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Author has written 5 stories for D N Angel, Inuyasha, and Fullmetal Alchemist.
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I've been reading fanfics on this site for a while now. There are really a lot of great stories and great authors who have a really nice writing style. I've decided to try my hand with writing fanfiction. I'm a wannabe writer and I figured this would be great practice for me. Let me know what you like and what you don't like. Suggestions to improve my writing style are greatly appreciated! :)
Some background info on my story "Sesshomaru and the Demon Slayer":
The character Timmain is a composite of several characters that those who have read the story were sure to recognize if you are familiar with them. First is Xena: The Warrior Princess, I wanted Timmain to be tall and powerful just like Xena. Next is Buffy the Vampire Slayer, it wasn't always referred to but Buffy could heal quickly and she also slayed demons. Timmain is named after a character from the Elfquest comic series, which is excellent I might add. Now Xena and Buffy do talk a bit while they're fighting and many other characters do to. But when I wrote Timmain's dialoge during her battle scenes I was actually channeling Spiderman from the comics (unfortunately it's not so obvious in the movies but Spidey is really chatty in the comics). It may not be in the same sense of humor as Spidey but he was my main inspiration.
Many of the fight scenes were inspired from a lot of books I've read that included a lot of action and some sword play. These books are the Sharpe series by Bernard Cornwell, the Horatio Hornblower series by C.S. Forrester (as well as the A&E movies) and Master and Commander by Patrick O'Brian (there's actually a whole series of books that the movie Master and Commander is based on). Some other books that have inspired me have been several Star Wars EU, Battlefield Earth and The Three Musketeers. I highly recommend these books if you're looking for some examples how to write battle and fight scenes. They helped me a lot though I'm sure I still need more practice.
I also included an ode to Kill Bill in the fight between Timmain and Gulden where he slashes at her back just like Uma Thurman was struck by Lucy Liu in their fight scene in Volume 1.
I actually did some research too into the time period when this story took place. I had to find out when the feudal era took place in order to correctly name Scotland. Another detail that I also had to look up was the fact that rifles were used in an episode of Inuyasha. I think it was in Episode 135 or 136. So I had to look up when the earliest known guns were made. I may have been a little picky about some of these details for a fanfic but if I want to be a writer I need to start getting used to doing some research.
And lastly the name "Maraigh" is actually Gaelic for slayer. At least that's what the dictionary online said where I looked it up.
So basically this story was a mixture of my many interests in TV, film and books all rolled into a Inuyasha story.
A little note on "Loves Twisted Turns":
What's funny about this story, and some of my readers may have noticed this based on the title and summary, is that it started out as a simple romance where Aomi was going to have to choose between Dark and Eden. But around the fourth chapter I was hit with inspiration and since I hadn't written that much I was able to incorporate all these ideas I had. This story was fun to write too. Especially when I got hit with ideas I was itching to write it all down. I'm actually glad I was hit with inspiration because I think it made the story more interesting and more along the lines of a real DNAngel plot line. I'm a little disappointed in myself for not finding a place for To-To. I really like her. Anyways, when this story started to take a different turn than how it was originally meant, I wondered about changing the title and the summary but I thought, no, if you read them carefully they give off a bit of what the story is about without revealing everything. And in a way it does fit with the way the story turned out.
A note on "Elysia and the General":
I had about two different stories kicking around in my head for Fullmetal Alchemist but they just didn't work out to much. When I gave up on those ideas I came up with the story of Elysia and the General thinking how interesting it would be to write a story of an older Edward developing feelings for Elysia, especially after re-reading the earlier manga chapters. This story started out as a simple love story like DNAngel but of course I've discovered I like to write action and since I've read a lot of books regarding military action I was struck with another idea to incorporate into this story.
Should have included Gracia's concern regarding Elysia and Edward getting married so quickly. Reader "MithLuin" pointed it out and I think she's right. I should have wrote more about Gracia's concerns about whether Edward could settle down. I tried to show throughout the story how hardheaded and impatient both Elysia and Edward are, and that they would have gotten married anyways, but more could have been said on behalf of Gracia's part.
Edward swore up and down that the butler was an alchemist. But after trying several times to catch the old man using alchemy or trapping him with false alchemy lore, the man feigned ignorance and all of Edward's attempts failed. (I loved this idea but just couldn't think of a way to include it. There's a reference how Edward buried his medals using alchemy and the butler still found them, that's why Edward thinks the butler knows alchemy because that would be the only way to retrieve the medals)
Where other characters are and their new titles:
The Generals in each of the 4 headquarters:
North -> General Olivier Armstrong
East -> General Maria Ross (Denny Brosh serves under Maria Ross' command in the East)
West -> General Heymans Breda
South -> ? (Okay, I admit I had Miles here but I just wrote him into The Black Prince as still being in the North so have to think of someone else here. Geez, I can't remember everything I wrote! ;))
Vato Falman is Chief of Intelligence
Edward pretty much oversees activities within the other 4 headquarters, hence the inspections. Mustang is slowly working with reestablishing the government so the military is not completely in control of Amestris. But is has to be worked out carefully because if anyone read the manga when Edward visits Riza and she tells him about the Ishbal war, during that conversation she says that if the government was in complete control, then those who fought in the Ishbal war, could be considered criminals. As Riza said (taken from this translation -> http://www.onemanga.com/Full_Metal_Alchemist/62/04/):
"A hero in violent times will become only a mass murderer when placed in a peaceful world."
The story of Havoc and his recovery: Included in the prequel! Other than that he has remained on Edward's staff refusing any other promotions, feeling he is not the General type and likes to keep an eye out for Edward. I wanted Havoc to be like an older brother to Edward, as well as his closest friend yet they know when to maintain their professionalism. Havoc is extremely loyal to Edward and would never question Edward's authority or decisions in front of anyone but is not afraid to do so when nobody is around and they know when they can drop military protocol and just relax around each other. Since Havoc is almost like an older brother, he also passed on some of his bad traits to Edward, almost like an older, reckless brother would do I would think. It was inevitable since Havoc has been under Edward's command since he was seventeen, a time when he was very impressionable. This will also be expanded upon during the prequel.
Elysia didn't know it was Edward who had attached Al's soul to the armor. She figured it was just a result of their failed human transmutation, not a deliberate act by anyone. This is one of the things Edward eventually tells her and I wanted to include in the story but couldn't really make it fit.
How Alphonse met Gloria: Gloria was also from Risembool but was such a shy child that she never talked to the Elric brothers or Winry in school. When Al had his body restored and Ed left to the North to defend Amestris from the Drachma invasion, Al eventually went back to Risembool, after a stop to see Izumi, and stayed with Pinako till her death. Winry had stayed in Risembool too for a time then returned to Rush Valley. While in Risembool, Al met Gloria and fell in love.
Edward's uneasiness during the entire time while he was away in Xing was of course caused by love, which Al pointed out, saying he was love sick. He was scared that he wouldn't see Elysia again, whether it was from being killed if the situation was a lot worse than expected or if Elysia ended up falling for Jol Haren. He also doesn't eat or sleep very much during that time so when he returns to Central he's pale and thin. The butler and Al noticed right away. Havoc noticed too but there wasn't much he could do knowing Edward would never listen to him.
The Xing Emperor: Of course Lin Fao would become the Emperor of Xing. Lin ended up rejecting the homunculus Greed but only after he had used the powers that it contained to mount a succession war with the backing of Amestris. Having won the title of Emperor, Xing and Amestris became close allies. Communications broke down between Amestris and Xing because the Amestrian ambassador was being bribed to overlook the situation in Chenxing. He was later replaced and put on trial when Mustang found out. Other officials in Lin's court were also being bribed to overlook Chenxing and to keep the Emperor from knowing all the details. They were beheaded. Rather violent but I like the idea of Lin not taking any crap from anyone, especially after the unnecessary problems it caused. Fu has passed away but at one time was the commanding officer of Fao, who was the man in Chenxing that helped the Ishbalans escape. Ran Fan is still Lin's loyal guard with an automail left arm now made by Winry (Dominic has since passed away). Winry makes special trips to Xing for maintenance.
When Edward's regiment set out for Chenxing, they left from East city and went Southeast into Xing, avoiding the desert as much as possible, so no desert references, just to a dry flat plain to indicate the edge of a desert. Chenxing is located to the Southwest of Xing.
Gloria was pregnant in the story and ended up having twins. Al and Gloria named them Sean and Samuel.
Risembool is incorrectly spelled in the story because when I looked it up on Wikipedia that's what I found. Then rewatching the anime I found it should be Resembool. One day I'll go through and correct the spelling
Lots lots lots lots and lots has been taken from the manga. If any readers out there are only familiar with the anime check out the manga! I'm a Fullmetal Alchemist manga fanatic! There's a link above where you can read all the chapters.
Okay, did anyone else notice that Havoc was beat up in Chapter 12 but in Chapter 13 he seems okay. In my timeline there were only a couple of days that passed. Continuity problem there. I forgot about his condition but he is a soldier and must do his duty despite the pain right?!
Lots of notes for The Drachman War!
Story background/writing process:
Where the Drachman War came from: When I wrote Elysia and the General, I thought it was a great idea because I had not seen it done before and I hadn't read a fanfic that dealt with an older Edward. When I started the story I knew I had to have more confict. There was enough with the age difference between Edward and Elysia and his feelings of guilt having some part in Hughes death but that wasn't enough for me. If Edward didn't stay in the military then I don't think there would have been much contact between Elysia and Edward for them to form anything so I kept him in the military. Him being in the military would also mean he has to go on dangerous missions (that's why he was sent to Xing to relocate the Ishbalans), that his life is threatened, just like Maes, so more conflict. Also, Edward is already famous so I upped his profile by making him a General, celebrated as a war hero to make him stand out more in the public, this created a way for someone to try and get revenge against him and Elysia can save him in a way, really stressing the fact that Edward is always in danger and that one day his luck could run out. I didn't want Edward saving any damsels in distress in this story (actually he really do that much anyway in the manga). The focus was not Elysia's safety but Edward's and what would happen if he were hurt/killed and her being in love with him and how that could cause a strain in their relationship. Also, to make it plausible that Elysia and her mother would still be involved in the military in some way, Mustang would have to be Fuhrer and treat Gracia and Elysia almost as a royal family because of Maes.
Another thing, for Edward to fall for Elysia, there had to be a reason he and Winry didn't get together and I wanted more than just his feelings not being that strong for Winry. I don't think a sixteen/seventeen year old knows what they want at that age but over time I'm sure they would have developed feelings for each other but I had to take that time away by separating them. Also to add to the conflict between Edward and Elysia, I just had to pile it on by having Edward do things that were strictly out of character of his seventeen year old self, such as sleeping around, smoking, drinking. People do change but it takes something drastic to cause that change, especially in someone like Edward.
The only plausible thing for all that was a war. He started some of these things to fit in, to escape, to handle the stress then they just became a habit and he just saw no reason to change (it was also a way to get back at Mustang, to show that the great Fullmetal Alchemist is not so perfect, the teenage rebellious streak in him), he was happy with things as they were, until Elysia came around and he realized he wanted a little more for himself. I should be thanking Hiromu Arakawa for the Drachman attack on Briggs in the manga. That's what inspired the war to throw Edward into.
I also went the route of not having everyone marry each other in the story. From my experience not all the high school sweet hearts I went to school with got married. (In a way you can consider FMA as high school because when the story ends there is an after, just like high school graduation) My own husband and I didn't even grow up in the same town. Most of my friends and relatives live in different towns. We all don't live happily ever after together in the same town. Al found someone else, an OC I created and Winry too. That's what usually happens in real life. After high school some people go off to college, others don't, you meet new people but you still keep in touch with those that mean the most to you. The thing is we all lead our own lives and meet those new people so why can't it happen in FMA as well.
In case you haven't noticed by now the 2 stories mostly take off from the manga. I refer to the manga for the FMA time line up to chapter 80 where I then take it from there and steer the story in a different direction in order to come up with Elysia and the General and The Drachman War. Though there are chapters beyond 80 that don't really conflict with my 2 stories but I started writing them before (Warning! Manga spoiler) the whole promised day stuff that's cropped up in recent chapters and is a big plot point.
Anime and manga fans will notice that I've included details from the anime not used in the manga, such as Edward's fear of needles and the big one, Russell Tringum! Since those things don't necessary change anything with the manga plot or create complications with my story I went ahead and included them. It just creates a lot more for me to work with and make this story as rich with detail as possible and created lots of conflict. I love conflict! I thrive on it in order to write these stories. Conflict! Conflict! Conflict! Conflict! I can't get enough of it! Anyways, hopefully it'll spark interest for the anime viewers to check out the manga if they haven't done so.
Edward shooting the Drachman in the back (Chapter 9): I wanted Edward to do something that reminded him of what he did with Kimbley to get Al's body back, therefore getting him to confess to Havoc what happened in Chapter 11. Also, in Elysia and the General, Edward tells Elysia that there are a lot of things he is not proud of, obviously using Kimbley as a sacrifice is one of them, along with shooting the Drachman in the back as well as the other bad habits he picked up during the war, though he will not give up smoking and drinking will be done casually.
I didn't really want Edward to cry at all in this story. He never did in the manga. But he was under a lot of pressure in this story so the only 2 instances I had him cry was with Al and Izumi, the two people he's the closest to but he's unable to tell them everything.
I never intended to include Russell in this story when I first set out to write it. But inspiration for the sequel that's planned needed him so I wrote him in as a rival.
I also never intended to include Lin in this story too! But I had always imagined he was involved with helping the Amestrians fight the Drachmans and always had in mind that Edward helped with Lin's succession war. After writing about Edward's ordeal in North City when the Drachmans were going to use him as a hostage I had meant to wind the story down to end it. I have no idea now where I came up with including Lin and another situation for Edward to deal with. It may have been with the recent manga updates (Warning! Manga spoiler) when Ran Fan reappeared with her automail arm. Then the wheels started spinning by giving her and Edward something in common and then that lead to Edward wondering if he can trust Lin and pushing it further when Lin suggests Ed give himself up to the Drachmans and have to endure something even worse than he did in North City with not a whole lot of time passing in between the two events. Lin too is important to the sequel and as I wrote him in I found that it would reflect nicely in the sequel some doubts regarding Lin's intentions.
Chapter 62: I didn't even wonder why Winry's boyfriend, Henri wasn't fighting in the war until a reader brought it up in a review for the previous Chapter so included an explanation that hadn't been planned for.
Chapter 68: Never intended to reveal my backstory from the manga that I twisted around to bring Edward to this point for The Drachman War. Of course I had to have something in order to instigate the war and why Edward would leave but as to who fought which humunculi, etc., that wasn't what I wanted to focus on for this story. But when I brought Lin in I didn't intend for him to still be a homunculus so had to explain why he wasn't anymore because Ed would surely want to know how it was done. So Lin's revelation prompted me to dust off the backstory for The Drachman War because in return, he would surely want to know how Ed ended up going to war and Mustang becoming Fuhrer.
Chapter 78: A bit far-fetched but I thought it would be funny to have Edward tease Olivier Armstrong. She's so strong and independent and nobody would ever talk to her the way Edward did. This chapter also highlights how Edward's reputation is starting to spread, so it paves the way for Elysia and the General. Can you believe I thought all that up within 15 minutes before waking up the day this chapter was to be posted. I tell you, a lot of these chapters were written like that. I'm amazed I was able to keep up with my schedule at times. I've had some serious writers block that was crushed on the fly.
As I came down to Chapter 78 and 79 I was running out of ideas for the war itself and I was wanting to wrap things up so I could start on the sequel. As I wrote Chapter 79 this poem came to mind:
This is the way the world ends
Thought it was a good way to end the Drachman War, similarly to the way I had Mustang become Fuhrer, he sat back and waited. So I didn't write about any huge bombardments or forlorn hope (which I really wanted to include in this story somehow as a nod to the Sharpe series by Bernard Cornwell that I enjoy so much).
Influences for themes, situations, scenes found in the story:
Chapter 9, taking out the gun: Inspired by a situation in the movie The Big Red One, about WW2 GIs. In one particular part a squad is to take out a tank, hidden in a shack and using Italian peasant women working around the shack as cover. In the movie they take out the Germans more quietly with snipers but I wanted Edward to take out a gun in this story so adapted the idea to become Chapter 9.
Chapter 15, a technique Edward uses to attack the Drachmans: "Then we attack in a sweeping motion, like a door swinging from the right to close in on them." Inspired by the movie Gettysburg, Colonel Chamberlain during the battle of Little Round Top. This was before I read The Killer Angels. I looked up a clip on YouTube to see exactly how it's explained.
Chapter 22 (the mine field incident) and the middle of Chapter 46 (where Edward ends up giving Russell command of the artillery): Both were inspired by the movie Kelly's Heroes. In the movie, also based during WW2, a group of "treasure hunters" go beyond the allied lines into German held territory to grab a stash of gold. Along the way the rag tag group that's involved end up crossing through a mine field and one guy bites it (for my story I killed off Sergeant Sharpe) and they get out of the mine field by probing with their bayonets until they get to the path someone ahead of them had already walked along. Earlier in the movie a Sergeant is yelling at an artillery commander that they're being bombarded by their own shells which inspired me to write the second half of Chapter 46.
Chapter 52, Locke defending Edward: I was in the middle of reading Ayn Rand's, Atlas Shrugged, so there's a lot of influence from that book that made it's way into Locke's opinion of Edward. I highly suggest reading Atlas Shrugged, if you have the patience. That's a monster of a book! I never would have been able to handle that thing in high school (obviously I'm a bit older with this hint of my age) but I can now but it still takes a lot to really focus on the story. Did I mention the copy I have is over a 1,000 pages long! With tiny words and hardly any margins! There's also a 20 page speech that in the story takes 3 hours long to listen to. It'll probably take me a week to read. Read at your own risk. It's a great story but just prepare yourself for a long read.
Chapter 71: Around this time I was reading The Killer Angels by Michael Shaara. It's an account of the Battle of Gettysburg. I was heavily influenced by Lee and Longstreets relationship and how Lee worries about his General and wants him to stay out of the line of fire. Also Colonel Chamberlain worrying about his brother during the Battle of Little Round Top. It's in this chapter I have Havoc admit he thinks of Edward as a brother and it wasn't originally planned to ever been said out loud but I had to do it. It's the books fault.
The events from The Drachman War that were pre-written or conceived during the writing of Elsyia and the General:
Chapter 11 (it didn't have much to do with the backstory for Elysia and the General, it was a scene that popped in my head)
Edward's relationship with Erika, the scene where they parted was pre-written during Elysia and the General. It had to be because Elysia asked what Erika made Edward promise when she left.
Edward taken hostage by the 3 Drachmans in North City. There's a scene in Elysia and the General where Elysia sneaks up on Edward and he grabs her, then feeling guilty for being so rough explains how he was ambushed once (Chapter 29).
Edward seeing Winry again after 2 years of not talking to each other (see Chapter 7 of Elysia and the General to know why it had to be pre-written)
Sergeant Sharpe - named after the character Richard Sharpe of the Sharpe series written by Bernard Cornwell.
Lieutenant Kestrel - at the time I wrote him in the story there was a nest of hawks hanging around my neighborhood. They would be up around 6am and 4 of them would be hanging out on the telephone pole outside my house. They were extremely loud but fun to watch. I couldn't use the name Hawk for the Lieutenant, it was already taken (darn that Riza Hawkeye!) so I went looking for a similar bird of prey for him.
Edward was under the command of a Colonel Chamberlain at one point (see Chapter 17). Of course I got the name from the real Colonel Chamberlain in Gettysburg. I have a real obsession with that guy.
Sergeants Hood and Picket, added to Edward's command in Chapter 27 were named after famous Civil War Generals.
The 2 alchemist that came along with Russell in Chapter 30, I think I mentioned one by name but I don't think I did the other. Anyways, they were named Majors Parker and Osbourne, named after Peter Parker and Harry Osbourne from Spiderman.
All About The Black Prince!
This story idea came from a question posted in a review by DemonRaily (back when I was writing Elysia and the General so almost a year ago!) asking if there was some evil left in my version of FMA. It got the wheels turning and it took a while to form a solid idea I would be happy with. In case you didn't notice, in The Drachman War it was never said directly that Envy and Greed were destroyed. Edward just assumed they were but neither Mustang or Lin ever confirmed this and Edward never questioned it. He never thought he'd have to worry about the homunculi again. So, the reason I never specifically said how Envy and Greed were destroyed was in anticipation of The Black Prince if I had a solid enough outline to write a complete story.
I played with the idea of Havoc turning on Ed but for obvious reasons I couldn't bring myself to do it. So with Havoc out I needed someone else as an antagonist and I didn't want an OC. That's where Russell came to mind and I wasn't too far into The Drachman War so it was easy to write him in and create this conflict between him and Ed. Russell was written into The Drachman War specifically with him playing a big role in The Black Prince. So of course, writing him into DW created some challenges like what would possibly come between Russell and Ed to create this animosity. A girl of course! They were teenagers at the time! lol Also, jealousy played a big part as well.
What does the title "The Black Prince" mean? Google it! The first search result should be a wikipedia entry. If you click on the link and read you'll get a sense of why I chose this particular title and some of the parallels between Edward and the real Black Prince. You'll also see the significance of naming Edward's son, Richard. After writing Chapters 17-19 I was finally convinced The Black Prince was the best title for this story. Also, my fab reviewer LadyWordSmith also made a nice observation about the title as well. Here are her words:
"I'd say the end of Black Prince worked quite well. :) Kind of the end of an era of Ed 'as' Amestris' version of their war Prince. ;) Without killing him! It makes the name fit so well. :) He will never be king (or Fuhrer). heehee... "
A comment regarding Chapter 15: Since Edward was tied to Al while he was in the Gate, Edward's growth was slowed because 1) I imagine him as a late bloomer and 2) he was supporting two growing boys. With Al supporting Kimbley, it wasn't felt as much since Kimbley was already a grown man who only needed basic sustenance. They also shared knowledge. Kimbley knew how to make a stone while in the Gate while Al knew how to blow things up. They each lost that knowledge when Kimbley returned from the Gate, so he wasn't necessary for creating the stones, only Envy knew how exactly along with the Elric brothers.
A reader asked in a review where I got my inspiration. I wrote back an answer (which is actually a much shorter version of my profile since I'm inspired by many things) but I wanted to add to it. Playing solitaire helped a lot. Whenever I got stuck I'd play solitaire and somehow in the middle of a game I'd come up with something. Playing solitaire allowed me to focus on the game but still keep my mind open and blank. Somehow I was very receptive for inspiration. I have another technique that has helped me as well but it's too much information to be sharing ;)
Chapter 21: Al's iron transmutation circle. I borrowed this idea from The Dark Is Rising which is a story I'd like to try my hand at writing a fanfic for.
Chapter 24: The backstabbing! (And not just in Chapter 24) Was highly influenced by The Pirates of the Carribean movies. They did a lot of that.
I wrote in The Drachman War that Edward never saw Erika again. My lovely reader Misty Nala pointed that out in her Chapter 7 review when I brought Erika back so the following chapter I had to include a line where Edward thought he'd never see her again. See, I take into consideration my reviewers. They are the ones to help me spot what I've missed. (I admit, I went back and edited the chapter where I wrote Edward never saw Erika again, lol)
I've tried to avoid delving too much into Mustang and Lin's psyche. There are a couple of chapters that have shown what they are thinking or feeling but I try to make their actions and words convey enough to show what they are thinking. To me they've basically sold their souls to get whatever needs to be done. They are ready to accept responsibility and not likely to apologize for their decisions. I would have loved to have stayed out of their heads throughout my three FMA stories but it couldn't be helped at times. But the idea of doing something like that is why I never wrote what Richard was thinking or feeling. I've tried to write him from someone else's point of view and to just give general descriptions of what he was doing or the expressions on his face. This is the one character I really focused on developing with just his actions and words. I'm thinking of writing a sequel to The Black Prince. I'd like to show how Edward and Richard have bonded and to show how Richard has advanced in his military career. It will probably be this new story where I delve into Richard's mind and feelings.
The beginning of Chapter 39 was to start with a description of a shoulder problem I used to get from a previous job. The muscles in my back, between my neck and shoulder would get so tense and sore that whenever my boyfriend (now husband) breathed on that spot I would cringe and the muscle would spasm. But I don't know if anyone has every experienced that before so as I edited it I happened to look out the window and saw that is was foggy outside. All I could see was the line of a small rise with some weeds growing and instead of the normal hills in the distance it was just white mist with the trees and hill line as a faint shadow. The view was my inspiration for the opening lines of Chapter 39. I still kept the spasm part because when it's real fricken cold your back does do that. Or maybe just mine and it's still suffering from the tense muscle that only gets slightly sore about once every couple weeks since I work at a computer all day.
Also regarding Chapter 39, thank goodness for the last 2 chapters of the FMA manga that had come out before this chapter was written. That along with some of the zombie movies I've seen really helped with this chapter and the next to come.
Chapter 43, breaking Mustang's leg was inspired by the book Beat the Reaper by Jeff Bezos. Much more gruesomely done to the main character in the book ;)
Chapter 51, conversation between Mustang and Al emphasizes Mustang's worries about returning Edward to Al in The Drachman War chapter 19 when he's getting onto Havoc's case about corrupting Ed. Also Mustang's comments about Amestris' education system was influenced by President Barack Obama who 2 days before I posted the chapter had started to tackle education in the US and had outlined his plans to do so.
Chapter 53, Edward and Elysia sitting on the train. Took a ride on BART over to San Francisco one weekend. On the way back there was a cute couple sitting together. I wanted to capture what I saw that day for Edward and Elysia.
For the FMA stories, I wrote Elysia and the General first, then the Drachman War but now that they are both written they can be read in the proper order:
1. The Drachman War (Complete)
2. Elysia and the General (Complete)
3. The Black Prince (Complete)
Some of my favorite books:
The Sharpe Series by Bernard Cornwell (There are over a dozen novels in this series)
Captain Alatriste & Purity of Blood by Arturo Perez-Reverte
Any of the Horatio Hornblower books by C.S. Forester
Master and Commander (Aubrey Maturin Series) by Patrick O'Brian
The Three Musketeers by Alexandre Dumas
The Fountainhead by Ayn Rand
The Forever War by Joe Haldeman
The Alchemist by Paulo Coelho (Now that is some great writing. There's a passage in The Alchemist that was just so beautiful I just sat there reading with this big goofy smile on my face because it just made me so happy to read such wonderful words. You must read it!)
Here are my 3 rules that I follow when posting here on fanfic:
1. Never publish a story unless there's a beginning, middle and end plotted out (not necessarily written, I do my best writing under pressure of my posting deadlines, see #2)
My username here on fanfic is actually for my cat (seen in image) who we did name after Kyo (seen in image too!) from Fruits Basket. Unfortunately, furry white and gray Kyo is no longer with us. He was attacked by a dog and had to be put to sleep.
7/2004 - 5/2008
You were the coolest cat ever and I miss you!
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