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Joined 12-05-15, id: 7343118, Profile Updated: 05-07-17
Author has written 1 story for Naruto, and Fairy Tail.

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Country:U.S

Current Stories: Ancestral Power

Motivation: I mainly started because I didn't really like any of the current stories out right now, so I decided to do my own. The Red Devil by Snapers and Into the Realm of Magic by lllllllllll were my top two favorite stories.

I don't own anything, the anime, all arts, or characters.

CURRENT CHAPTER 4 PROGRESS COMPLETION RATE: ROUGHLY 40%, IT'S PROBABLY GOING TO BE LONG

New Stories: I won't be starting any new stories until I've finished my current one. I've read a good amount of awesome stories, but they've never been finished. I'm not going to do that to my readers, so I'll make sure to finish my story even if I one day end up with writer's block.


WHY I HAVE DECIDED TO REWRITE ANCESTRAL POWER

Now I'm going to be clear cut and to the point when I say I am not satisfied with how I wrote this story.

Power Balancing

When I first started writing the story, I had started around the time Naruto finally started his training with Killer Bee meaning that his strongest form AT THE TIME was the Kyuubi Chakra Cloak which was why I thought him having the Wood Release (For those who read this when it first came out), the Sharingan, and the Hiraishin wouldn't be such a big deal in addition to what he currently had.

Then came all the Super Sage Mode, OP Hax Sharingan abilities, and godlike Meteor stuff which is where a problem arose. I was unofficially bound to those new techniques meaning that I HAD to add them in too making him a god that didn't even need to try which is why I've always tried to keep Naruto balanced.

Sure there have been complaints here and there about it, but that isn't why I've decided to start this rewrite. The real reason is that the decisions I made early on weren't fully thought through and have resulted in issues with what I can and can't do right now for later chapters. One of the decisions was writing out Naruto as a happy, naive, and stupid guy early on which resulted in a complete contrast with his current self around chapters 20-30.

Another reason was the fact that the story was so imbalanced that people had a hard time remembering what actually happened. I would take a two to three week break and some reviews would sometimes say "Oh right that happened. I totally forgot and had to read back."

The next reason is Natsu, Gray, Mirajane, and Erza's training. Now out of the four, Natsu was the most balanced yet even then it was still pretty broken. What I had in mind for Gray was something like Aokiji from One Piece, but that was a really fucking stupid idea considering theoretically there's nothing to challenge him so I have something more suitable in mind that I would like to rewrite. For Mirajane I originally thought the concept of her being a jinchuriki would be pretty cool, but that was also a bad idea since there was absolutely no way to make it work which is why I ended up doing a different, more sentient demon soul living in her but even then that was a bad idea so I decided to put in my original original idea that I had before the jinchuriki one. Now Erza was the MOST troublesome out of the 4. I originally thought Mirajane being a jinchuriki while Erza having a Sage Mode variant would be a nice contrast, but that was ALSO a stupid idea since there was no non-bullshit way to write it out. Not to mention there's really no point making her this op early on in the story. I tried to go for an armanent haki idea instead but that was also a wreck so I decided to scrap that and settle for some more old fashioned.

Inconsistent Character Actions

The next thing is that the changes in early chapters clash with later ones. People have noticed that some things I changed later changed because of something I edited early on creating confusion which is why I've decided to just redo it all and set it straight.

Early Rewrites

Because I decided on small rewrites early on, that created certain changes that a lot of people weren't aware of leading to confusion on what really did and didn't happen.

Plot Holes

You know it, I know it, we all know the older version was literallly riddled with plot holes. For example let's start with the elephant in the room. Why didn't Naruto just end his opponents with one move? Or maybe the "The relationship between Naruto and Mirajane was built way too fast. There's no way that they grew that close in a single year written as an exposition."

Or another thing that not many of you, if any, actually noticed. Four words so stick with me here.

Genjutsu. Doesn't. Fucking. Work.

I am being completely serious here since apparently it doesn't cast illusions, it only manipulates the chakra in the nervous systems of enemies, but guess what?

WIZARDS DON'T HAVE CHAKRA

Genjutsu is essentially useless and unneeded but I still decided to put that in but not many people actually noticed.

Yeah, I am FULLY aware that those were issues but there was nothing I could have done unless I decided to un-God status Naruto and rewrite the early chapters which-- can you guess? I'm already doing now.

I haven't updated in roughly two months and that is seriously annoying me since I've been balancing out writing the new chapter, rewriting the old, and juggling real life. I've decided that it would probably be better if I were to simply just start from the beginning and steadily rewrite current chapters before re-releasing them until I get back to my current stage. Now do NOT worry because although I deleted the chapters I did not delete the actual written content so it shouldn't take me too long to rewrite them based on what's already there before I put it back out.

I took them out because I didn't want new readers to read before I was done rewriting which would only end up confusing them.


The Reasons why I don't believe in Multi-Pairings a.k.a Harems

I'm just going to be clear cut and straight to the point when I say this and I am not intending to offend anyone, so if you do get offended then I'm sorry. I don't hate harems, but I don't necessarily "like" them either. I find them highly unrealistic and their presence in stories tend to interfere with the actual story and plot itself.

There is a clear difference between the concept of "love" and the concept of "lust" and harems fall under the latter category.

If we're talking storywise, harems are just unnecessary since a writer will HAVE to build upon the multiple relationships the main character has which will for the most part ruin the immersion into the actual written plot since the main character will have to work to "assist" his pairing members in their struggles which only diverts away from the story and stagnates progression. If the writer doesn't do so, then I don't need to speak further considering everyone knows of the "classic" harem crossover genre that starts off with a overpowered main character that has women swooning at his feet with multiple females developing attractions to him within the first few minutes of meeting him. The story will continue for about ten chapters at max before its "SURPRISINGLY" discontinued and abandoned. The reason that most people just can't seem to grasp is because the writer spent too much time worrying about pairings that he didn't think the actual fucking plot through. Putting together a well-thought out pairing isn't as easy as it seems and putting together a harem where the main character is romantically involved with all his interests is just plain stupid. In summary, it's practically pointless to read a harem story on this site since for the majority of the time it'll only end up abandoned since the writer will have no idea where to go next.

Now let's talk character wise. Naruto Uzumaki is nearly everyone's favorite crossover main character on this site, and when people read stories about their favorite main character (I'm speaking for myself here and a few others) I actually WANT him to retain at least some of his personal traits. I know it, we all know it, and there's no point in denying that canon Naruto would NEVER work out as a polygamist.

For example, all those stories that have Naruto born under different circumstances while simultaneously developing a totally DIFFERENT personality just to justify him owning a harem. Yeah, that isn't Naruto anymore, it's just an unoriginal character with his name.

Everyone likes their doses of realism, being either small or large, in their stories and I'm giving my honest, straight opinion here. You can "lust" for multiple women, but you can really only "love" one. In multi-pairing stories, there's going to be "head of the harem" girl that you prefer above all the rest and in reality the basic purpose of the extra women is to make up for what the main interest lacks. What makes a romance story fun to read is seeing the main character and his interest accept each other's faults, not using other extras and their specialties to cover those faults up.

This basically summarizes my reasons as to why I will NOT write a multi-pairing/harem story. Pretty much ever.


Fan Art

Over the past year that I've written Ancestral Power I've never really had anyone submit any art until this day and I wanted to give a huge thank you to the artist Amenoosa whose drawn amazing works on DeviantArt including the story's new cover and the one who made it possible JuPMod who commissioned the art. They both have awesome stuff on their profiles so go check them out.

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negliect fic by TrollerBear reviews
The kyuubi was sealed into Naruto's sisters: Naruto with a 'k' and Naruto's other sister. Because of this, his parents did not want him; he was powerless. He will show them! "I am Naruto! I am not worthless!" Naruto/harem OP!Naruto Will!get!beat!up!sometimes Cowritten with EndoplasmicPanda, Statchar, ConeCone, and Simplebot.
Crossover - Naruto & High School DxD/ハイスクールD×D - Rated: M - English - Horror/Parody - Chapters: 2 - Words: 5,012 - Reviews: 67 - Favs: 33 - Follows: 31 - Updated: 12/11 - Published: 11/24
Nisegami by Kishoto reviews
An impulsive decision sets Sōma, Erina and all of Tōtsuki on a remarkably different path.
Shokugeki no Soma/食戟のソーマ - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 30 - Words: 285,150 - Reviews: 526 - Favs: 472 - Follows: 529 - Updated: 12/9 - Published: 2/21/2016 - Soma Y., Erina N., Alice N., Azami N.
Misunderstanding by Laury Rose reviews
Erina is heard by a journalist when she is declaring her love for Sōma. But was she really? It seems nobody cares about what she says on that matter... Welcome to Erina's personal hell. *Chapter 27 completed*
Shokugeki no Soma/食戟のソーマ - Rated: T - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 27 - Words: 141,492 - Reviews: 867 - Favs: 802 - Follows: 1,015 - Updated: 11/30 - Published: 1/18/2016 - [Soma Y., Erina N.] Alice N., Hisako A.
Naberius Heir by Liam G reviews
Rias Gremory is asked by her brother to care for a human suffering from memory loss. The moment she mets Ichigo Shiba, she knows her life might get interesting in the future with her new roommate. AU. Starts while in their second year at Kuoh Academy.
Crossover - Bleach & High School DxD/ハイスクールD×D - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 23 - Words: 510,738 - Reviews: 755 - Favs: 1,778 - Follows: 1,809 - Updated: 11/27 - Published: 1/14/2014 - [Ichigo K., Rias G.]
Nouvelle by Zancrow reviews
{Soma / Erina} After Akira Hayama makes a serious attempt at dethroning Erina Nakiri from her seat in the Elite Ten; Tootsuki heiress is forced to accept the help of none other than Soma Yukihira. [Slow-Burn Romance] [ft. Ryou/Alice, Akira/Megumi, Eishi/Rindou, Shinomiya/Hinako, Isshiki/Nene, Takumi/Hisako, etc.] - ((19: Battle Of The Five))
Shokugeki no Soma/食戟のソーマ - Rated: T - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 19 - Words: 186,504 - Reviews: 941 - Favs: 1,086 - Follows: 1,325 - Updated: 11/24 - Published: 8/3/2014 - [Soma Y., Erina N.] [Eishi Tsukasa, Rindou K.]
Minipa's Trope Discussions and How to Not Suck Shit at Writing by Minipa reviews
In this instructional story, virulent critique will be done on all sorts of Fanfiction tropes, cliches, and other pet peeves. Examples will be given where names of stories and the author responsible will be mentioned. Join me in this quest to find out just why and how stories such as: harem, god-Like, bash, and grammatically horrible stories plague the most favourited.
Crossover - Naruto & Fairy Tail - Rated: T - English - Humor - Chapters: 6 - Words: 42,981 - Reviews: 44 - Favs: 29 - Follows: 30 - Updated: 11/9 - Published: 11/4
Guardian of the Dead by Vertius reviews
When Ichigo starts having strange dreams after the Winter War he visits Urahara in hope of getting some insight into these strange nightly visions. Instead he's told that everything he once believed to be myth is actually real and this world is much bigger than he could have ever imagined.
Crossover - Bleach & High School DxD/ハイスクールD×D - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Supernatural - Chapters: 9 - Words: 107,358 - Reviews: 454 - Favs: 1,079 - Follows: 1,244 - Updated: 11/1 - Published: 1/14
The Legacy of the Most Unpredictable Ninja by RekkingPride reviews
After checking up on a strange rift in space and time, Naruto ended up in a foreign land where new allies and enemies await. However, his wish to bring peace to his home still resonated...so he will do everything he can to return home, no matter what! 3 Crossovers mixed right, with a 4th on the way. A new narrative with believable characters! Strong!Naruto and mostly in-character!
Crossover - Naruto & High School DxD/ハイスクールD×D - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 44 - Words: 622,022 - Reviews: 2934 - Favs: 3,614 - Follows: 3,801 - Updated: 10/20 - Published: 8/7/2015 - Naruto U.
Better Left Unsaid by Kenchi618 reviews
Mizuki never got to shoot his mouth off at Naruto the night he took the Scroll of Seals. Other than skipping a half-manic monologue from him what exactly did this change for everyone's favorite blonde ninja? Who knows? Rated M for language/later events.
Naruto - Rated: M - English - Chapters: 75 - Words: 976,635 - Reviews: 8732 - Favs: 10,949 - Follows: 10,183 - Updated: 10/7 - Published: 12/14/2010 - [Naruto U., Ino Y.] Team Ten
A New World, The Story Of A Lost Shinobi by Lanky Nathan reviews
A different custom. A different language. A different time. A different dimension. Damnit Kakashi, where the hell did your Kamui send me?
Crossover - Naruto & Fairy Tail - Rated: T - English - Adventure - Chapters: 38 - Words: 358,414 - Reviews: 4583 - Favs: 5,528 - Follows: 5,329 - Updated: 10/5 - Published: 3/11/2012 - Naruto U.
Devil Ninja by The Engulfing Silence reviews
Thrown into a new world, Naruto Uzumaki does what he does best: cause as much chaos as possible while climbing to the top. Hokage may be out of his reach, but that doesn't mean he can't set a new goal for his life.
Crossover - Naruto & High School DxD/ハイスクールD×D - Rated: M - English - Romance/Adventure - Chapters: 32 - Words: 430,743 - Reviews: 4666 - Favs: 7,179 - Follows: 7,480 - Updated: 6/10 - Published: 10/18/2013 - Naruto U., Rias G., T. Koneko
Do Me A Wrong by ChaosEmperorNex reviews
After sacrificing it all and leaving himself a shell of what he used to be, living out a life as a meager human presses down on Ichigo more than the countless battles he's been through. So what is he to do when the opportunity to get it all back and then some comes? Take it or walk away? There's only one catch though...damning his soul.
Crossover - Bleach & High School DxD/ハイスクールD×D - Rated: M - English - Supernatural - Chapters: 18 - Words: 174,554 - Reviews: 2577 - Favs: 4,850 - Follows: 5,097 - Updated: 6/7 - Published: 8/24/2015 - Ichigo K., Yasaka
Reborn as Issei by lfonzo reviews
Despite having regrets, as Jiraiya sunk into the watery abyss he was content to go the Pure Land and leave the mission of peace in the hands of Uzumaki Naruto. However, fate was not so kind to the Super Pervert as he woke up as Hyoudou Issei; the new addition to Rias Gremory's peerage.
Crossover - Naruto & High School DxD/ハイスクールD×D - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 12 - Words: 93,778 - Reviews: 887 - Favs: 2,295 - Follows: 2,548 - Updated: 8/25/2016 - Published: 1/28/2016 - Jiraiya, Rias G., H. Akeno, T. Koneko
End Game Version R by Kur0Kishi reviews
There were very few things that could rile a 25 year old Naruto Uzumaki up. He was perfectly content to sit in his home, work his normal job, study at a normal school, and in his free time, tinker (read: upgrade in a potentially life endangering manner) with whatever happened to catch his interest. This obviously did not include Devils, or Angels, or Fallen Angels.
Crossover - Naruto & High School DxD/ハイスクールD×D - Rated: M - English - Romance/Adventure - Chapters: 12 - Words: 237,320 - Reviews: 4085 - Favs: 6,439 - Follows: 6,420 - Updated: 7/10/2016 - Published: 6/10/2013 - Naruto U., Serafall L.
Prophecy Rebirth by Kyoka Suigetsu Totsuka reviews
Erza Scarlet fatefully came across an unusual phenomenon during one of her missions, and unknown to her, she found something or someone that was suppose to have been gone from the world five millenia ago. -Naruto x Erza-
Crossover - Naruto & Fairy Tail - Rated: M - English - Romance/Adventure - Chapters: 18 - Words: 97,624 - Reviews: 2037 - Favs: 3,636 - Follows: 3,548 - Updated: 9/1/2013 - Published: 6/6/2013 - Naruto U., Erza S.
Ancestral Power: A Tale of a New Storm reviews
With the war won at a cost, Naruto is given a second chance to live the life that had been taken from him due to the mistakes of his predecessors. Blessed with the powers of the Sage, gifted with the abilities of his parents, and joined by his most trusted partner, Naruto will enter the land of Fiore with the intent to find a new purpose.
Crossover - Naruto & Fairy Tail - Rated: M - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 6 - Words: 72,487 - Reviews: 2058 - Favs: 4,121 - Follows: 4,593 - Updated: 12/9 - Published: 12/5/2015 - [Naruto U., Mirajane S.]