story (and it's pretty obvious who the butler's an expy of, assuming you play FGO. I barely even changed the name), but nonetheless, this chapter feels more like padding than anything. I just felt that bringing the next story beats in the upcoming would be awkward and rushed without this chapter, but in editing, I did significantly trim down a lot of the prose that I felt was awkward or too flowery (but in a very poor way). Morrison is a fun character to write, as is Luvia in her younger years, still all adventure and rough edges, with only the faintest surface polish of noble refinement, somewhat opposite to Tohsaka, in my opinion. Getting them together will be fun, once I actually can get around to it.
Morrison will play a big role next chapter, but it will be a planning chapter again. It should also be the final planning chapter for a while, because things should be kicking into high gear soon. I get bored of writing the planning chapters as well, but this has always been a story about plans, and defeating foes greater than oneself by being smarter than them. Hopefully that comes through well, and hopefully all the characters in this chapter still feel human and believable. If not, I can only say that the next chapter will be better. However, it might be another month or so, because work has been getting busier lately. Thanks for reading.
Unfriendly Allies: Sorry this took so long. I had to take a month-long work trip that seriously cut into my writing time, so there was a lot longer delay in getting out a new chapter than usual. I'll have another, shorter work trip coming up in a week or two, so after that, my writing schedule should resume as normal.
This chapter was one of my favorite and least favorite chapters I've written thus far. Morrison's super fun to write, I love writing enigmatic, untrustworthy characters, and having a Moriarty expy really spices up the story, I think. Plus, Auguste did basically nothing in Prisma lllya, and there was no real explanation for his existence that I saw, so I decided that Kiritsugu needed a new foil, since Kirei is more Shirou's foil than Kiritsugu's in this story. I'm glad I got to fit in another fight, even if this one was shorter and not nearly as grand and complicated as the last one, but writing fight scenes is really fun. Things are progressing faster and faster, and things might actually be coming to a head fairly soon. Y'know, unless I decide to completely derail everything in the next couple of chapters or so. But I'd never do that :)
An edit: some comments have pointed out that some of the things I've added were not canon, as I remember, but in fact strictly fanon. I was hoping not to include any fanon that I did not deliberately wish to add, so I have edited it out. My apologies.
Red Strings Buried
Stray thread: Happy Valentine's Day!
Well, it's a few minutes past Valentine's, because I can't edit fast enough, but I tried.
Lying Buried: I was planning on hiding Izuku's past a bit longer, originally, even keeping one of the main tags out of the story description, but I realized it was probably better for visibility if I added it, but that meant I had to bump up the Izuku plotline earlier into the story. Was planning on the story to be mainly Katsumi's perspective for a good few chapters before I ever swapped to Izuku, or if I did, I would barely even allude to Izuku's past, but oh well. This just means I can introduce more cool plot elements, and I'll just have to mete out what to reveal early and what to keep in reserve. I was going to have this chapter and the next few be mostly romcom situations with the 1A classmates trying to figure out what was going on with Katsumi while the main plot happened in the background, but it seems I'm going to have less of that in the upcoming chapters. Perhaps some will remain, but it will have to be different enough that I'm gonna have to remap at least some of the plotline.
I have a few future subplot ideas with the quirk analysis stuff that I could go down, but I'm not entirely certain I want to tread that path again, since so many other fics have already done the "Izuku is Nezu's apprentice in quirk analysis" plotline, and I don't know how interesting I can make it by re-treading old ground. Perhaps I can try to put a spin on it, but I'm not sure how much I can really do with it in the first place. I might do something kind of similar, but ultimately different, but I'll have to see. I'm sure there's something I can make out of the subplot ideas bouncing around in my head.
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